When the One you Love is Gone
Blank Verse43 total reviews
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
All of us here on FanStory can probably relate to losing someone of importance in our life. At my age, 73, in particular. My grandparents were gone before I was born, and I have lost both of my parents. Of 13 children, I am the youngest, so I have seen all but two others pass on. Then there are the countless in-laws, cousins, aunts, and uncles and it just goes on. Death has no boundaries, no limitations.
Each experience seems to be worse than the last. Each one leaves a void so large one would think it could never be filled. But time is magical in its ability to smooth over the rough edges of life ... and death. It is that special moment though when something individual occurs that "...you know your love is gone for sure."
There is no escaping it. If it doesn't happen to you, you still must face the aftermath of losing your loved one. I thank God every evening for giving me one more day of this precious gift ... life.
You give us wonderful words of assurance, some small consolation in the treacherous journey of life or death.
Very nicely worded.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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All of us here on FanStory can probably relate to losing someone of importance in our life. At my age, 73, in particular. My grandparents were gone before I was born, and I have lost both of my parents. Of 13 children, I am the youngest, so I have seen all but two others pass on. Then there are the countless in-laws, cousins, aunts, and uncles and it just goes on. Death has no boundaries, no limitations.
Each experience seems to be worse than the last. Each one leaves a void so large one would think it could never be filled. But time is magical in its ability to smooth over the rough edges of life ... and death. It is that special moment though when something individual occurs that "...you know your love is gone for sure."
There is no escaping it. If it doesn't happen to you, you still must face the aftermath of losing your loved one. I thank God every evening for giving me one more day of this precious gift ... life.
You give us wonderful words of assurance, some small consolation in the treacherous journey of life or death.
Very nicely worded.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Hello Gary, thank you for your wonderful review and for sharing your thoughts and experiences which mean a lot to me. You are One of 13 children; may dad was One of 14. His youngest brother just died. I lost my dad many, many years ago when he was still a young man. Each day is a gift indeed. Right now, the people of Florida are thinking about that. Once again, thank you. I truly appreciate the time spent. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
Comment from mermaids
I lost my husband last April so I can relate to your words. I like the verse about nature, squirrels, sparrows and a fox, it makes the reader feel good with its healing words. Excellent poem here.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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I lost my husband last April so I can relate to your words. I like the verse about nature, squirrels, sparrows and a fox, it makes the reader feel good with its healing words. Excellent poem here.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Hello mermaids, my condolences regarding the loss of your beloved husband. Thank you for sharing with me which verse you liked and why. Comments like yours means a lot to me. Once again, thank you for your heartfelt review. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from Wendy G
Very sad and simultaneously very beautiful. Your image is excellent. I like the way you move from the realism and grief of loss to a positive acceptance with the help of memories and the dawn of a new day, and move to the beautiful final couplet, thankfulness to God for the gift of life and a new day. Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Very sad and simultaneously very beautiful. Your image is excellent. I like the way you move from the realism and grief of loss to a positive acceptance with the help of memories and the dawn of a new day, and move to the beautiful final couplet, thankfulness to God for the gift of life and a new day. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Hello Wendy, thank you for your thoughtful review and for sharing your thoughts which are most appreciated. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from Marienkiefer
A very thoughtful and endearing poem.
Sparkling in your poem:
-Word choice and imagery or comparisons that help to convey emotions and to address difficult themes and loss.
-Daylight rejuvenates and saves from overwhelming thoughts that circle the mind at night.
A very sensitive poem. Sorry for your loss.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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A very thoughtful and endearing poem.
Sparkling in your poem:
-Word choice and imagery or comparisons that help to convey emotions and to address difficult themes and loss.
-Daylight rejuvenates and saves from overwhelming thoughts that circle the mind at night.
A very sensitive poem. Sorry for your loss.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Hello Marie, thank you for your great review and for sharing your thoughts which mean a lot to me. I truly appreciate the time spent.
LateBloomer
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Comment from Gloria ....
I think this is very well written. Filled with imagery and emotion, and your iambic pentameter is spot on.
