Light Glides In On Tide
a 5-7-5 poem15 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is another fantastic great piece with some very well-placed words. It's enjoyable. Here is number fifteen for this one!
I shall continue.
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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2024
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This is another fantastic great piece with some very well-placed words. It's enjoyable. Here is number fifteen for this one!
I shall continue.
D
Comment Written 12-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2024
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Thank you for your excellent words and review.
Comment from moonsunrise
I really enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 poem. The image selection is calming yet striking.
Very nicely written.
light glides in on tide
avocet hides in shadows
lace-leaf sea grape tree
I could see the avocet hiding in the shadows in my imagination.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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I really enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 poem. The image selection is calming yet striking.
Very nicely written.
light glides in on tide
avocet hides in shadows
lace-leaf sea grape tree
I could see the avocet hiding in the shadows in my imagination.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your nice review.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The illustration certainly enhances the poem. In accordance with the
traditional Haiku, the image is nature related and leaves a clear image for the reader;
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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The illustration certainly enhances the poem. In accordance with the
traditional Haiku, the image is nature related and leaves a clear image for the reader;
Comment Written 29-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your five star review.
Comment from Celyn
This poem follows the rules of the 5-7-5 contest correctly and has a sort of wistful feel to it. I like it but, to me, it reads a bit odd without the definite articles before 'tide' and 'shadows' . I know that you have left them out to make the syllable count correct but I do think that it makes the poem sound a bit odd.
Good luck with it
Celyn
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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This poem follows the rules of the 5-7-5 contest correctly and has a sort of wistful feel to it. I like it but, to me, it reads a bit odd without the definite articles before 'tide' and 'shadows' . I know that you have left them out to make the syllable count correct but I do think that it makes the poem sound a bit odd.
Good luck with it
Celyn
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Comment from Zue65
I also enjoyed reading this piece. The picture complements well the message intended by the author for the readers. It complied with the syllabification requirements of a 575 poetry. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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I also enjoyed reading this piece. The picture complements well the message intended by the author for the readers. It complied with the syllabification requirements of a 575 poetry. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Comment from judiverse
Lovely presentation. Great imagery of the light gliding in on the tide. The picture illustrates that, too. The rhyme of glides and tide is excellent bonus. Last line is very colorful and descript of the tree. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Lovely presentation. Great imagery of the light gliding in on the tide. The picture illustrates that, too. The rhyme of glides and tide is excellent bonus. Last line is very colorful and descript of the tree. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your generous review!
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from royowen
What a beautiful scene set for the poem to produce something wonderful in its language rich declaration. The artwork probably wasn't necessary, but a great embellishment irrespective, well done Crystie, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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What a beautiful scene set for the poem to produce something wonderful in its language rich declaration. The artwork probably wasn't necessary, but a great embellishment irrespective, well done Crystie, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for an outstanding review.
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Most welcome
Comment from estory
You did a good job using alliterative effects and rhyme effects working in this haiku rhythm and balance to create the music here. Also a really strong nature image of the lacy tree. It's very surreal and dream like, abstract enough to invite multiple interpretations. estory
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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You did a good job using alliterative effects and rhyme effects working in this haiku rhythm and balance to create the music here. Also a really strong nature image of the lacy tree. It's very surreal and dream like, abstract enough to invite multiple interpretations. estory
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you much for your perceptive review.
Comment from Mark D. R.
Chrystie,
Nice overall presentation for this contest entry in my favored poem format. I even know your avocet, which is not typically found in animal picture books (-;
Mark
P.S. I favor centered text lines except for left-aligned Lune poems.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Chrystie,
Nice overall presentation for this contest entry in my favored poem format. I even know your avocet, which is not typically found in animal picture books (-;
Mark
P.S. I favor centered text lines except for left-aligned Lune poems.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Light Glides in on Tide, has the proper formatting and finds the dawn greeting the shadowy shore. The birds seem to wait to be discovered.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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This 5-7-5, Light Glides in on Tide, has the proper formatting and finds the dawn greeting the shadowy shore. The birds seem to wait to be discovered.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing today.
