Daydreams from the Ashes
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "The Favorite Angel"Poems and meditations
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Comment from Michaela Moore
Why do you fear this would get you in trouble? I loved every syllable. And this poem is filled with so much truth! TRUTH with shouty capitals. Pride is the worst sin on the whole because pride is so stealthy and hard to see in oneself. And it comes (as you so wonderfully point out) in all shades. I also adore the image you chose. The angel image is hard to find, but you see impressions of it...the angel looks beautiful and ethereal, but also menacing and torrid. I am so glad I came across you yesterday. You are an amazing master of words. Write on! Write on!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Why do you fear this would get you in trouble? I loved every syllable. And this poem is filled with so much truth! TRUTH with shouty capitals. Pride is the worst sin on the whole because pride is so stealthy and hard to see in oneself. And it comes (as you so wonderfully point out) in all shades. I also adore the image you chose. The angel image is hard to find, but you see impressions of it...the angel looks beautiful and ethereal, but also menacing and torrid. I am so glad I came across you yesterday. You are an amazing master of words. Write on! Write on!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I was speaking half facetiously when I said it'd get me in trouble, given I know there are people that might take offense to it. I'm glad it at least came across as even-handed, that was the intent. I really appreciate you giving my random poet rant your time and I hope you have a wonderful day.
Comment from Aiona
Almost Shakespearean sonnet-like -- it's both a warning and yet also a self-admonishment. I don't usually care for free-verse, but at the same time, it almost has some internal and end-rhyme, whether or not intended. (ex. "greatness" "sacred" "patriot") (ex. "Life" "right" "alike") I love that there are so many metaphors and allusions, that one can really feel called out when reading it.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Almost Shakespearean sonnet-like -- it's both a warning and yet also a self-admonishment. I don't usually care for free-verse, but at the same time, it almost has some internal and end-rhyme, whether or not intended. (ex. "greatness" "sacred" "patriot") (ex. "Life" "right" "alike") I love that there are so many metaphors and allusions, that one can really feel called out when reading it.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I have a special soft place in my heart for free verse, but I know it's not for everyone. The almost-rhymes came pretty organically, even with it being written out of frustration. I really appreciate your time and I hope you have a wonderful day.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
What is the worst sin? Killing.
Why should you get into trouble for writing the truth? We are not (yet) in a land where certain words are forbidden (unless I missed an episode).
Why would hiding from the news help? Certainly the news as reported is flawed, being biased and incomplete. But then you have a choice, dig deeper to complete the puzzle, mine your memory and direct knowledge from the past, or note that what you are hearing is unreliable, and move on to other things. But surely it is better to have a vague sketch to build on than turn your back on everything.
For me, your poem generates more questions than it provides answers. Kate xx
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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What is the worst sin? Killing.
Why should you get into trouble for writing the truth? We are not (yet) in a land where certain words are forbidden (unless I missed an episode).
Why would hiding from the news help? Certainly the news as reported is flawed, being biased and incomplete. But then you have a choice, dig deeper to complete the puzzle, mine your memory and direct knowledge from the past, or note that what you are hearing is unreliable, and move on to other things. But surely it is better to have a vague sketch to build on than turn your back on everything.
For me, your poem generates more questions than it provides answers. Kate xx
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I mostly meant the news avoidance because I end up so frustrated with what is shown, particularly when I know it is a misrepresentation that people take as gospel. And I hate writing from a place of frustration. The point of pride as the worst sin was because I see it as the root of the worst evils, like killing on a mass scale in the name of purifying a nation. I'm sorry if it came across poorly, but thank you for giving it your time. I appreciate it and I hope you have a wonderful day.
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No, it didn't come across poorly. I appreciated it very much, but I needed to clarify my thoughts. I spent many years where you are, but finally I decided frustration is better than total ignorance. So now I watch, and sift endlessly (and watch as many of the satirical programmes as I can). You have a good evening, Kate xx
Comment from Julie G1
This poem is very deep, but meaningful. It conveys your message clearly. I thought the graphic was effective, and added to your verse. Overall, the poem worked for me. I hope you keep on writing for poet's glory.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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This poem is very deep, but meaningful. It conveys your message clearly. I thought the graphic was effective, and added to your verse. Overall, the poem worked for me. I hope you keep on writing for poet's glory.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I wrote it mostly out of frustration late at night, so it was a toss up on whether it would be good or bad. I really appreciate you giving it your time and the words of encouragement. I hope you have a wonderful day.
