The Tree
Trees live in all seasons.27 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
through life to death and then rebirth of our trees-very well written and described, your words provide a wonderful image for the reader, an excellent read, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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through life to death and then rebirth of our trees-very well written and described, your words provide a wonderful image for the reader, an excellent read, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 15-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it . Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from lancellot
This is nice and I think it will appeal to our members. I think you look at these lines:
New branches grow,buds spring awake
Freshened by spring dew they take
And,in a while,gloriously
A new tree is born,in all it`s majesty.
Note the lack of space after the commas.
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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This is nice and I think it will appeal to our members. I think you look at these lines:
New branches grow,buds spring awake
Freshened by spring dew they take
And,in a while,gloriously
A new tree is born,in all it`s majesty.
Note the lack of space after the commas.
Comment Written 15-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Thanks for the suggestions as well. I think they help quite a deal. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was a treat. Trees are incredible beings with a heart and soul of their own. Your visuals incredible. Great choice of an artwork, good imagery and artistic presentation.
In the third stanza, third line - did you mean "spring buds awake"?
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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This was a treat. Trees are incredible beings with a heart and soul of their own. Your visuals incredible. Great choice of an artwork, good imagery and artistic presentation.
In the third stanza, third line - did you mean "spring buds awake"?
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. Yes I could have gone the way you suggested. However, I did want it the way it was put. Thanks again and take care.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Zue65
This 10 Line poem is indicative of the writer's love for nature. I absolutely agree that we need to treat nature, trees and all with love and respect for they are all God's creations. I enjoyed reading this poem, Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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This 10 Line poem is indicative of the writer's love for nature. I absolutely agree that we need to treat nature, trees and all with love and respect for they are all God's creations. I enjoyed reading this poem, Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes nature is such a wonderful thing. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Celyn
This is a beautiful description of a tree through the seasons. The rhyming is good apart from more and over, which seems a little forced to me and the rhythm in the first stanza is excellent. However, the first line in the second stanza seems a bit on the long side syllable-wise. I would have put something like 'but when winter's grip is over' and leave out icy bit. Nevertheless I do like this poem as it is very descriptive.
Celyn
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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This is a beautiful description of a tree through the seasons. The rhyming is good apart from more and over, which seems a little forced to me and the rhythm in the first stanza is excellent. However, the first line in the second stanza seems a bit on the long side syllable-wise. I would have put something like 'but when winter's grip is over' and leave out icy bit. Nevertheless I do like this poem as it is very descriptive.
Celyn
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Celyn,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem.It ran second in the contest.Thanks also for your suggestions. Take Care and have a good day.
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Moonbeams Musings 55
I love trees. You are right, they are very majestic and solid and secure. Your poem is very well written I really enjoyed your rhyme and the way it all flowed together. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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I love trees. You are right, they are very majestic and solid and secure. Your poem is very well written I really enjoyed your rhyme and the way it all flowed together. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it and I can now tell you it ran second in the contest. Take care and have a lovely day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A lovely ten line poetic description of the tree, both naked and then in all it's glory when winter's icy grip has finished. Just one thing, in the second verse there are a few space spots that need attention.
cheers.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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A lovely ten line poetic description of the tree, both naked and then in all it's glory when winter's icy grip has finished. Just one thing, in the second verse there are a few space spots that need attention.
cheers.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Pearl,
Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks also for picking up on the space spots. Take care and have a great day.
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The cycle of the tree always fascinated me and I wonder how it knows when to shed its leaves and when to grow new ones, I expect it is all about the weather too. I enjoyed your rhyming poem, although line six and seven do not rhyme? Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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The cycle of the tree always fascinated me and I wonder how it knows when to shed its leaves and when to grow new ones, I expect it is all about the weather too. I enjoyed your rhyming poem, although line six and seven do not rhyme? Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Dolly,
Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. It ran in second.
Take care and have a great day.Oh and keep writing.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
Comment from estory
Classic pastoral romantic celebration of nature. It's in this time honored style done so successfully by poets like Browning, Landor, Bryant and many other romantics and I think you did a good job nailing the rhyme scheme and meter. Nice colorful images too. estory
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Classic pastoral romantic celebration of nature. It's in this time honored style done so successfully by poets like Browning, Landor, Bryant and many other romantics and I think you did a good job nailing the rhyme scheme and meter. Nice colorful images too. estory
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. It ran in second. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Bill Schott
This ten-line poem, The Tree, has the proper number of lines and follows then trees nude to prudent time when the leaves fall, and the buds bring life again in spring.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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This ten-line poem, The Tree, has the proper number of lines and follows then trees nude to prudent time when the leaves fall, and the buds bring life again in spring.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Bill,
Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. It ran in second.
Take care and have a great day.
Barry Penfold
