Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from jake cosmos aller
very powerful and moving meta poem expressed in the terra riming format. You nailed the format of the poem. the rhyme scheme is spot on as is the message.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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very powerful and moving meta poem expressed in the terra riming format. You nailed the format of the poem. the rhyme scheme is spot on as is the message.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Jake, thanks much!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good choice of artwork.
-A well written poem with effective imagery and rhyme.
-It flows well from verse to verse as one's pen flows down the page.
-My favorite line is the question about living "under masked veils."
-You make a good point about choosing the right words,
followed by a good closing couplet.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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-Good choice of artwork.
-A well written poem with effective imagery and rhyme.
-It flows well from verse to verse as one's pen flows down the page.
-My favorite line is the question about living "under masked veils."
-You make a good point about choosing the right words,
followed by a good closing couplet.
-Well done.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your thoughtfulness.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your terza rima was in great form, JLR. The lines read well
with great imagery of a writer thinking before s/he commits
to writing his/her thoughts on paper. The rhymes worked well
and added to the overall imagery. I enjoyed reading your well-
thought out poem. The rhyme scheme was adhered to correctly.
All kinds of words play into an author's mind, and s/he must
choose carefully to make readers understand his/her intentions.
The art choice was perfect for your work.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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Your terza rima was in great form, JLR. The lines read well
with great imagery of a writer thinking before s/he commits
to writing his/her thoughts on paper. The rhymes worked well
and added to the overall imagery. I enjoyed reading your well-
thought out poem. The rhyme scheme was adhered to correctly.
All kinds of words play into an author's mind, and s/he must
choose carefully to make readers understand his/her intentions.
The art choice was perfect for your work.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 01-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your thoughtfulness, JIm
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I understand this type of poem is a challenge itself. I have been working one one and hope I can finish it soon so I can post. I thought you had to use Iambic meter. I did see a few meter related mistakes.
The following will work better without "a":
uncover a hidden tale
Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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I understand this type of poem is a challenge itself. I have been working one one and hope I can finish it soon so I can post. I thought you had to use Iambic meter. I did see a few meter related mistakes.
The following will work better without "a":
uncover a hidden tale
Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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No contest involved , just a great club that offers weekly writing challenges. Thanks
Comment from Wendy G
The power of words can never be underestimated, both for good and for hurt. As you say readers can be uplifted, or list in the thatch of too many useless words. How often do we live lives masked by veils. Good question. Most of the time, probably.
Very thoughtful, and thought-provoking.
Wendy
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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The power of words can never be underestimated, both for good and for hurt. As you say readers can be uplifted, or list in the thatch of too many useless words. How often do we live lives masked by veils. Good question. Most of the time, probably.
Very thoughtful, and thought-provoking.
Wendy
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Thanks!
Comment from dellsworthpoet
I always like to see mixed forms. This being a 14 line poem makes it a sonnet. The rhymed couplet at the end is classic end for sonnet form also. The terza rima form slows the flow which is good for a complex thought since the reader is slowed to see it.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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I always like to see mixed forms. This being a 14 line poem makes it a sonnet. The rhymed couplet at the end is classic end for sonnet form also. The terza rima form slows the flow which is good for a complex thought since the reader is slowed to see it.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Thanks!
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You are welcome.
Comment from nomi338
I totally agree with the author. The use of words must be used with some thought given to its possible effect. A word misunderstood can do as much or more damage than a word intended to hurt or confuse.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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I totally agree with the author. The use of words must be used with some thought given to its possible effect. A word misunderstood can do as much or more damage than a word intended to hurt or confuse.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the review!
Comment from GWHARGIS
Very good advice. I tend to cut a scene rather than ramble. At least, I hope I don't ramble. Lol. Using certain words can either accelerate or decelerate a scene. I like the presentation of your poem. Great job and quite enlightening. Gretchen
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Very good advice. I tend to cut a scene rather than ramble. At least, I hope I don't ramble. Lol. Using certain words can either accelerate or decelerate a scene. I like the presentation of your poem. Great job and quite enlightening. Gretchen
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Thanks Gretchen!
Comment from lyenochka
A great use of the terza rima to give good writing advice. You're right that we don't want to lead our poor readers "across a rough patch," so we have to choose our words carefully.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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A great use of the terza rima to give good writing advice. You're right that we don't want to lead our poor readers "across a rough patch," so we have to choose our words carefully.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Thanks much!
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well done terza rima for the potlatch club post. It reminds us the importance of picking just the right words so our theme is understood and that it does not have a chance to hurt anyone. You have a good ending couplet.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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This is a well done terza rima for the potlatch club post. It reminds us the importance of picking just the right words so our theme is understood and that it does not have a chance to hurt anyone. You have a good ending couplet.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Thanks much!
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No problem, Jim.
Joan
