Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from lancellot
Again, your writing is and editing are good. Your points and views are touched on and come across well to the reader. You gave the reader a mini-confrontation.
Good luck in your following chapters.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Again, your writing is and editing are good. Your points and views are touched on and come across well to the reader. You gave the reader a mini-confrontation.
Good luck in your following chapters.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. A bigger confrontation will be coming up in a few weeks. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
Again, I love the steady progression of Cord and Ali's relationship. Nothing rushed, just casual, but progressive. I suspect that Ali's former lover is biting off much more than he is going to be able to chew or digest. Like many of his ilk, he has no doubt underestimated Cord because his background is not as celebrated.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Again, I love the steady progression of Cord and Ali's relationship. Nothing rushed, just casual, but progressive. I suspect that Ali's former lover is biting off much more than he is going to be able to chew or digest. Like many of his ilk, he has no doubt underestimated Cord because his background is not as celebrated.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I can promise we will see Alan again and it won't be good.
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Oh good, very good. I think it is time he received his day of reckoning.
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He will.
Comment from amahra
This was an exciting chapter, particularly the fight scene. Just one thing below. I'm sure it's just me.
"We should've gotten pictures dressed up Friday night."[I don't quite get this sentence's meaning.]
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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This was an exciting chapter, particularly the fight scene. Just one thing below. I'm sure it's just me.
"We should've gotten pictures dressed up Friday night."[I don't quite get this sentence's meaning.]
Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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That was the fiftieth anniversary party for the law firm. The reason they were in NYC. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I knew there had to be another fight at some point. But as an old country boy, I wanted to see Cord beat his butt. LOL. So, I'll just sit back and keep hoping at some point Drew will get what he has coming to him. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
This is the last photo her and Grandpa (had) taken before she died.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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I knew there had to be another fight at some point. But as an old country boy, I wanted to see Cord beat his butt. LOL. So, I'll just sit back and keep hoping at some point Drew will get what he has coming to him. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
This is the last photo her and Grandpa (had) taken before she died.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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I've had that 'had' in and out so many times. It's in again. Thank you for the kind review. We will see Alan again in a few weeks and it won't be good.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You answered the question of who punched Cord. It was not too surprising. I do not see any need for improvement. The picture is great for the story.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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This is another excellent chapter. You answered the question of who punched Cord. It was not too surprising. I do not see any need for improvement. The picture is great for the story.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Glad I was esentially right of the cliffhangar you left us with. Sometimes it's reassuring that the storyline is traced out in advance. Kate xx
Please consider:
Anthony and Cordero helped Alexandra pack > reads as though they're back in the appartment and she's packing clothes ? Anthony and Cordero helped Alexandra pack aways the remains of the picnic
rowdy bunch ladies > rowdy bunch of ladies
parents choose to send > parents chose to send
Since living at the ranch > Since I'm living at the ranch
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Glad I was esentially right of the cliffhangar you left us with. Sometimes it's reassuring that the storyline is traced out in advance. Kate xx
Please consider:
Anthony and Cordero helped Alexandra pack > reads as though they're back in the appartment and she's packing clothes ? Anthony and Cordero helped Alexandra pack aways the remains of the picnic
rowdy bunch ladies > rowdy bunch of ladies
parents choose to send > parents chose to send
Since living at the ranch > Since I'm living at the ranch
Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the catches. I've made the changes. I hate those little words, I always leave out and read as though they're present.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I enjoyed your writing. The use of internal dialogue (and external) is excellent. My one thought is that during the fight scene there isn't enough detail in my opinion. Swing and missed - at what? The head? Why the miss? I had trouble seeing it in my head without those little details. Outside of that this was an enjoyable chapter.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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I enjoyed your writing. The use of internal dialogue (and external) is excellent. My one thought is that during the fight scene there isn't enough detail in my opinion. Swing and missed - at what? The head? Why the miss? I had trouble seeing it in my head without those little details. Outside of that this was an enjoyable chapter.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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I will think about that area. Thank you for the suggestion.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good progress. Nicely written.
I'm confused with what benefit it would have made to get his own flight. Her jet was going there anyway.
My, wasn't Anthony the hero in this one?
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Good progress. Nicely written.
I'm confused with what benefit it would have made to get his own flight. Her jet was going there anyway.
My, wasn't Anthony the hero in this one?
Best wishes.
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Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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If Cord got his own flight, he wouldn't be relying on Ali's money. It would have been his own. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
wow, your story is so well written. I will love to read how the upcoming chapters will turn out. This fellow is really the troublemaker for the young woman. Hopefully, it will be cause enough to have Cord safe from the bad fellow.
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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wow, your story is so well written. I will love to read how the upcoming chapters will turn out. This fellow is really the troublemaker for the young woman. Hopefully, it will be cause enough to have Cord safe from the bad fellow.
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Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
