Anchor or Buoy
Ultimate gain or unforgettable pain2 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is the beginning of a good poem. However, there are lines that are not stated with clarity such as } Internally Float with behavior coy This makes your message unclear.
Also, the font size is really small and difficult to read. The visual matches the background, but I am unsure how it relates to the text. This poem has all the words required for another contest offered. Write a poem of any length or style using these words:
Beauty, Heart, Gleam, Float, Splash. Are you sure you entered the right contest?
If so, you need to tweak this poem for clarity before judging.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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This is the beginning of a good poem. However, there are lines that are not stated with clarity such as } Internally Float with behavior coy This makes your message unclear.
Also, the font size is really small and difficult to read. The visual matches the background, but I am unsure how it relates to the text. This poem has all the words required for another contest offered. Write a poem of any length or style using these words:
Beauty, Heart, Gleam, Float, Splash. Are you sure you entered the right contest?
If so, you need to tweak this poem for clarity before judging.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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I did in fact enter the wrong one. However, I think it still fits perfectly with the topic so I?m going to leave it I suppose unless I have an inspiring jolt of something as worthy. Thanks for pointing this out.
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You are welcome. It could happen to any of us.
Comment from poetwatch
How I wish to reach the heavens and live the life that you have had, author. :) It matters not where one has been or how many times one is loved. What matters most is the love one shares on, "Or overwhelming pain and buckled knees." Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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How I wish to reach the heavens and live the life that you have had, author. :) It matters not where one has been or how many times one is loved. What matters most is the love one shares on, "Or overwhelming pain and buckled knees." Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you!
