Suzy the Sparrow
Fallen angel14 total reviews
Comment from Moonbeams Musings 55
How sad but so beautifully written. This was a great story of determinati She was daring, a little bird wanting to be free and foolish and so very sad in the end. This was so well written that it deserves more than a 5.
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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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How sad but so beautifully written. This was a great story of determinati She was daring, a little bird wanting to be free and foolish and so very sad in the end. This was so well written that it deserves more than a 5.
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Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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Bless you Moonbeams, thankyou so much for your awesome review and your wonderful comments. I have been ill which is far from unusual for me, so I really apologise for the lateness of my reply. Thanks once again love Meia xx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Meia, it's so good to see my
beautiful friend...
you know Meia...with all the dysfunction that
goes on in our lives...hail...in all the world...
I think everyone at one time or other goes through
times of depression...some worse than others...
some will find people who can mend their broken hearts...
help them feel their worth...
and some only feel there's only one way out...falling
until they stop falling...sigh...
your story is very well written sweet lady...but so very said...just know...if you ever feel this way...I'm a good listener...and would be honored to hear you...
I miss you so much not being here...but I will say...I started babysitting my friends granddaughter...and it's
five days a week...and it does keep me busy...
I'm in Florida for now...visiting my daughter and brother for the holidays...I hope you had a wonderful Thanksgiving Day...and I am so sorry I didn't get over to wish you a happy birthday...so HAPPY BIRTHDAY YOU...
well written...and picture perfect...sending much your way...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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Hi Meia, it's so good to see my
beautiful friend...
you know Meia...with all the dysfunction that
goes on in our lives...hail...in all the world...
I think everyone at one time or other goes through
times of depression...some worse than others...
some will find people who can mend their broken hearts...
help them feel their worth...
and some only feel there's only one way out...falling
until they stop falling...sigh...
your story is very well written sweet lady...but so very said...just know...if you ever feel this way...I'm a good listener...and would be honored to hear you...
I miss you so much not being here...but I will say...I started babysitting my friends granddaughter...and it's
five days a week...and it does keep me busy...
I'm in Florida for now...visiting my daughter and brother for the holidays...I hope you had a wonderful Thanksgiving Day...and I am so sorry I didn't get over to wish you a happy birthday...so HAPPY BIRTHDAY YOU...
well written...and picture perfect...sending much your way...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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My dear friend you are long overdue for a huge hug! I love you so much. Bless you, thankyou so much for your awesome reviews and your wonderful comments including the shining six. I have been ill which is far from unusual for me, so I really apologise for the lateness of my reply. Thanks once again my dear friend love Meia xx
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Hi Meia, I'm so sorry you haven't felt well...
I have been a bit under the weather myself...
but am hoping for a better year...
I keep you in my prayers my beautiful friend...I know you have been through some rough spells...God Bless and keep you safe...
you never have to apologize beautiful you for a late reply...I have found myself late many times...it's just wonderful to hear from you anytime...
and you are always soooooooo welcome Meia...I love reading your writings...and I love you so much as well...sending big hugs and lots of love heading your way...Linda xxoo 🙏🤗🤗🤗😘🚚🚚🚚💖💖🌼🌷🙏
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Thank you so much Linda. You are a fear friend and all round amazing person love M xxxx
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smiling so big...😊🙏💗 much love xxoo
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting story and possibly a description of some kind of obsessive behavior.
An interesting tale. The fact that through all of it she became more and more Suzy. The flow is good. The images are clear. As with most obsessions, the longer she deals with it the stronger it is. The language is plain but forceful.
Suggestion:
I would like to see more tension build-up. Where the mania to fall becomes stronger and stronger. And the activity more frenzied as time elapses. This is often done by gradually shortening sentences. And the last sentence could be a simple phrase. i.e. "And people passing by saw.
A fallen angel."
A good read.
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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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An interesting story and possibly a description of some kind of obsessive behavior.
An interesting tale. The fact that through all of it she became more and more Suzy. The flow is good. The images are clear. As with most obsessions, the longer she deals with it the stronger it is. The language is plain but forceful.
Suggestion:
I would like to see more tension build-up. Where the mania to fall becomes stronger and stronger. And the activity more frenzied as time elapses. This is often done by gradually shortening sentences. And the last sentence could be a simple phrase. i.e. "And people passing by saw.
A fallen angel."
A good read.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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thankyou so much for your wonderful review love Meia xxx
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You are welcome.
Comment from prettybluebirds
This story deserves six stars for its simple originality. I agree we all feel like we are falling at one time or another. This is a delightful, if sad, story. It is excellent writing.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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This story deserves six stars for its simple originality. I agree we all feel like we are falling at one time or another. This is a delightful, if sad, story. It is excellent writing.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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Bless you and thankyou so much I am honed by your amazing review xxx love Meia xx
