A Trip To The Store
Getting groceries is no fun2 total reviews
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Yes, but Publix's tagline is, "Where shopping is a pleasure!"
This is a fun look at a frustrating chore these days (yes, sausage is up plenty!), and you've met the requirements of the prompt in a nice, rhyming way. If I have to critique one thing, it's that last line. It just seems too long and interrupts the flow for me.
Good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Yes, but Publix's tagline is, "Where shopping is a pleasure!"
This is a fun look at a frustrating chore these days (yes, sausage is up plenty!), and you've met the requirements of the prompt in a nice, rhyming way. If I have to critique one thing, it's that last line. It just seems too long and interrupts the flow for me.
Good luck!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much! I will definitely take a look at that line. I appreciate the suggestion.
Comment from Ricky1024
"A Trip to the Store"
This was quick but cute rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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"A Trip to the Store"
This was quick but cute rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my work.
