Two Sides
No hopelessness without hope14 total reviews
Comment from WLHall
"A shrivelled heart she roasted with doubt." Wow! What a great, descriptive line. I had a hard time with some of the words, but the overall feeling I get is darkness turning toward a light of realization of the choice I have between the two. Very nice.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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"A shrivelled heart she roasted with doubt." Wow! What a great, descriptive line. I had a hard time with some of the words, but the overall feeling I get is darkness turning toward a light of realization of the choice I have between the two. Very nice.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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You got it spot on as far as I'm concerned. I was having a low moment when I wrote this. Combined with finding that image, it made for a heartfelt poem that turned true because I did feel better after writing it :-)
Mike
Comment from Michaela Moore
a shrivelled heart she roasted with her doubt...that line took my breath away. But of course, without your imagery and diction to point the way to that line, it would have fallen flat. And then caged fingers holding a pen? Exquisite. Decadent. Umami!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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a shrivelled heart she roasted with her doubt...that line took my breath away. But of course, without your imagery and diction to point the way to that line, it would have fallen flat. And then caged fingers holding a pen? Exquisite. Decadent. Umami!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Lol, I might have to start using umami as an exclamation :-). This was the result of a low mood on the train to work and finding that evocative image. Out came the poem, and it worked - I felt much better afterwards.
Mike
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Michael
I read lots of your stuff. You have always been one of the best writers on this site. This one is profound and once again you make me haul out my crusty old dictionary, "exsanguinated love", really? loved it my friend.
xoxo deborah
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Hello Michael
I read lots of your stuff. You have always been one of the best writers on this site. This one is profound and once again you make me haul out my crusty old dictionary, "exsanguinated love", really? loved it my friend.
xoxo deborah
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Yay! So nice to see another familiar face (since I re-joined a few months ago, there aren't too many active members from my previous time here). Thanks so much for the awesome review, Deborah :-). I still feel as though I'm climbing back on the writing horse (I didn't write anything for about seven years) but, as ever, the poetry flows when it wants to.
Mike
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Author,
I like your philosophy poem, the intensity you express within it, and the adjectives you chose to use: especially, 'exsanguined love.'
Great work.
Good luck with all your writing.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Author,
I like your philosophy poem, the intensity you express within it, and the adjectives you chose to use: especially, 'exsanguined love.'
Great work.
Good luck with all your writing.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Cindy :-). I'm so glad you liked it!
Mike
Comment from dragonpoet
Mike,
This poem starts in desperate sadness and grief to hope that happy memories lessen the pain. The artwork matches the image in the poem
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Mike,
This poem starts in desperate sadness and grief to hope that happy memories lessen the pain. The artwork matches the image in the poem
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Joan :-). There was a certain catharsis in writing this one.
Mike
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You are most kindly welcome, Mike. I find that in some of my writing too.
Joan
Comment from lyenochka
That is why we write - we can "remember there is hope as well as scorn." So she can take up a pen and write of that " exsanguinated love," (you're missing an 's' in your spelling). And with her "caged fingers" she can grasp and pen and write a compelling story of revenge, or a happy ending.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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That is why we write - we can "remember there is hope as well as scorn." So she can take up a pen and write of that " exsanguinated love," (you're missing an 's' in your spelling). And with her "caged fingers" she can grasp and pen and write a compelling story of revenge, or a happy ending.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the catch, Helen :-). My phone does a great job of 'correcting' things I write intentionally, but manages to miss the actual errors!
This piece came out of a low mood on the train to work, and it did the trick - I genuinely felt better after writing it.
Mike
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Tough one to decipher. I think A writer is in extreme anguish due to some unrequited love. But somewhere, deep inside, there is a spark of creation. She can write, she an always write and thus give herself hope. Am I close?
Para 1, 5th sentence: (exanguinated) should be (exsanguinated)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Tough one to decipher. I think A writer is in extreme anguish due to some unrequited love. But somewhere, deep inside, there is a spark of creation. She can write, she an always write and thus give herself hope. Am I close?
Para 1, 5th sentence: (exanguinated) should be (exsanguinated)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Spot on, Gary :-). I write this during my own low mood, and it genuinely pulled me out of it, so it's all very self-referential!
Mike
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You certainly nailed the hopelessness in the first stanza Mike with some well chosen words and the the 'balm to calm' came along and hope brings us some relief as tomorrow is another day. A clever and skilful write Mike, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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You certainly nailed the hopelessness in the first stanza Mike with some well chosen words and the the 'balm to calm' came along and hope brings us some relief as tomorrow is another day. A clever and skilful write Mike, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much, Dolly :-). This one was definitely a personal piece, and it genuinely helped me, so the theme of the poem plays out.
Mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am pretty sure that many people have used a pen to help them over really bad times. I can't imagine any different. I enjoyed reading this emotional poem. Thank you for sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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I am pretty sure that many people have used a pen to help them over really bad times. I can't imagine any different. I enjoyed reading this emotional poem. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Barbara :-). A melancholy mood on the train to work this morning and out popped this. It did the trick, too.
Mike
Comment from pookietoo
a very nice poem. How did you come up with exanguinated love? I had not heard that word before. Keep up the great work and keep smiling. Have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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a very nice poem. How did you come up with exanguinated love? I had not heard that word before. Keep up the great work and keep smiling. Have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Thank you :-). As often happens, it popped into my head and I used it, then I looked it up before posting to make sure I'd used it right!
Mike
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oh, it is you. great job, Mike.
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Mike, do you know Tom Horonzy? And are you on facebook? He hasn't read my story in for the contest he created yet.
