Anger Personified
I'm Alive!5 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a well-written entry to the Emotions contest. The text is a nice size. I love it being bold on that vivid background. The message is presented clearly until the last stanza. The last three lines need a bit more clarity. Tweaking that area will make it better. This is just a suggestion. It's your poem.
Everyone feels me sometime,
letting me out, can be a crime.
Anger, I will always be,
lose control and I'll be free.
I would also drop the first line down one space, so it's not so crowded into the visual. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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This is a well-written entry to the Emotions contest. The text is a nice size. I love it being bold on that vivid background. The message is presented clearly until the last stanza. The last three lines need a bit more clarity. Tweaking that area will make it better. This is just a suggestion. It's your poem.
Everyone feels me sometime,
letting me out, can be a crime.
Anger, I will always be,
lose control and I'll be free.
I would also drop the first line down one space, so it's not so crowded into the visual. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Thank you for this terrific review, I always appreciate it. :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent post and a great flow and articulation to the narrative. It sounds like someone really malevolent writing it, (of course you're not) nice smooth flow, grrwat language and aabb rhyming, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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This is an excellent post and a great flow and articulation to the narrative. It sounds like someone really malevolent writing it, (of course you're not) nice smooth flow, grrwat language and aabb rhyming, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Thank you, I appreciate this kind review. :)
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Most welcome
Comment from BermyBye50
This is an exceptional entry in the Emotions contest. Your words personify the emotion of anger brilliantly. Your rhyming is perfect and reads smoothly. I enjoyed this write. Well done.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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This is an exceptional entry in the Emotions contest. Your words personify the emotion of anger brilliantly. Your rhyming is perfect and reads smoothly. I enjoyed this write. Well done.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Thank you, I appreciate this great review. :)
Comment from lancellot
This is very good. I like how you personified anger as an entity of its own. I feels like a demon here or an infection. And you're correct it can and usually will do all those things you've artfully listed.
Well done. Solid entry.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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This is very good. I like how you personified anger as an entity of its own. I feels like a demon here or an infection. And you're correct it can and usually will do all those things you've artfully listed.
Well done. Solid entry.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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Thank you, I really appreciate this terrific review. :)
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a very impressive poem. You explain the many variations of anger from the individual to the mob and you have shown how to set if free to wreak havoc Best of luck with your contest entry this looks weird sorry my computer has decided not to allow me to use punctuation OR MUCH OF ANYTHING ELSE
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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This is a very impressive poem. You explain the many variations of anger from the individual to the mob and you have shown how to set if free to wreak havoc Best of luck with your contest entry this looks weird sorry my computer has decided not to allow me to use punctuation OR MUCH OF ANYTHING ELSE
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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Thank you for this encouraging review, it's very appreciated. :)
