Random Reflections.
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "A lifetime struggles-Quo Vadis."Poems of Random wandering; an inward look.
4 total reviews
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is kind of strange. It is classified as poetry but reads like prose. I enjoyed reading it but found it a little hard. You need more space between paragraphs as it is all jumbled together. It is very intriguing but needs some editing.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This is kind of strange. It is classified as poetry but reads like prose. I enjoyed reading it but found it a little hard. You need more space between paragraphs as it is all jumbled together. It is very intriguing but needs some editing.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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prettyblubird: It is an essay but being a part of my Poetry book, "Random Reflections", it got labeled as poetry. I have to find a way to change that. I am sure it needs to be edited again. Writing in modern style is hard for me. Educated in the British system sometimes my language gets confusing even though it is grammatically correct and then spelling and selection of word is also becoming difficult for me as I am aging. If you have any suggestions, or found errors, please direct me. Thanks for your generous ranking and encouraging comments. All the best.
Arun.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Seems more like a book than a poem. Having said that, it is an interesting read
There are some "million" word long paragraphs, especially the first one.
Still, it was interesting. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Seems more like a book than a poem. Having said that, it is an interesting read
There are some "million" word long paragraphs, especially the first one.
Still, it was interesting. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Douglas: Hi. It is an essay, but being a part of my Poetry book, "Random Reflections", it got labeled as poetry. I have to find a way to change that. I am trying to be more precise but having educated in the British style of English, I am more wordy and tend to write like the authors of 19th and 20th centuries. Doing my best to learn how to express with short sentences and precision. I appreciate your encouraging comment and ranking. All the best.
Arun
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Doctor Ricky: My gratitude for your encouraging remark and ratings. I received a 'Good' rating from another reader and because of that critical review, I edited the essay 4 times. Watching our news and thinking about where this human race is taking this planet, I began thinking about Quo Vadis. My best regards.
Sincerely,
Arun
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I've seen people join here with nothing posted and giving one star poor reviews.
They do us allow us to block people you just need to go on their profiles.
Good luck and always remember the three 'Cs'
Stay
Cool
Calm
Collected
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Thank you Doctor. Are you a clinician or Phd in literature? Your comments and guidance helped me. I edited work again and again carefully. My best regards and thanks.
Arun
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Yes, Since 2012
Doctor Ricky1024
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I worked in the Healthcare Administration for over 30 years. You are one of the few Physicians I met who have keen interest in Arts. I managed HMO, Sole Community Hospital, Skilled Nursing facility and Medical Campus. Most of my close friends are retired physicians. I retired in 2019.
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Why thanks for sharing that and as a Latter Day Saint Priest with the Church of Jesus Christ.
I've been doing this writing thing.
(Unfortunately, literally days after the death of my only 18-year-old son Jason)
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(April Fool's Day)
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Thanks Doctor Ricky: I was inspired by the story itself. We often don't realize how we too come to face that question Quo Vadis. I appreciate your comments very much.
Arun K. Potdar
Comment from J L Graves
Thank you for sharing. I felt that the narrator's voice was strong and consistent all the way through the text. I thought that I understood the narrator's point of view. The piece also seemed to flow well. I got confused with the sentence that begins with "However." It's in the beginning paragraph. I think there is an extra word in the sentence, but I liked the imagery of the gum sticking to the shoe. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Thank you for sharing. I felt that the narrator's voice was strong and consistent all the way through the text. I thought that I understood the narrator's point of view. The piece also seemed to flow well. I got confused with the sentence that begins with "However." It's in the beginning paragraph. I think there is an extra word in the sentence, but I liked the imagery of the gum sticking to the shoe. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Thanks.
