One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Ricky1024
This is a Senryu about Shipping Stones.
Rich in memories
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This is something all children try at least once in their life when they're next to the water.
The water silent would not be as much as a ripple.
You have to find flat stones because they skip better especially if they're about the size of a seashell.
The trick is when you throw them to curve your wrist Archer wrist and then hit the surface just right and I'll pop up several times.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
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This is a Senryu about Shipping Stones.
Rich in memories
...
This is something all children try at least once in their life when they're next to the water.
The water silent would not be as much as a ripple.
You have to find flat stones because they skip better especially if they're about the size of a seashell.
The trick is when you throw them to curve your wrist Archer wrist and then hit the surface just right and I'll pop up several times.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy Sensei
Word Weaver
Comment from AP Apgar
I like this modern Senryu poem- good picture presentation- good connection between lines - very simple poem - connects the action to a fond memory of a father- wish all children had these kinds of memories!! Even a few would be nice-Good Job AP
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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I like this modern Senryu poem- good picture presentation- good connection between lines - very simple poem - connects the action to a fond memory of a father- wish all children had these kinds of memories!! Even a few would be nice-Good Job AP
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy Sensei
Word Weaver
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It sounds like you are remembering your Father and the good times you had together. I think Christmas is a time when we reflect on those who are no longer with us, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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It sounds like you are remembering your Father and the good times you had together. I think Christmas is a time when we reflect on those who are no longer with us, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback. Happy Holidays!
Gypsy hugs
Sensei Word Weaver
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi MariVal,
This makes you see the changes that occur after losing a father. It shows you how simple things can bring back memories. I like the alliteration and metaphor.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Merry Christmas
Joan
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Hi MariVal,
This makes you see the changes that occur after losing a father. It shows you how simple things can bring back memories. I like the alliteration and metaphor.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Merry Christmas
Joan
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Joan,
Thank you very much, (*÷*) I really appreciate your helpful feedback, Also, that you took the time to read and review my poem. Happy Holidays!!! Merry Christmas!!!
Gypsy Sensei
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You're very welcome on all accounts, MariVal.
Joan
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Gypsy. Well done on this deep meaningful write. I like the idea of skipping stones bringing back memories. Well said!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Hello Gypsy. Well done on this deep meaningful write. I like the idea of skipping stones bringing back memories. Well said!!
Melissa
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Melissa,
Thank you very much, (*÷*) I really appreciate your helpful feedback, Also, that you took the time to read and review my poem. Happy Holidays!!! Merry Christmas!!!
Gypsy Sensei
Comment from aryr
What a beautiful senryu, Gypsy. The picture was wonderful as were your words of remembrance for Helen. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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What a beautiful senryu, Gypsy. The picture was wonderful as were your words of remembrance for Helen. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much, Aryr, it's so good to hear from you. Blessed be and hugs
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can remember visiting with my grandparents and going down to the creek and skipping stones with Grandpa and Dad. Those were good times. Thank you for bringing back that memory.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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I can remember visiting with my grandparents and going down to the creek and skipping stones with Grandpa and Dad. Those were good times. Thank you for bringing back that memory.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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That's what haiku is about. I'm happy it brought good memories. Thank you very much, Barbara,.
Gypsy
Hugs!
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
Good memories of family are exhibited in your short poem. While I did skip stones, I did not do with my Dad or children. Maybe I should add to my bucket list for my grandchildren!
Mark
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Gypsy,
Good memories of family are exhibited in your short poem. While I did skip stones, I did not do with my Dad or children. Maybe I should add to my bucket list for my grandchildren!
Mark
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much, Mark
Gypsy
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu, Skipping Stones, presented with a 3-2-5 formatting, seems to represent the effects your father may have had at different times in your life. That what I get from this.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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This senryu, Skipping Stones, presented with a 3-2-5 formatting, seems to represent the effects your father may have had at different times in your life. That what I get from this.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Yes, you are right. Thank you very much, Bill, it's so good to hear from you.
Gypsy
Comment from strandregs
I like this it is a heart warming feeling in few words.
Dad is always a year jerker either for being good or being bad.
I hope feebly I am remembered as a good dad. :-))X.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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I like this it is a heart warming feeling in few words.
Dad is always a year jerker either for being good or being bad.
I hope feebly I am remembered as a good dad. :-))X.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much, it's so good to hear from you.
Gypsy
