Workaday World
2 line essence poem6 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I think this is a marvellous entry in this essence two line poetry contest, you must be English, lorry gave that away. Welcome to fanstory, I think you'll enjoy your time here, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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I think this is a marvellous entry in this essence two line poetry contest, you must be English, lorry gave that away. Welcome to fanstory, I think you'll enjoy your time here, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Roy. Cheers!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A rhyming two line poem and this may be the start of your journey on Fanstory and I wish you luck and welcome you to the party, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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A rhyming two line poem and this may be the start of your journey on Fanstory and I wish you luck and welcome you to the party, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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Thanks for your kind words, Dolly!
Comment from Thomas Blanks
Rusty and beat-up truck
Dusty quarry - it's stuck
The UK or Australia? I Americanized your post and changed lorry to truck. If you're sensitive about lorry, I'm sorry. I don't actually give a truck. Congrats on your first post.
Cheers,
Thomas
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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Rusty and beat-up truck
Dusty quarry - it's stuck
The UK or Australia? I Americanized your post and changed lorry to truck. If you're sensitive about lorry, I'm sorry. I don't actually give a truck. Congrats on your first post.
Cheers,
Thomas
Comment Written 28-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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Thanks, Thomas, I envisioned the lorrytruck to be somewhere in England!
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I was just messing with you, Man!
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For sure, cool!
Comment from prettybluebirds
Welcome to FanStory, where all of us wannabe writers hang out. Just kidding. There are a lot of lovely folks on this site who will assist you in any way they can. Your poem is well done. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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Welcome to FanStory, where all of us wannabe writers hang out. Just kidding. There are a lot of lovely folks on this site who will assist you in any way they can. Your poem is well done. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much for the encouragement!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-Welcome to FS. Hope you enjoy it.
-You wrote a good poem for the contest.
-It is a good topic to write about.
-Effective imagery and rhyme,
plus the syllable count is good.
-You create a good word picture
of the lorry stuck in the quarry!
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-Welcome to FS. Hope you enjoy it.
-You wrote a good poem for the contest.
-It is a good topic to write about.
-Effective imagery and rhyme,
plus the syllable count is good.
-You create a good word picture
of the lorry stuck in the quarry!
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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Wonderful to get such positive feedback from you, Pam!
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You are very welcome, D.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, D, with your contest entry.
Your rhymes were correct and in the right places.
Your syllable count's correct too. I liked the picture
you paired with your work.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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You did a great job, D, with your contest entry.
Your rhymes were correct and in the right places.
Your syllable count's correct too. I liked the picture
you paired with your work.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 28-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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Jan, I'm grateful for your feedback!