Tides
You can rearrange your bubble16 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Warren
Love it. Humanity really does need to change its way of thinking. If we're going to survive we need do it together. I really liked that line 'the one way in was one way out.'
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Love it. Humanity really does need to change its way of thinking. If we're going to survive we need do it together. I really liked that line 'the one way in was one way out.'
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Cindy :-). This poem started out aimless but quickly found its focus so I was really glad I started it!
Mike
Comment from Michaela Moore
Good God, man! You are unreal. Mouth hitting floor. Stunned to silence. Have no words to describe your brilliance here. From subject matter to every tiny pen stroke, genius.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Good God, man! You are unreal. Mouth hitting floor. Stunned to silence. Have no words to describe your brilliance here. From subject matter to every tiny pen stroke, genius.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much :-). Flattery will get you everywhere! More to the point, I'm really happy you enjoyed my poem.
Mike
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for always broadening my musical horizons. I loved the way you started out describing the introversion and exhorted the reader to break out from the narrowminded wisdom that has become "snide" and "Become the water smoothing rocks
and you can be the changing tide,"
We can all make changes around us smoothing one rock at a time.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Thanks for always broadening my musical horizons. I loved the way you started out describing the introversion and exhorted the reader to break out from the narrowminded wisdom that has become "snide" and "Become the water smoothing rocks
and you can be the changing tide,"
We can all make changes around us smoothing one rock at a time.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Helen :-). I was really pleased with how this one came out - as usual, I knew I wanted to write something but not what, so I found something to give me ideas (in this case, the song) and just started typing. When the periscope line popped out, that gave me a focus and it all came together from there!
Mike
Comment from Jay Squires
To me, a hugely profound poem, once one realizes he and the rest of the world can only grow by extending our periscopes outward, as "introspection turns without,
our questions aired, our minds but scouts
for evidence of what was missed
and what the whole world is about."
what we scrawl transcends the tropes
we utilise to make our points:
Perspectives are but periscopes.
[A brilliant observation: I'm thinking of the old saw about an expert being one who knows more and more about less and less. And however wrong we may be, each one of us is the GREATEST expert on his/her own perception. Now his obligation is to cast out his introspection.]
Jay
That Epica singer has an amazing range.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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To me, a hugely profound poem, once one realizes he and the rest of the world can only grow by extending our periscopes outward, as "introspection turns without,
our questions aired, our minds but scouts
for evidence of what was missed
and what the whole world is about."
what we scrawl transcends the tropes
we utilise to make our points:
Perspectives are but periscopes.
[A brilliant observation: I'm thinking of the old saw about an expert being one who knows more and more about less and less. And however wrong we may be, each one of us is the GREATEST expert on his/her own perception. Now his obligation is to cast out his introspection.]
Jay
That Epica singer has an amazing range.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much, Jay :-). The periscope line came out of nowhere as I was approaching the end of that stanza, and became the focal point for the poem. I think social media helps us reinforce our own 'truths' because we only see content we already agree with, but it's only able to do so because humans seem programmed to be that way to start with.
Yeah, Simon Simons has a great voice. Between her and Floor Jansen, I could happily listen to renditions of any song, I think.
Mike
Comment from Heather Knight
Wow! Incredible picture, poem and song.
You are a very good writer. The whole poem is gorgeous, but the last verse is my favourite part. Sending you a virtual six (I have none left)
Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Wow! Incredible picture, poem and song.
You are a very good writer. The whole poem is gorgeous, but the last verse is my favourite part. Sending you a virtual six (I have none left)
Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much :-). This was one of those that just worked while I was writing it - everything clicked nicely!
Mike
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, I am amazed at just how coincidental this fabulous poem is to the essay I will be posting in a few minutes...
I must say, however, that I am disappointed, Mike -- it should have been a contest entry!!!!!!!!!! (Outstanding!)
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Wow, I am amazed at just how coincidental this fabulous poem is to the essay I will be posting in a few minutes...
I must say, however, that I am disappointed, Mike -- it should have been a contest entry!!!!!!!!!! (Outstanding!)
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much :-). There must be something in the air! I never think about the contests until it's too close, and then I write something specifically with the contest in mind, which doesn't work so well, lol. Thanks for your awesome words!
Mike
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Very much my pleasure. :)
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Mike,
This shows that introspection used to write and our hopes that what we write will touch or help others. Writing also is cathartic so it smooths out problem.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Hi Mike,
This shows that introspection used to write and our hopes that what we write will touch or help others. Writing also is cathartic so it smooths out problem.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Joan. I'm so glad you enjoyed it :-)
Mike
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You're welcome, Mike.
Joan
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
A very thought-provoking poem. You are on good form.
summoning the faintest hope
that what we scrawl transcends the tropes
we utilise
So, why then do we use tropes? Are we that lazy we can't seek our own expressions? Has the pressure to produce become so great that we are reduced to cobbling together a series of figures of speech in such ways that they lose all power and even sense. Kate xx
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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A very thought-provoking poem. You are on good form.
summoning the faintest hope
that what we scrawl transcends the tropes
we utilise
So, why then do we use tropes? Are we that lazy we can't seek our own expressions? Has the pressure to produce become so great that we are reduced to cobbling together a series of figures of speech in such ways that they lose all power and even sense. Kate xx
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Kate :-). I'm courting my muse, I guess lol. I like to think of tropes and cliche as tools on my belt. Of course it depends how broadly we view them. Some would argue using proper spelling and grammar is a trope, and we should break free. I don't agree with that, of course, but the thoughts are interesting :-)
Mike
Comment from royowen
In a world that tends to have turned common, garden grown moral behaviour, new religions are growing, like environment, veganism, vegetarianism, trying to live as long as we can, concern for neighbour and fidelity have become old hat. This is beautifully written Mike, you are a thinker, who runs with his own perception and applied intelligence, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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In a world that tends to have turned common, garden grown moral behaviour, new religions are growing, like environment, veganism, vegetarianism, trying to live as long as we can, concern for neighbour and fidelity have become old hat. This is beautifully written Mike, you are a thinker, who runs with his own perception and applied intelligence, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Roy. That's an apt description of how I tend to write poetry - I start with a thought or even just whatever line is waiting to come out, then follow it to see where the thoughts take me. Sometimes, of course, it's pure nonsense, lol :-)
Mike
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It?s the only way to write, that?s the thrill of creation.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I feel in almost everything you write you push the envelope. Once again, you presented with a poem that causes the reader to pause and ponder it's meaning. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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I feel in almost everything you write you push the envelope. Once again, you presented with a poem that causes the reader to pause and ponder it's meaning. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much, Barbara :-). One day, I'll burn the envelope, lol.
Mike
