Carytown
A Magical Place6 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
A cute little piece that describes the holiday season so very well. I had trouble finding the flow of the piece. As I read it aloud, I stumbled, distancing myself from that poem.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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A cute little piece that describes the holiday season so very well. I had trouble finding the flow of the piece. As I read it aloud, I stumbled, distancing myself from that poem.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from Celyn
This is lovely poem about a Christmas village model. The rhyming is generally good but I would not have used bright more than once. Also you have used ' in town' or 'in the town' twice in the first stanza. Perhaps you could have come up with something else to make it a bit less repetitive ie the last line in the first stanza could simply be 'the shops hold goods quite sure to please'.
Apart from that I like this poem so good luck with it
Celyn
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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This is lovely poem about a Christmas village model. The rhyming is generally good but I would not have used bright more than once. Also you have used ' in town' or 'in the town' twice in the first stanza. Perhaps you could have come up with something else to make it a bit less repetitive ie the last line in the first stanza could simply be 'the shops hold goods quite sure to please'.
Apart from that I like this poem so good luck with it
Celyn
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Thank you for this great review.
Comment from Sally Law
A lovely scene here and fun end. Our Cats and Dogs have struggled with our Christmas decorations. Our toy poodle pulled down the whole tree one year. The sparkly baubles were too much for him, I think. A doggone catastrophe!
Beautifully penned and presented in moving art! How cool! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming rhyming contest.
Sal xoxo's
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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A lovely scene here and fun end. Our Cats and Dogs have struggled with our Christmas decorations. Our toy poodle pulled down the whole tree one year. The sparkly baubles were too much for him, I think. A doggone catastrophe!
Beautifully penned and presented in moving art! How cool! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming rhyming contest.
Sal xoxo's
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Thank you for this thoughtful review. :)
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Most welcome! Sal :))
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good rhyming poem for the rhyming contest. The text is a great size. The verses rhyme well and speak of the approaching winter and Christmas in a clear manner.
I would expand the poem box around your poem for better spacing and presentation. Drop the first line down one space. Go to the end of the last word in your poem and hit enter a couple of times. Now your box is expanded. The gif visual is perfect. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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This is a good rhyming poem for the rhyming contest. The text is a great size. The verses rhyme well and speak of the approaching winter and Christmas in a clear manner.
I would expand the poem box around your poem for better spacing and presentation. Drop the first line down one space. Go to the end of the last word in your poem and hit enter a couple of times. Now your box is expanded. The gif visual is perfect. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much for reviewing.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Regina Elliott
Hi! This is such a charming
Christmas poem. The part
about your-cat is cute. Years
ago we had a gray tabby that
"collected bottle caps." She
would hide them under one
of the easy chairs. A really
great poem here! Good luck
in the-contest. Blessings
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Hi! This is such a charming
Christmas poem. The part
about your-cat is cute. Years
ago we had a gray tabby that
"collected bottle caps." She
would hide them under one
of the easy chairs. A really
great poem here! Good luck
in the-contest. Blessings
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Thank you, that's kind of you to say. :)
Comment from Barbara Peabody Pouliot
Very nice and cheery. Beautiful illustration really compliments your words.
Yes, that time is coming quickly and passes with a blink.
Thank you for sharing. Good luck.
Write on
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Very nice and cheery. Beautiful illustration really compliments your words.
Yes, that time is coming quickly and passes with a blink.
Thank you for sharing. Good luck.
Write on
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Thank you for this very nice review. :)
