My Husband's Need
And my attempts to avoid giving in41 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. Well, you built up to a climax with a lot of innuendos about what you are talking about. But I was expecting to be surprised at the end and you did not disappoint. Hope he got some low-fat ice cream! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Lol. Well, you built up to a climax with a lot of innuendos about what you are talking about. But I was expecting to be surprised at the end and you did not disappoint. Hope he got some low-fat ice cream! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Helen, Lol, thank you for such a lovely review and comments.
This was kind of provocative for me, even if mostly suggestive but lots of fun.
I thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
-interesting poem about sex with husband with a twist at the end...he wanted ice-cream lol
-Nice presentation and picture.
-Your descriptive words flow well expressing a clear mental image. Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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-interesting poem about sex with husband with a twist at the end...he wanted ice-cream lol
-Nice presentation and picture.
-Your descriptive words flow well expressing a clear mental image. Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Gypsy, Lol, thank you for such a lovely review and comments.
This was kind of provocative for me, even if mostly suggestive but lots of fun.
I thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from SLMorrical
A wonderful entry for the contest. I love how it flows. I also like how it is written for people to develop their own Ideal of what is going on. Good luck on the contest. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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A wonderful entry for the contest. I love how it flows. I also like how it is written for people to develop their own Ideal of what is going on. Good luck on the contest. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Lol, thank you for such a lovely review and comments. And I truly appreciate your generous gift of six stars.
This was kind of provocative for me, even if mostly suggestive but lots of fun.
I thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from royowen
Just love this, what a wonderful quaint poem, the secret is to be attentive in all ways, Christ taught, "Preferring others to oneself". That's the problem, "Husbands love your wives, as Christ loved the church and gave His life for her" beautifully written and very quirky, great rhyming and flow, loved the artwork, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Just love this, what a wonderful quaint poem, the secret is to be attentive in all ways, Christ taught, "Preferring others to oneself". That's the problem, "Husbands love your wives, as Christ loved the church and gave His life for her" beautifully written and very quirky, great rhyming and flow, loved the artwork, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Roy, Lol, thank you for such a lovely review and comments.
This was kind of provocative for me, even if mostly suggestive but lots of fun.
I thank you again my dear friend!
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Well done
Comment from Terry Broxson
LOL, you get my last six...he has begged enough! I guess since he is getting old, you could offer to put it in the microwave for him, so he could use a straw. Terry
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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LOL, you get my last six...he has begged enough! I guess since he is getting old, you could offer to put it in the microwave for him, so he could use a straw. Terry
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Oh sure, feel sorry for the 70 yr old guy that harasses his wife to go against the doctors. I suppose I didn't fool you for a minute. Lol! Thanks so much Terry for the awesome review and six stars. Appreciated so very much my friend!
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Boom! I loved the unexpected and humorous finish. Until then, I was thinking, "Oh my, I hope her husband doesn't read this."
Well paced; the rhyming in couplets felt very natural and unforced. Thanks for the laugh!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Boom! I loved the unexpected and humorous finish. Until then, I was thinking, "Oh my, I hope her husband doesn't read this."
Well paced; the rhyming in couplets felt very natural and unforced. Thanks for the laugh!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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I thank you very much Charles for your very kind comments. Actually I read it to my husband and he thought it was hilarious. I guess he is used to me writing with a little fiction and non fiction, because complete reality just isn't that funny. However, I do have to ask what there was that you thought I could improve on. We ask because many new people are a little confused by the rating system that is used here. A four star or good rating usually means there was something that you didn't like about it. But is the same misconception of most new people until they write enough to see how people rate their own. Thank you Charles and once again, I appreciate the very kind comments.
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I had another writer say the same about my rating. I had assumed 4 out of 5 meant really good. I was saving the 5 for the poems that stirred me to a different level. If I?m moved to tears, that?s a five. The rating system doesn?t seem to provide much value if we give all good poems 5 stars. But that seems to be the expectation. I guess I need to change my grading strategy.
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Don't feel bad because this happens a lot with new people. The ones that move you are the six stars posts.
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What might help is to go to a post that you have reviewed and on the bottom where you wrote the review, there's a little box that says review ratings. You can't do that on blind contests like this, but perhaps one of the others you have reviewed. You will how others have reviewed and also able to read what the regulars say.
