Comment from Cindy Decker 2

Excellent

E story,
Your excellent poem connects well and makes a good point.
Virtual reality has its good points, in moderation.
Our imaginations can take us to all these places as well. We shouldn't need computers or virtual reality to take us there.
I like the points you make in this excellent poem.
Good luck.
Blessings,
Cindy

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and your support of the poem. I think living in real life is better. estory

reply by Cindy Decker 2 on 10-Sep-2022

Your welcome, Estory.

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

You have conveyed a powerful message about the exciting--but unreal--
through a wide range of examples. I do see the tongue-in-cheek humor and the message about the sadness of it all.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and all the support for my little piece. estory

Comment from K.L. Rockquemore

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this verse because of the topic.

Very relevant in today's world. I have two teenagers and I have to monitor screen time because if I do not, hours and hours can be lost in the internet and gaming.

It is truly a scary enterprise!!
It is impossible to eradicate at this point.
People are just going to get deeper and deeper into it.

I think for the introverts out there, it must be enjoyable to travel the world, look like anyone you want, build your own reality completely different than the one you live in.

What will be the ultimate consequence?

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and your perspective on this subject. Real life is where its at estory

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

I found this interesting, even though I am sadly lacking in knowledge of Jack Anderson and Zuckerberg. So my comments are possibly at odds with your intentions. But I give you my assurance that I believe in, and indeed live in, a virtual world. No need for social media, no need for pre-existing images. The elements of my world are all within my mind, that I mine with a pencil and spread on a computer screen or a sheet of paper for my amusement or education. Kate xx

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and for your comments on this subject. I like living in the real world. We were made for that, not the virtual world. estory

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Interesting poem! I went off to read a bit of Jack Anderson (so thanks for that reference!)--

It is a wry tone, and a worrisome reality, in this virtual world. As we become less and less connected and more able to create our own "virtual" existence one wonders what becomes of true human interaction.

To lean on an old saying -- It's a nice place to visit, but I wouldn't want to live there!

Karenina

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022

I agree with you; I wouldn't want to live there. Plus its probably full of tracking devices....estory

reply by karenina on 10-Sep-2022

We agree... I'm not interested in living in an alternative virtual world!

Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

I found this a very interesting and thought provoking read. Very enjoyable but to me it didn't seem like poetry or prose but hey ... What do I know. All the best. Jen.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and your comments on this poem. prose poetry is a reletivly new concept, born out of free verse. It is really about conversational writing, and the cadance and repetitions of phrasing creates the rhythm and echoing musical effects. Read Jack Anderson's book The Clouds of that Country. Especially Cafeterias, The Mysterious Sound and Meditation on Christian Science Reading Rooms. estory

Comment from Judy Lawless

Excellent

This is an interesting look on the direction our life seems to be going, estory, and it works well in this style of poetry. There are days when I wish I could live in virtual reality, I must admit. But it would soon get boring, I think. Good job.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and your comments supporting my piece. estory

reply by Judy Lawless on 10-Sep-2022

You are most welcome. :)

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

I thought the first paragraph was going to lead to a humdrum work, but it didn't. The way I see it line three was superfluous. After that I found a rhythm and enjoyed it. Welcome back, I guess. We'll have to wait and see.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and the support of my poem. estory

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi estory, I liked your wry poem about virtual reality.You are really good at this form. It might be fun to try virtual reality, but that doesn't stop it from being a poor substitute for the real thing. But the world is moving so fast, so who knows? Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and all the continued support for my crazy poetry. I am living in the real world. estory

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

A well-expressed and thoughtful piece. Yes, it is a parallel world, but not comparable to the real world, which still has many advantages, including the value of positive interactions and meaningful relationships! I see the wry humour, and hope we can all remain free to choose and experience our reality.
Wendy

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and all your thoughts on this subject. We were made for hands on interaction. What would life be without that? estory