I haven't read a blank verse poem or sonnet in a long time, so this was a delight to come upon today.
Gloria
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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I think this is very well written. Filled with imagery and emotion, and your iambic pentameter is spot on.
I haven't read a blank verse poem or sonnet in a long time, so this was a delight to come upon today.
Gloria
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Hi Gloria, thank you for your great review and for sharing your thoughts which mean a lot to me, especially "I haven't read a blank verse poem or sonnet in a long time, so this was a delight to come upon today." Once again, thank you. LateBloomer
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation,Late Bloomer.
-I am sorry about your cousin's loss, and I appreciate your notes, and caring about others in a similar situation.
-You wrote a good poem with vivid images.
-The first verse shows the loneliness that someone feels
"when silence echoes."
-Good transition in verse two with the beginning of a new day.
-A good volta that includes a shift to nature and the creatures inhabiting it.
-A very good closing.
-I think many people will relate to your poem.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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-Very nice image and presentation,Late Bloomer.
-I am sorry about your cousin's loss, and I appreciate your notes, and caring about others in a similar situation.
-You wrote a good poem with vivid images.
-The first verse shows the loneliness that someone feels
"when silence echoes."
-Good transition in verse two with the beginning of a new day.
-A good volta that includes a shift to nature and the creatures inhabiting it.
-A very good closing.
-I think many people will relate to your poem.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Hi Pam, thank you for your great review and for sharing your thoughts which mean a lot to me, especially "The first verse shows the loneliness that someone feels "when silence echoes." Once again, thank you. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
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You are very welcome, Late Bloomer, and I appreciate your reply.
Comment from evilynne
This is a lovely poem that speaks of loss and grieving but gives hope. Your description of nature's wonders is lovely, as well. Evi
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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This is a lovely poem that speaks of loss and grieving but gives hope. Your description of nature's wonders is lovely, as well. Evi
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Hello Evi, thank you for your great review and for sharing your thoughts which mean a lot to me. I truly appreciate the time spent and the six-star rating. Sincere, Margaret
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. Yes, a lost loved one is so hard. I guess the only helpful part is knowing you'll be reunited in heaven. I enjoyed reading this poem of hope.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Thank you for sharing this poem with us. Yes, a lost loved one is so hard. I guess the only helpful part is knowing you'll be reunited in heaven. I enjoyed reading this poem of hope.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Hello Barbara, thank you for your review and for sharing your thoughts, especially "Yes, a lost loved one is so hard." I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from Sally Law
My last six before the hurricane hits me. I read this yesterday and I just had to come back and give it to you. This is beautifully penned in blank verse poetry. I thought of the ones that I have lost :my mother, four brothers, and friends. My greatest loss has been my granddaughter, Esther Grace. Thankfully, she was followed by Sophia, my flesh and blood reminder of the goodness of God in this world.
Sending all my very best to you, and six stars to bless, dear Margaret.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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My last six before the hurricane hits me. I read this yesterday and I just had to come back and give it to you. This is beautifully penned in blank verse poetry. I thought of the ones that I have lost :my mother, four brothers, and friends. My greatest loss has been my granddaughter, Esther Grace. Thankfully, she was followed by Sophia, my flesh and blood reminder of the goodness of God in this world.
Sending all my very best to you, and six stars to bless, dear Margaret.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Hello Sally, thank you for your great review and for sharing your thoughts and personal loss which was a heartbreak that no grandmother, mother, or parent should ever endure. I pray that you will be safe from the Hurricane. God bless you. Xo. Margaret
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Most welcome. Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate you! Blessings, Sal XOs
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is very skillfully written blank verse. The descriptions are vivid and expressive, with smooth inclusion of personification; the message is soothing and moving. Yes, nature can help the lonely feel better about the day ahead.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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This is very skillfully written blank verse. The descriptions are vivid and expressive, with smooth inclusion of personification; the message is soothing and moving. Yes, nature can help the lonely feel better about the day ahead.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Hello Janice, thank you for the great review and for sharing your thoughts which mean a lot to me, especially " The descriptions are vivid and expressive" I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
