Immigration Blues
The problems with being an unwelcome immigrant.46 total reviews
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Nice work, Nolan. I think it important that all forms of art be used for social commentary. And your message is one that we need to hear. One suggestion that you may want to consider to see how it takes - change the formatting to create more lines, with the rhyming words on the end of each (e.g., line one ends after "say."). I think it may create a better experience for the reader both visually and as it as read.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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Nice work, Nolan. I think it important that all forms of art be used for social commentary. And your message is one that we need to hear. One suggestion that you may want to consider to see how it takes - change the formatting to create more lines, with the rhyming words on the end of each (e.g., line one ends after "say."). I think it may create a better experience for the reader both visually and as it as read.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. Also thank you for your suggestion. I am never closed to suggestions from fellow writers. I will give it a look and see how I like it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
As prejudice is rife in the world, some sections of the population are regarded with disdain and it is often through experience we form such judgements, but not everyone is the same and we should keep an open mind. In Tenerife which is an island off the coast of Africa we see those poor souls brave the crossing and risking their lives to reach our island for a better life. Some of them die on the journey, but they are processed at the port and allowed to stay, I enjoyed your endearing write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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As prejudice is rife in the world, some sections of the population are regarded with disdain and it is often through experience we form such judgements, but not everyone is the same and we should keep an open mind. In Tenerife which is an island off the coast of Africa we see those poor souls brave the crossing and risking their lives to reach our island for a better life. Some of them die on the journey, but they are processed at the port and allowed to stay, I enjoyed your endearing write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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No one alive chose the place of their birth, so they should not be blamed for the desire to change their fortune by trying to go to someplace more desirable. We owe it to our God and creator to be kind to our neighbor. To do anything less disqualifies us as righteous beings..
Comment from Raul1
I think that this poem is well written. You have penned well your message. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! Good job! Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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I think that this poem is well written. You have penned well your message. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! Good job! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your great review comments.
Comment from royowen
That sign on the Statue of Liberty is one of the most inspiring pieces of literature ever written brother, but it's meaning has slipped somewhat over the years, I've read some of the attitudes here on fanstory and I'm appalled with the lack of hospitality and compassion where once open arms greeted the refugee. Beautifully written Nomi, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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That sign on the Statue of Liberty is one of the most inspiring pieces of literature ever written brother, but it's meaning has slipped somewhat over the years, I've read some of the attitudes here on fanstory and I'm appalled with the lack of hospitality and compassion where once open arms greeted the refugee. Beautifully written Nomi, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you my brother. I hope you know that I receive your comments with an openly grateful heart.
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Bless you
Comment from jenintorre
This situation for immigrants is so true. It is heartbreaking. This is happening all over the world unfortunately. A very thought provoking poem. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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This situation for immigrants is so true. It is heartbreaking. This is happening all over the world unfortunately. A very thought provoking poem. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thanks Jen, I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Terry Broxson
nomi, well said. Please feel free to disagree with those politicians who want to put an asterisk on that famous saying on the Statue of Liberty, * not in an election year. Good job. Terry.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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nomi, well said. Please feel free to disagree with those politicians who want to put an asterisk on that famous saying on the Statue of Liberty, * not in an election year. Good job. Terry.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thanks Terry, you are one of the best.
Comment from Janet Foor
First, congratulations on your Milestone post of 300. That is amazing and quite a feat.
Excellent poem. Most of us come from immigrants somewhere in our ancestry so I have never understood the problem with immigrants. I do believe they should go through legal channels like my ancestors did.
Good work.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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First, congratulations on your Milestone post of 300. That is amazing and quite a feat.
Excellent poem. Most of us come from immigrants somewhere in our ancestry so I have never understood the problem with immigrants. I do believe they should go through legal channels like my ancestors did.
Good work.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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That is the system that works best, I agree. I object to the mistreatment people who do not fit into the ideal view or pattern of model citizen pleasing to the eye in dress, speech and mannerisms.
Comment from lancellot
This is an interesting mix of internal and end rhymes. Your point of view and feelings of the subject comes through clearly. The reader can understand where your emotions are on the the subject and what they call for you to advocate for.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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This is an interesting mix of internal and end rhymes. Your point of view and feelings of the subject comes through clearly. The reader can understand where your emotions are on the the subject and what they call for you to advocate for.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you. I am trying with each post to display the things I am learning from the good examples set by the accomplished writers here on the site.
Comment from newilk
I think this is an absolutely beautiful poem that many Americans feel afraid to acknowledge. People love the idea of freedom and acceptance until it means freedom for others and accepting people who don't look like them or have the same ideas
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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I think this is an absolutely beautiful poem that many Americans feel afraid to acknowledge. People love the idea of freedom and acceptance until it means freedom for others and accepting people who don't look like them or have the same ideas
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Spot on statement of truth and recognition.
Comment from mermaids
Your words have meaning. I feel for those who are trying to establish a life here, many have come from very harsh places. And we need workers in all occupations so badly. Your poem is a reflection of our times.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Your words have meaning. I feel for those who are trying to establish a life here, many have come from very harsh places. And we need workers in all occupations so badly. Your poem is a reflection of our times.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you. The death of so many from Covid, have left holes in the employment scene, and someone has to fill those jobs. It is foolish for Americans who benefit more from unemployment schemes to protest immigrants filling some of those jobs.
