I Hold You Still
free verse10 total reviews
Comment from Regina Elliott
Hi Bill, this is a heart-rending
and yet uplifting poem about
the love between a couple.
This sad story touches my
heart. Have a peaceful
Thanksgiving with your
family. Blessings ~
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Hi Bill, this is a heart-rending
and yet uplifting poem about
the love between a couple.
This sad story touches my
heart. Have a peaceful
Thanksgiving with your
family. Blessings ~
Comment Written 20-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Regina, for the great review.
Comment from pome lover
Bill, that is really good!
Really meaningful and lovely.
I was scared, at first, that it was your wife or someone you loved.
Was glad to see it was not.
It is a sincere and heartfelt free verse poem and I think it rates a 6.
Katharine
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Bill, that is really good!
Really meaningful and lovely.
I was scared, at first, that it was your wife or someone you loved.
Was glad to see it was not.
It is a sincere and heartfelt free verse poem and I think it rates a 6.
Katharine
Comment Written 20-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Katharine, for giving this a look, and for the great review. Bill
Comment from Wendy G
Very moving free form poem, and written with skill, expressing authentic feelings in a realistic way and without pretention. A sad story, but it is a love story. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Very moving free form poem, and written with skill, expressing authentic feelings in a realistic way and without pretention. A sad story, but it is a love story. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Wendy
Comment from Rena Smith
This was a good poem and having dialogue in it made it a little more interesting. But, I'm wondering when he was having dialogue was his wife still alive or were he just pretending to be talking with her? The poem was also sad but I like that he stayed with her even after she died. It was beautiful.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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This was a good poem and having dialogue in it made it a little more interesting. But, I'm wondering when he was having dialogue was his wife still alive or were he just pretending to be talking with her? The poem was also sad but I like that he stayed with her even after she died. It was beautiful.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Rena
Comment from jessizero
This was sad and moving. It seems more so after learning that this was based on a true story. I liked the repetition of "my dear." Thank you for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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This was sad and moving. It seems more so after learning that this was based on a true story. I liked the repetition of "my dear." Thank you for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Jessizero
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry to the free form contest. The text is for sure large enough. Whew! That's a tragic way to die. You captured the slow progression towards death through the speaker in the poem. I'm unsure if it is the wife or the husband. It really shows what true love means. In their darkness moment they stayed together. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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This is a good entry to the free form contest. The text is for sure large enough. Whew! That's a tragic way to die. You captured the slow progression towards death through the speaker in the poem. I'm unsure if it is the wife or the husband. It really shows what true love means. In their darkness moment they stayed together. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Sandra
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You are welcome.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Well my my my isn't. This a sad little piece of work.
Nice work. I would have thrown in a light gray background behind the font just to really punch home the dismal grey doom but that's just a preference thing.
Great work. Thanks for sharing and good luck!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Well my my my isn't. This a sad little piece of work.
Nice work. I would have thrown in a light gray background behind the font just to really punch home the dismal grey doom but that's just a preference thing.
Great work. Thanks for sharing and good luck!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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I agree, but the format for this contest doesn?t allow for that enhancement.
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Ah. Makes sense. I think you will still fare well as the words are poignant! Good luck.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I like this piece save for the last line. Three leaves in the final stanza ... idk
could it be one too much? I pose a substitute "you here alone" or "by yourself." .........................
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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I like this piece save for the last line. Three leaves in the final stanza ... idk
could it be one too much? I pose a substitute "you here alone" or "by yourself." .........................
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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I see your point, but I had a point as well. Thanks, Tom.
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ok no ill intent intended
Comment from Maria Millsaps
A skiing trip that went bad. This poem reminds me of the Sonny Bono story when he tragically was killed in a skiing accident in Lake Tahoe. Traveling at high speed on those slopes can be fatal. I like your poem, it speaks of unending love.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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A skiing trip that went bad. This poem reminds me of the Sonny Bono story when he tragically was killed in a skiing accident in Lake Tahoe. Traveling at high speed on those slopes can be fatal. I like your poem, it speaks of unending love.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Thanks, Maria
Comment from royowen
That would be a horrid way to die wouldn't it? Seemingly no hope of rescue, in one's own car, buried under a mountain of snow, How awful, beautifully written my friend good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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That would be a horrid way to die wouldn't it? Seemingly no hope of rescue, in one's own car, buried under a mountain of snow, How awful, beautifully written my friend good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Roy
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Most welcome