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What might help is to go to a post that you have reviewed and on the bottom where you wrote the review, there's a little box that says review ratings. You can't do that on blind contests like this, but perhaps one of the others you have reviewed. You will how others have reviewed and also able to read what the regulars say.
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i will do that. Thanks. For the record, I think for your subject matter and the purpose you wrote it, there wasn't anything you could do to make it better. I'm also unclear as to what the rankings mean. This site might be better served and more useful if people simply exchanged feedback without the stars.
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Yeah, it's just the way they have always done it. If after you look, make sure to go back and change any that you see fit. Sis stars are Exceptional! Five Stars says excellent, but if you really can't find anything wrong then assume it is excellent. Good means it was ok, but could have been better, anything below that really needs help. .... I hope we become friends and that you enjoy your time here.
Comment from MissMerri
Yeah, my husband loves ice cream too. If I don't give it to him he just goes somewhere else to get it. These men want what they want, I guess. Your poem is cute and funny and I wish you the best in the contest. MM
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Yeah, my husband loves ice cream too. If I don't give it to him he just goes somewhere else to get it. These men want what they want, I guess. Your poem is cute and funny and I wish you the best in the contest. MM
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Merri, Lol, thank you for such a lovely review and comments. Yes, my husband doesn't have to beg for ice cream either, as he can always run to the store and get some. But our life is too boring to only tell about the real life stuff. haha! This was kind of provocative for me, even if mostly suggestive but lots of fun.
I thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from Frank Malley
"My Husband's Need" could be more coyly titled, but nonetheless this is a funny, rhyming poem about an insatiable husband who's wearing out - or has long ago worn out - his welcome sexually. Ice cream will only distract an aroused man for as long as it takes to eat it. When needs and desires aren't aligned, some one always gets the short end of the stick.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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"My Husband's Need" could be more coyly titled, but nonetheless this is a funny, rhyming poem about an insatiable husband who's wearing out - or has long ago worn out - his welcome sexually. Ice cream will only distract an aroused man for as long as it takes to eat it. When needs and desires aren't aligned, some one always gets the short end of the stick.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Frank, as always, you are so right. I struggled with the title, but as we all know, sex sells. And if theres one thing I learned from any place that I have ever written, if you want someone to read your work, you have to grab them with the title. Shhhhh, don't tell anyone that I use such trickery. Lol! I am choosing to believe that you liked my silly little poem and I really needed the laugh and fun that it gave me to write it, so hope you smiled a little too my friend. Thanks so much Frank, you too gave me with a big smile and your comments about wearing out the welcome of his sexuality. You got me pegged! hehe! I sure appreciate you reviewing my poem and your fun comments. And as always, it is a pleasure.
Comment from Susan Newell
This is a cute and funny poem to lead our minds down a long and winding road. I suspected we would have a surprise at the end, and indeed we did. Thanks for the light chuckle.
Sue
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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This is a cute and funny poem to lead our minds down a long and winding road. I suspected we would have a surprise at the end, and indeed we did. Thanks for the light chuckle.
Sue
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Thanks Sue, and I figured most might get that, but are still having lots of fun reading. Especially if you knew who I was, you wouldn't believe that I would write anything sexually explicit. Lol! Thanks for the fun comments my dear friend.
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When the contest is over, you will lose your mask. :-)
Comment from GeraldShuler
Because my wife is married to a man like this I must admit the total accuracy of your poem. Unlike the husband in your poem, though, I know the power (and authority) of the word 'No'. In that arena women do, and should, rule. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Because my wife is married to a man like this I must admit the total accuracy of your poem. Unlike the husband in your poem, though, I know the power (and authority) of the word 'No'. In that arena women do, and should, rule. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Lol, thanks Gerald. Now if we didn't exaggerate, who would read our writing, right? Same with the silly title, as its a start to get people to read it. And even through if my husband wants ice cream, even if I said no (the doc did tell him to lose some. Weight) he would go get it himself. However I can appreciate a man, who actually listens to his wife. Way to go, as you could teach a few other guys some new tricks. Thanks for your fun review and comments my friend.
