Death By Murder
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Death By Murder - Chap 25"A jewel heist, rival gangs and a cold case.
24 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Carol, that was a fast paced new chapter to your book. Crissy seems to go from one crisis to the other. I love the story. Now what. I feel she might be in grave danger. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Oh, Carol, that was a fast paced new chapter to your book. Crissy seems to go from one crisis to the other. I love the story. Now what. I feel she might be in grave danger. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Yes, her situation is a hot plate at the moment.... because he inquisitive reporter mind probably won't let her continue her drive home and leave it to the law enforcement.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Jay Squires
Well, I'm liking this story more and more, Carol. Crissy is a vibrant character with a combination of toughness and innocence. That's a great combination for a reader. Here are a couple of things I noted as I read along:
"Until stumbling onto an unsuspecting break, ..." [I believe it would be "unsuspected " break. Otherwise, it would be the "break" that wasn't expecting it, not Crissy.]
Blood still tainted the surrounding water red. [ Since you're talking about the color of the water, I think the word you intended is "tinted".]
These two minor oversights certainly don't detract from your fine chapter, Carol.
Jay
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Well, I'm liking this story more and more, Carol. Crissy is a vibrant character with a combination of toughness and innocence. That's a great combination for a reader. Here are a couple of things I noted as I read along:
"Until stumbling onto an unsuspecting break, ..." [I believe it would be "unsuspected " break. Otherwise, it would be the "break" that wasn't expecting it, not Crissy.]
Blood still tainted the surrounding water red. [ Since you're talking about the color of the water, I think the word you intended is "tinted".]
These two minor oversights certainly don't detract from your fine chapter, Carol.
Jay
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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It's 5:30 AM and Jay Squires has made my day already. I am smiling and feeling very blessed that such a talented person would find my story to appealing. Thank you so much!
I have fixed my "oops" and as always I appreciate any time someone sees what this old lady did not.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
A car and two people all bullet riddled and dead, yes, the car's dead too. The FBI will be showing up and as ineffectively late as always. But never fear, they always get their man, men, or otherwise, they say. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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A car and two people all bullet riddled and dead, yes, the car's dead too. The FBI will be showing up and as ineffectively late as always. But never fear, they always get their man, men, or otherwise, they say. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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There's so much more to this story to unfold but yes I did need to bring my FBI agent into the fold. I hope the story to tie him in was plausible to the reader. Thanks! Hope all is well with you!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
My cowboy's back. I am so glad he was found is going to help a young lady. I can't wait until they meet. I am enjoying this story, a lot, and I am positive it just got a lot better. LOL Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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My cowboy's back. I am so glad he was found is going to help a young lady. I can't wait until they meet. I am enjoying this story, a lot, and I am positive it just got a lot better. LOL Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Good morning, Barbara
I couldn't wait to see your reaction to the cowboy's return. Unfortunately, I'm a bit under the weather and behind as usual. Just wondering if you approved of how the two chapters drew him into the action. Did it sound plausible?
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ricky1024
" Death by MurdecChsp 25" was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
The Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed week.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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" Death by MurdecChsp 25" was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
The Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed week.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Thank you for enjoying the story and my characters. I appreciate it very much. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Lots of action and very fast paced. The dialogue are credible and like in chapter 24, this one also ends with a bang. That's what makes stories a page turner!
Great job!!
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Lots of action and very fast paced. The dialogue are credible and like in chapter 24, this one also ends with a bang. That's what makes stories a page turner!
Great job!!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Thank you for enjoying the story and my characters. I appreciate it very much. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Kayte Ray
Great imagery that makes it easy for the reader to become engaged in your work. Wonderful graphic and font choices that make the read more enjoyable. You created some clear pictures here and the writing flows nicely.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2022
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Great imagery that makes it easy for the reader to become engaged in your work. Wonderful graphic and font choices that make the read more enjoyable. You created some clear pictures here and the writing flows nicely.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2022
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Good morning, Kayte
Thank you for stopping by to catch a chapter of my story. I am so blessed to have you enjoy my writing and find it entertaining. My sincere appreciation for your interest and the shiny stars. I hope you will continue to follow.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Heather Knight
First of all, I don't remember if I've already told you but I love the title of your book. Titles, in my opinion are extremely important.
As usual I have enjoyed your dialogues and your short paragraphs. For some reason, I don't like very long ones.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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First of all, I don't remember if I've already told you but I love the title of your book. Titles, in my opinion are extremely important.
As usual I have enjoyed your dialogues and your short paragraphs. For some reason, I don't like very long ones.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much, Heather. I tend to keep the paragraphs short for several reasons. It gives the eyes a moment to catch up and the reader a quick breather before continuing (if any of that makes any sense). I for one tend to get lost when the writing goes on and on without a break. Ild age I guess.
Smiles, Carol
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It makes perfect sense. I feel exactly the same way.
Comment from Shirley McLain
OK, I'm lost. Is this a totally different story, or have we added a new characters? Whatever it is, you did a great job. This chapter is full of suspense and kept me reading to the last word. Have a great day. Shirley
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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OK, I'm lost. Is this a totally different story, or have we added a new characters? Whatever it is, you did a great job. This chapter is full of suspense and kept me reading to the last word. Have a great day. Shirley
Comment Written 14-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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Sorry to confuse you, Shirley. I decided having the cops, the gangsters, and Mason and Paddy chasing after Lance and Bennie was too much so I had to have them meet their demise. So many who are familiar with my other novels wanted the Cowboy - FBI agent Garth to return and I needed to somehow connect him to the crime...thus Crissy entered the picture. I hope that clears it up a little bit for you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
We've been dealing with the bad guys for a while. It is good to have Garth back on the scene. Chrissy is a new character in this story. I wonder if she will be a threat to Garth's and his partner's romance. I'm looking forward to the next episode.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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We've been dealing with the bad guys for a while. It is good to have Garth back on the scene. Chrissy is a new character in this story. I wonder if she will be a threat to Garth's and his partner's romance. I'm looking forward to the next episode.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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If you remember...this novel is taking place before the time he met Allie so a fling might be possible. LOL One never knows as we travel the corridors of my mind. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Beth. Appreciate it!
Smiles, Carol
