Why Buy Bait
Use These Words contest entry2 total reviews
Comment from Susan Newell
Love this entry! Yes, crude, but oh so true of many experiences. I've been seasick a time or two myself, and not always at sea. Top floors of very tall buildings have the same effect.
Sue
where all my puke then float. -- this line is a little off; seems like it should be floated, but the extra syllable is unwanted; perhaps: where all my puke did float?
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Love this entry! Yes, crude, but oh so true of many experiences. I've been seasick a time or two myself, and not always at sea. Top floors of very tall buildings have the same effect.
Sue
where all my puke then float. -- this line is a little off; seems like it should be floated, but the extra syllable is unwanted; perhaps: where all my puke did float?
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the great review, Susan. Yeah, I know that lines off and I already gave to thought to using 'did' there but that just didn't sound right to me either. Lol. The rules didn't say that we could change the words so I went with this. I knew with these words, most of the entries were going to be about the same so I just wanted to go the total opposite direction. I'm glad you liked this ridiculous poem. Thank you again.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a clever and entertaining write and I loved the sentiments. I was once very sick onboard a small sailing boat and spent the entire time in the toilet! Never again! This is a fun write and I loved the suggestion in the last stanza, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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This is a clever and entertaining write and I loved the sentiments. I was once very sick onboard a small sailing boat and spent the entire time in the toilet! Never again! This is a fun write and I loved the suggestion in the last stanza, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the great review, Dolly. I saw the list of words we had to use and knew most the entries would be about the same so I decided to go a totally different direction and make the piece gross. Lol. I've known a couple people like this but I love being out on a boat. I'm glad you liked this ridiculous piece, D. Thank you again.
