The Yin And Yang Of War
For Tony and Jim.28 total reviews
Comment from Heather Knight
You are so right. The IWW was supposed to be the war to end all wars, but it never happened. We don't learn from our past mistakes.
And the problem is the war doesn't end in the front, and soldier carry their terrible scars home with them.
Thanks for sharing your beautiful poem.
You are so right. The IWW was supposed to be the war to end all wars, but it never happened. We don't learn from our past mistakes.
And the problem is the war doesn't end in the front, and soldier carry their terrible scars home with them.
Thanks for sharing your beautiful poem.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
Comment from Dawn Munro
Your verse brings back the memories, and the deep sorrow, while I was too young to have been involved any other way... As a Canadian, I was not one who would be drafted anyway, but it sickened me and still does.
Powerful!
"Can insights deep within the Yin
Begin the Yang's defeat of sin?" ... doubtful ... *sigh*
Your verse brings back the memories, and the deep sorrow, while I was too young to have been involved any other way... As a Canadian, I was not one who would be drafted anyway, but it sickened me and still does.
Powerful!
"Can insights deep within the Yin
Begin the Yang's defeat of sin?" ... doubtful ... *sigh*
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
Comment from Mario PIERRE
I relished your poem, hated the disastrous toll our soldiers endured of course. I am convinced that war is a tool for politicians to advance their agenda. I believe your poem is in perfect iambic tetrameter.
Very profound and cuts like a sword.
Thanks so much for sharing
Mario
I relished your poem, hated the disastrous toll our soldiers endured of course. I am convinced that war is a tool for politicians to advance their agenda. I believe your poem is in perfect iambic tetrameter.
Very profound and cuts like a sword.
Thanks so much for sharing
Mario
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Outstanding in so many ways. Terrific meter and rhyme. But its poignancy and messaging is what sets this poem at a higher level. I'm going to suggest one small tweak. To preserve your perfect 8 beat lines, in the first line of the final quatrain, change "every" to "ev'ry". Poets have been using this modification, when needed, for centuries so I think its OK for you to do it too. Well done!
Outstanding in so many ways. Terrific meter and rhyme. But its poignancy and messaging is what sets this poem at a higher level. I'm going to suggest one small tweak. To preserve your perfect 8 beat lines, in the first line of the final quatrain, change "every" to "ev'ry". Poets have been using this modification, when needed, for centuries so I think its OK for you to do it too. Well done!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The war continues for some after they return home as war destroys people's lives mentally and physically. The World War I soldiers were so physically maimed that mental issues were not considered as important at the time. We know now that the human brain suffers from the battle scars of war. Your poem has some hard hitting facts that are hard to escape from here Tom. I am so sorry to hear about these soldiers who could no longer cope with life at home after seeing such terrible suffering in war. I know a little history of that war and it was one that could never be won and went on longer than it should have, a blot in history that has stained the Government of the time, a poignant write, love Dolly x
The war continues for some after they return home as war destroys people's lives mentally and physically. The World War I soldiers were so physically maimed that mental issues were not considered as important at the time. We know now that the human brain suffers from the battle scars of war. Your poem has some hard hitting facts that are hard to escape from here Tom. I am so sorry to hear about these soldiers who could no longer cope with life at home after seeing such terrible suffering in war. I know a little history of that war and it was one that could never be won and went on longer than it should have, a blot in history that has stained the Government of the time, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, ee, with your poem about the
atrocities of war both during and after. Your lines
read smoothly with good rhymes and created great,
but sad imagery. Yes, those politicians who continue
to make never think about those who do the fighting
for them while they sit in their ivory towers. Your details,
though stark and true, were profoundly sad to think many
came home alive but committed suicide later.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
You did a great job, ee, with your poem about the
atrocities of war both during and after. Your lines
read smoothly with good rhymes and created great,
but sad imagery. Yes, those politicians who continue
to make never think about those who do the fighting
for them while they sit in their ivory towers. Your details,
though stark and true, were profoundly sad to think many
came home alive but committed suicide later.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This verse explores the physical effects form war, but too often missed are the psychiatric and psychological devastation left behind.
I see veterans often in my area, and they seem to be either in a wheelchair looking unkempt or walking down the street talking to themselves.
Shame on our governmental system.
Your phraseology is excellent.
I appreciate the rhyme pattern and rhymes that flow like water.
Happy holidays.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
This verse explores the physical effects form war, but too often missed are the psychiatric and psychological devastation left behind.
I see veterans often in my area, and they seem to be either in a wheelchair looking unkempt or walking down the street talking to themselves.
Shame on our governmental system.
Your phraseology is excellent.
I appreciate the rhyme pattern and rhymes that flow like water.
Happy holidays.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
Comment from Ricky1024
Even though (in the early) Seventies when Nixon enacted a draft for Vietnam.
I was eligible because of my age but not because of my physical.
Yes, since I had flat feet.
(4-F) I was denied, Along with my three brothers to serve.
...
Now, fifty years later.
I always thought back about that and realized that it was probably a blessing in disguise.
Cuz at least one of us would have died over there.
...
I like the way this went so I gave it a sixer and thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky1024
Even though (in the early) Seventies when Nixon enacted a draft for Vietnam.
I was eligible because of my age but not because of my physical.
Yes, since I had flat feet.
(4-F) I was denied, Along with my three brothers to serve.
...
Now, fifty years later.
I always thought back about that and realized that it was probably a blessing in disguise.
Cuz at least one of us would have died over there.
...
I like the way this went so I gave it a sixer and thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022