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A unique friendship affects the course of 2 lives.
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Comment from
Sarah Das Gupta
Obviously, Abby is very bright and naturally curious. It is also credible that she should turn to adults for company, as she finds it difficult with her peers. You are building up her character well. I think you could cut out some of the details of contract bridge which do not progress the narrative. The change of narrator to the grandfather needs to be a smoother transition I feel. Looking forward to reading on!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
Thanks for the good review. I'm delighted that you continue to read this story, Sarah. I hope it maintains your interest to the end.
Each draft I write, the bridge scenes get smaller and smaller. This is a frequent suggestion I get. Still not enough, I guess :(
reply by Sarah Das Gupta on 08-Dec-2022
Yes, my daughter who is a professional writer, is always telling me to 'edit,edit'!
Comment from
jmdg1954
Looks like Abby found a new interest for the time being. I see the bond she has with her grandpa getting stronger. That happens when something new is introduced into the relationship.
Well composed and written out.
John
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
Thank you for the good review, John. This new interest will help cement her bond with E.J. in Part 2 coming soon.
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