Love On The Beach
Free verse.21 total reviews
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
There is enough rhyming and meter going on here that I think I'd pull it from the ranks of free verse and call it rhyming poetry with a unique format. Good work.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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There is enough rhyming and meter going on here that I think I'd pull it from the ranks of free verse and call it rhyming poetry with a unique format. Good work.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much.But the purists may not agree .
Comment from R.B.Bunn
This was a fun poem. The imagery is really good and it complemented the amorous feelings very well. The rhyme scheme was also well executed. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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This was a fun poem. The imagery is really good and it complemented the amorous feelings very well. The rhyme scheme was also well executed. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from JoannaN
What I like about this poem is the fact that you actually do not show the lovers in the second and third part, but you convey the message (force, sounds, energy) by using the nature surrounding your protagonists.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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What I like about this poem is the fact that you actually do not show the lovers in the second and third part, but you convey the message (force, sounds, energy) by using the nature surrounding your protagonists.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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I am glad you noticed it. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Sally Law
Looks great to me. I love the minute poem but I agree, it rather tricky. You did a wonderful job and illustrated it so beautifully. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Looks great to me. I love the minute poem but I agree, it rather tricky. You did a wonderful job and illustrated it so beautifully. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Sanku, good descriptive writing. I could see the whole beach scene,
especially:
Waves swelled and crashed on sandy shores
the sea gulls screeched
the sky turned red
their ardour rose
(That's a romantic day at the beach)
I love the photo choice. As far as the rhyming goes, "life doesn't always rhyme, so why should poetry ~ LateBloomer"
Well done. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing.
LateBloomer ~ Margaret
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Hi Sanku, good descriptive writing. I could see the whole beach scene,
especially:
Waves swelled and crashed on sandy shores
the sea gulls screeched
the sky turned red
their ardour rose
(That's a romantic day at the beach)
I love the photo choice. As far as the rhyming goes, "life doesn't always rhyme, so why should poetry ~ LateBloomer"
Well done. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing.
LateBloomer ~ Margaret
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thankyou very much for dropping by.
Comment from Wendy G
It is a very lovely poem, perfect as it is, without rhyme - it doesn't need rhyme, as your metre is very smooth, and the format is interesting and appealing. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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It is a very lovely poem, perfect as it is, without rhyme - it doesn't need rhyme, as your metre is very smooth, and the format is interesting and appealing. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Raul1
I like the rhyming you have written, and I did enjoy reading it. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poem. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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I like the rhyming you have written, and I did enjoy reading it. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poem. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Although this is a free write, it has a wonderful melody to it and I adored the sentiments of passion and romance as this couple need no one else but each other, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Although this is a free write, it has a wonderful melody to it and I adored the sentiments of passion and romance as this couple need no one else but each other, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thanks a lot for stopping by and reviewing.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
J think you have just invented a new style minute poem! And it works beautifully. I really enjoyed the way you took us for a walk along the sand, and then stopped as the thrill of their ardor took over, taking us to the final finite passion! Beautifully done. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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J think you have just invented a new style minute poem! And it works beautifully. I really enjoyed the way you took us for a walk along the sand, and then stopped as the thrill of their ardor took over, taking us to the final finite passion! Beautifully done. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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I wanted to post it for the minute contest .Just before posting I realised that it needs to rhyme .I just could nt rework it .Anyway I am not good at rhyming.Thank you very much Sandra for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written poem. Love this verse
Hand in hand they strolled on the beach
the twilight sun
the summer breeze
when love leaned close. Beautiful artwork to compliment your words as well.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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This is a nicely written poem. Love this verse
Hand in hand they strolled on the beach
the twilight sun
the summer breeze
when love leaned close. Beautiful artwork to compliment your words as well.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much.
