I Love You Still ... despite
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Comment from evilynne
Oh, yes, unrequited love is tough. Your poem is great; the picture is a good companion to the work and the author's note is interesting. Best of luck in the contest! Evi
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Oh, yes, unrequited love is tough. Your poem is great; the picture is a good companion to the work and the author's note is interesting. Best of luck in the contest! Evi
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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as always, personally yours.
Comment from Regina Elliott
A sorrowful and nostalgic
poem of a past love. You
captured this so achingly in
your verse. Tom, I wish you
the best for the contest, this
is a strong entry. Blessings!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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A sorrowful and nostalgic
poem of a past love. You
captured this so achingly in
your verse. Tom, I wish you
the best for the contest, this
is a strong entry. Blessings!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you. Unless, I find a winning lottery ticket, for I don't indulge in fruitlessly spending money, I never offer sufficient member cents to garner votes, which is what it takes to be read for many more folks only read those submissions offering higher rewards. You're an exception but I like how you think. Thanks
Comment from Thomas Blanks
you reject me as often
as novels to a publisher.******
despite the fear of failing
there's this exhilaration
raising my temperature
when I think your name.******
How could these words not melt her cold heart?
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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you reject me as often
as novels to a publisher.******
despite the fear of failing
there's this exhilaration
raising my temperature
when I think your name.******
How could these words not melt her cold heart?
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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idk but the chase went on four years, and never was there a chance. Age 13-17. It's all good. She tenderly tended my garden with smiles, leaving memories.
Comment from Wendy G
Clever on many levels, including music titles as well, and the increasing line length. You've included some good images, and all in very conversational language. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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Clever on many levels, including music titles as well, and the increasing line length. You've included some good images, and all in very conversational language. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
Comment from Sally Law
This is really great, Tom, and so understood. I had to kiss a lot of frogs to get to my prince. These young relationships are oftentimes a rocky road. I am blessed that I found my soulmate and husband early on and that he loved me as much as I loved him. Still do!
Sending along my very best to you as always, and my very best for the contest, Sally :))
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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This is really great, Tom, and so understood. I had to kiss a lot of frogs to get to my prince. These young relationships are oftentimes a rocky road. I am blessed that I found my soulmate and husband early on and that he loved me as much as I loved him. Still do!
Sending along my very best to you as always, and my very best for the contest, Sally :))
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I love how you understand things I write as well as anyone.
You are also funny in a way I think we share such as when you reply, "I had to kiss a lot of frogs to get to my prince." Always nice to hear from you. Tom
Comment from karenina
I did think your verses increasing by one line with each stanza were clever!
I also enjoyed the incorporation of those two song titles, which, for many of us of a certain age will spring immediately to mind and likely tug a heartstring or two.
As a woman, I'd kind of hate to be compared to an "an eel fresh from the water" ~~ but hey, that's just me. (I'm kidding with you, of course -- an eel is better than a snake!)
Hey, you're on to something! One way to find interesting contests to enter is to create them yourself!
(I don't know why in the fifteen years I've been lurking around here, I never thought of doing this myself!)
Your author's notes always add to your post. They're always fun to read!
Karenina
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I did think your verses increasing by one line with each stanza were clever!
I also enjoyed the incorporation of those two song titles, which, for many of us of a certain age will spring immediately to mind and likely tug a heartstring or two.
As a woman, I'd kind of hate to be compared to an "an eel fresh from the water" ~~ but hey, that's just me. (I'm kidding with you, of course -- an eel is better than a snake!)
Hey, you're on to something! One way to find interesting contests to enter is to create them yourself!
(I don't know why in the fifteen years I've been lurking around here, I never thought of doing this myself!)
Your author's notes always add to your post. They're always fun to read!
Karenina
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I am unsure unsure who said"I?ve got to be me" and wonder if I said it first. Those who know me better also have a different way of saying it. " It?s only Tom." Be well, as if you could be anything else. 😜
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I had to go off and refresh my memory...
Just came back from listening to Sammy Davis Jr. singing "I've got to be me."
Here's the link:
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=wH-pk2vZG2M
Go! Enjoy! Change the lyrics as you sing along to "I've Got to be TOM!"
It'll be a blast!!!
(I'm sure your wife will thank me!)
Giggle.
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close but no cigar. How can I be right for someone else if I can't be right for me has never given a passel of friends; then again how many friends does one need.
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Hmm. Being true to yourself!
That's the ticket!
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm sure most have felt unrequited love at some time in life. Me, I can't really say I have. I guess, it's because I've lived pretty much according to that old Kenny Loggins song, "If you can't be with the one you love . . . then, love the one you're with." I'll never forget my grandfather once asking me if I had ever found a girlfriend, yet. He really wanted me to settle down. All I could say was, "No, Pops, I'm still just using everybody else's." He didn't find my remark amusing. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I'm sure most have felt unrequited love at some time in life. Me, I can't really say I have. I guess, it's because I've lived pretty much according to that old Kenny Loggins song, "If you can't be with the one you love . . . then, love the one you're with." I'll never forget my grandfather once asking me if I had ever found a girlfriend, yet. He really wanted me to settle down. All I could say was, "No, Pops, I'm still just using everybody else's." He didn't find my remark amusing. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I tried being a paramour. Hard. Must have done something wrong and yet ended up a-ok.
I also found what you told to grandpa precious.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words from start to finish. You had great notes also. Very good imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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This is a very well written poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words from start to finish. You had great notes also. Very good imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Wow, Tom this poem is so well-written. I like all of the comparisons you used throughout this poem. The font you selected is great. It is easily read too. It looks like a page from a love letter. The visual is just okay. A man sitting alone on a park bench may be stronger than the photo you selected. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Wow, Tom this poem is so well-written. I like all of the comparisons you used throughout this poem. The font you selected is great. It is easily read too. It looks like a page from a love letter. The visual is just okay. A man sitting alone on a park bench may be stronger than the photo you selected. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I am unaware how to change the picture. I felt forced into using a Fanstory photo with the intent of removing it for one of my own which I did for my entry which shows a woman walking away as if I did not exist. Any ideas? Thanks for reviewing.
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I see the woman walking away so you have succeeded. That's the photo I am speaking of. LOL What I do is type in my search box FREE_________. In the blank I put what I am looking for. Now you will get an assortment of free images. Download what you like to your computer. Then upload it here for your writings. On the poem page click photo from computer and just follow the steps asked. Hope this helps. I liked your poem. You are welcome for the review.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
You are, as your profile states, a true romantic Tom. You have written a passionate revelation of your true emotions for this "elusive" dream, to realize it will only end in a nightmare.
Very nice.
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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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You are, as your profile states, a true romantic Tom. You have written a passionate revelation of your true emotions for this "elusive" dream, to realize it will only end in a nightmare.
Very nice.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Water over the bridge. It was 1961-65, ninth grade through graduation. Stuck like glue, as Shania sang.
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So, the woman in the verse is not your "today" wife? If not, how does she like the tale?
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It?s not my wife
She reviews all my writings
The girl was my first infatuation. The seed to my romantically inspirations.
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I figured as much. I was just wondering what your wife of today thinks about your little soliloquy to the woman of the past.
