Helping Hand
Senryu21 total reviews
Comment from Zue65
Oh, I love the metaphor employed in this senryu, the stream of my troubles is consistent with the visual image of stepping stones. The last line sealed the message of the author. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Oh, I love the metaphor employed in this senryu, the stream of my troubles is consistent with the visual image of stepping stones. The last line sealed the message of the author. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thanks a lot for reading and commenting .
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, Sanku.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-The imagery is very good with "stepping stones
in the stream..."
-Effective use of alliteration, as well.
-A very good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, Sanku.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-The imagery is very good with "stepping stones
in the stream..."
-Effective use of alliteration, as well.
-A very good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much for dropping by
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You are welcome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Sanku,
Excellent Senryu for our Japanese Poetry club event. It has a zen feeling to it. Great metaphor of God's love creating stepping stones in your life's path to help you get along. I love the presentation and the satori about God's hands. It reminded me of Michelangelo's 'creation of adam'. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Well done!
Gypsy Word Weaver
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Hello, Sanku,
Excellent Senryu for our Japanese Poetry club event. It has a zen feeling to it. Great metaphor of God's love creating stepping stones in your life's path to help you get along. I love the presentation and the satori about God's hands. It reminded me of Michelangelo's 'creation of adam'. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Well done!
Gypsy Word Weaver
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Thank you or getting that.It was exactly what i had in mind when I wrote about the hand. You are the only one who got the connection.-Santha.
I liked the name Gypsy word weaver.!
Comment from royowen
The Bible writes of the narrow road and the broad road, of course you've cleverly written of the troubles as a stream and those stepping stones of safety we can choose to walk. This is a wonderful modern haiku Santha, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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The Bible writes of the narrow road and the broad road, of course you've cleverly written of the troubles as a stream and those stepping stones of safety we can choose to walk. This is a wonderful modern haiku Santha, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much RoY.God bless you!
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You too
Comment from lyenochka
Love this poem about the Lord watching over us even in the "streams of trouble," He placed stones where we can walk and He keeps holding on to our hands to help us.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Love this poem about the Lord watching over us even in the "streams of trouble," He placed stones where we can walk and He keeps holding on to our hands to help us.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much Helen I am glad you liked this senryu
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a beautifully stated senryu. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated. It is a message that will be uplifting to most readers. The visual fits perfectly. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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This is a beautifully stated senryu. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated. It is a message that will be uplifting to most readers. The visual fits perfectly. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much
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You are welcome.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Perfect description of God's help available for us. I never thought of it as steppingstones, but it is. I love it. Yes, we have trouble, God is there to help us through it. Thank you for sharing this club entry with us.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Perfect description of God's help available for us. I never thought of it as steppingstones, but it is. I love it. Yes, we have trouble, God is there to help us through it. Thank you for sharing this club entry with us.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much for dropping by.I am glad you liked the metaphor.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Thank u for your Sanku. Very nice work. This was enjoyable.
Tough to make points with so few words but you nailed it!
Good work and thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank u for your Sanku. Very nice work. This was enjoyable.
Tough to make points with so few words but you nailed it!
Good work and thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much
Comment from Faith Williams
What a lovely poem. Love the imagery of stepping stones placed in troubling waters of life and God 's hands guiding you over them. Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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What a lovely poem. Love the imagery of stepping stones placed in troubling waters of life and God 's hands guiding you over them. Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a fine Senryu, which I enjoyed very much.
Syllable count and metre - spot on
Presentation - harmonious
Stream imagery - a joy
Much enjoyed Kate xx
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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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This is a fine Senryu, which I enjoyed very much.
Syllable count and metre - spot on
Presentation - harmonious
Stream imagery - a joy
Much enjoyed Kate xx
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much for taking time to read my little poem.
