Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from Laurie Holding
I'm reading last year's Pulitzer for poetry, Frank: Sonnets, right now, and was initially befuddled by how she (Diane Seuss) takes liberties with the number of syllables in each line, with her meter (not iambic pentameter! yikes!) and with her rhymes (mostly, um, just not). But I think what's happening to the sonnet these days is that poets are morphing it, and that needs to be okay with the rest of us, because time moves on and so do poetry formats.
That all being said, I really appreciate this one, and thank you for posting it. You do have a line with eleven syllables, but so what?! And you don't stick with iambic pentameter throughout, but again, hey! It's a Modern Sonnet! And I wish I could force myself to think outside this sonnet box I'm in. Great work, and I wish you luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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I'm reading last year's Pulitzer for poetry, Frank: Sonnets, right now, and was initially befuddled by how she (Diane Seuss) takes liberties with the number of syllables in each line, with her meter (not iambic pentameter! yikes!) and with her rhymes (mostly, um, just not). But I think what's happening to the sonnet these days is that poets are morphing it, and that needs to be okay with the rest of us, because time moves on and so do poetry formats.
That all being said, I really appreciate this one, and thank you for posting it. You do have a line with eleven syllables, but so what?! And you don't stick with iambic pentameter throughout, but again, hey! It's a Modern Sonnet! And I wish I could force myself to think outside this sonnet box I'm in. Great work, and I wish you luck in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Laurie, thank you, thank you! While I wrote this in a lark to be payful with the acrostic challenge, I fully and intentionally put a twist in th esonnet. I have always colored outside the lines, sometimes successfully most times perhaps not so. 😒🤗😊😊
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah, a favorite of mine -- the sonnet! And yet, to combine this gorgeous poetry format with the acrostic form takes much patience and skill -- you've done well, and it should make a fine showing in the contest! Good luck!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Ah, a favorite of mine -- the sonnet! And yet, to combine this gorgeous poetry format with the acrostic form takes much patience and skill -- you've done well, and it should make a fine showing in the contest! Good luck!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Thanks Dawn - I have already won great input and fun thoughts about my near sonnet acrostic effort. A vote would be a cherry atop my sundae...
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Ah, but you'll need more than one vote since this is a site contest, which means the entries are before the committee. :) Out of my hands! But best of luck!
Comment from Aussie
Loved the chalk drawing to compliment your double acrostic, wish you well in the contest. You have created a rather clever play on words. Not easy to tell a big story in this format. Well done. K xx
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Loved the chalk drawing to compliment your double acrostic, wish you well in the contest. You have created a rather clever play on words. Not easy to tell a big story in this format. Well done. K xx
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Thanks for the extra validation in this intended fun entry.
Comment from Gloria ....
First off you deserve congratulations with coming up with the perfect two words to fit with the Petrarchan sonnet's form without disjointed stanzas, or one acrostic word lump.
My only observation is that your satire would've been more acute, imo, if you had adhered strictly to iambic pentameter. But given that this is an acrostic poem, what more is there to write, but very well done!
AND best of luck to you with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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First off you deserve congratulations with coming up with the perfect two words to fit with the Petrarchan sonnet's form without disjointed stanzas, or one acrostic word lump.
My only observation is that your satire would've been more acute, imo, if you had adhered strictly to iambic pentameter. But given that this is an acrostic poem, what more is there to write, but very well done!
AND best of luck to you with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Gloria, thanks much, I felt that this losely scirbed piece was created with a bit of whimsical intention and while I colored outside the ridged lines of sonnet making I found it fun to play with the words.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
You added an extra challenge to this contest, an Acrostic Sonnet. You like to write sonnet. I see. It is an Italian Sonnet. I don't even remember how to write one anymore.
Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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You added an extra challenge to this contest, an Acrostic Sonnet. You like to write sonnet. I see. It is an Italian Sonnet. I don't even remember how to write one anymore.
Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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I felt that this losely scirbed piece was created with a bit of whimsical intention and while I colored outside the ridged lines of sonnet making I found it fun to play with the words.
Comment from kiwisteveh
A little waffly in meaning perhaps, but I appreciate the cleverness of your acrostic sonnet and the skill with which it meets the demands of both forms. Not everyone would have the patience to colour within the lines so carefully!
Steve
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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A little waffly in meaning perhaps, but I appreciate the cleverness of your acrostic sonnet and the skill with which it meets the demands of both forms. Not everyone would have the patience to colour within the lines so carefully!
Steve
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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kiwisteve, I felt that this losely scirbed piece was created with a bit of whimsical intention and while I colored outside the ridged lines of sonnet making I found it fun to play with the words.
Comment from Teri7
Your poem Acrostic Sonnet is very well written. You used very good descriptive words and very interesting imagery from the art work you chose to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. teri
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Your poem Acrostic Sonnet is very well written. You used very good descriptive words and very interesting imagery from the art work you chose to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. teri
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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I apprecaite the good wishes,
Comment from nomi338
Ok. I am officially impressed. To observe all the rules and still compose an original fun, clever and pleasing acrostic rhyme, is indeed an achievement. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Ok. I am officially impressed. To observe all the rules and still compose an original fun, clever and pleasing acrostic rhyme, is indeed an achievement. Congratulations.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Thank you my friend in LA.
Comment from Marin Beck
Hello,
I am amazed by your seamless combination of these two forms. Especially in how your first line explains your approach, your clever plays on words that "break the fourth wall" so to say is exactly that: clever and fascinating. This was both an adventure and a blast to read, and a refreshing take on a classic structure.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Hello,
I am amazed by your seamless combination of these two forms. Especially in how your first line explains your approach, your clever plays on words that "break the fourth wall" so to say is exactly that: clever and fascinating. This was both an adventure and a blast to read, and a refreshing take on a classic structure.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Marin, thank you. I felt that this losely scirbed piece was created with a bit of whimsical intention and while I colored outside the ridged lines of sonnet making I found it fun to play with the words.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your acrostic sonnet, J. You did a great job with
a difficult task you set before yourself. I liked the use of
color--esp setting off the first letter of each line. Your words
were well thought out. You expressed your thoughts and
feelings about words well. The lines with 11 syllables are
difficult for me to figure the meter on though I know they're
allowed. If you wanted, you could list this as a modified Italian
sonnet.
Thanks for sharing and good job branching out, Jan
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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I enjoyed your acrostic sonnet, J. You did a great job with
a difficult task you set before yourself. I liked the use of
color--esp setting off the first letter of each line. Your words
were well thought out. You expressed your thoughts and
feelings about words well. The lines with 11 syllables are
difficult for me to figure the meter on though I know they're
allowed. If you wanted, you could list this as a modified Italian
sonnet.
Thanks for sharing and good job branching out, Jan
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Grat advice, I felt that this losely scirbed piece was created with a bit of whimsical intention and while I colored outside the ridged lines of sonnet making I found it fun to play with the words.
