Vivian on the prowl
A flirting Vivian25 total reviews
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
I have an aunt like this. My mother's youngest sister. And she is still living.
In 2013 at my mom's funeral, she hit on the preacher. She wore clothes, nylons and shoes that made her look like a hooker. And she is in her late eighties as I write.
Actually, my mom told me that my dad slept with her once. He had taken her home. She lived over one-hundred miles from us. He claimed to begged him to sleep with her.
When he came home, he confessed. Yes, it is sick. I did not trust neither of them. Especially her. Yes, they were both wrong. And I hope God forgave them both. When I was a child, I loved her like a mother.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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I have an aunt like this. My mother's youngest sister. And she is still living.
In 2013 at my mom's funeral, she hit on the preacher. She wore clothes, nylons and shoes that made her look like a hooker. And she is in her late eighties as I write.
Actually, my mom told me that my dad slept with her once. He had taken her home. She lived over one-hundred miles from us. He claimed to begged him to sleep with her.
When he came home, he confessed. Yes, it is sick. I did not trust neither of them. Especially her. Yes, they were both wrong. And I hope God forgave them both. When I was a child, I loved her like a mother.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your review, Carolyn. It is amazing that ladies like this seem to outlive everybody. Vivian lived well into her eighties.
Mary
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Yes, she has outlived everyone.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
This was a beautiful entry for the Share Your Story contest.
I loved your story about your dad and Vivian. Your character development is outstanding you brought the characters to life. I'm sorry for your loss.
Well done. Goodluck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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This was a beautiful entry for the Share Your Story contest.
I loved your story about your dad and Vivian. Your character development is outstanding you brought the characters to life. I'm sorry for your loss.
Well done. Goodluck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Thank you Gypsy for your review and kind words. It is appreciated.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from Wendy G
Your poor father being set upon by an outrageous flirt! Yes, she was just having fun, but he was embarrassed - but such a gentleman, and so kindhearted, not wanting to hurt her feelings. Your father was a very special man, and you have written with humour, love and understanding, and vivid descriptions. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Your poor father being set upon by an outrageous flirt! Yes, she was just having fun, but he was embarrassed - but such a gentleman, and so kindhearted, not wanting to hurt her feelings. Your father was a very special man, and you have written with humour, love and understanding, and vivid descriptions. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Thank you Wendy for your review. It is appreciated. Thank you for your kind words about my dad.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from royowen
He must have raised you on his own, if my wife had died at such an early age, I would still have loved and raised my girls irrespective of that. I appreciate you sharing your dad's story, I think I'm "just dad" to my girls, and I'm proud to be just that. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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He must have raised you on his own, if my wife had died at such an early age, I would still have loved and raised my girls irrespective of that. I appreciate you sharing your dad's story, I think I'm "just dad" to my girls, and I'm proud to be just that. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Roy, I truly appreciate your review and very kind words.
Blessings,
Mary
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Welcome Mary
Comment from Thesis
This is a very revealing story of a family engaged in an uncomfortable situation for the Dad. Teasing him and mild assault by Vivian did not sit well with him because he was a gentleman. The fact that the Dad seemed timeless is pointed out along with his life milestones that were not pleasant, make the story somewhat sad that he was harassed this way.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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This is a very revealing story of a family engaged in an uncomfortable situation for the Dad. Teasing him and mild assault by Vivian did not sit well with him because he was a gentleman. The fact that the Dad seemed timeless is pointed out along with his life milestones that were not pleasant, make the story somewhat sad that he was harassed this way.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your review, and kind thoughts. It is appreciated.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from leather
This is funny, well-written, and illustrated. She sounds like a "larger than life" character that was the bane of your dad's existence. I can only suggest that you increase the text size. Thanks for sharing.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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This is funny, well-written, and illustrated. She sounds like a "larger than life" character that was the bane of your dad's existence. I can only suggest that you increase the text size. Thanks for sharing.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the six stars and review. I am truly honored and appreciate your kind comments.
I changed the font .
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You're welcome.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another funny story from your life, Mary. Obviously your dad wasn't interested in dating anyone, especially Vivian. I felt sorry for him, but the crashing of the chair putting them in a pile on the ground, and Vivian's comment is priceless! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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This is another funny story from your life, Mary. Obviously your dad wasn't interested in dating anyone, especially Vivian. I felt sorry for him, but the crashing of the chair putting them in a pile on the ground, and Vivian's comment is priceless! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you Judy. I appreciate your kind words and wishes.
Your right Dad met my mom as a 20 year old and he never got over her death.
Best wishes
Mary
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You?re most welcome, Mary.
Comment from Olivanne Marsh
Your writing included excellent character-defining details about attire and physical descriptions that really gave the reader a good "picture" of the people you were writing about. I think you could have moved the paragraph about Vivian coming to visit to the beginning, since that is where this story actually begins. Keep the part about your Dad working on the farm and all lower in the story because it's good colorful background. Your writing style sets a natural, comfortable tone to the story and it flows well in most places, but I did find a couple of things I think you could improve, mentioned below:
"His look certainly would scare away any crows or any other living creature." I thought this sentence was a little awkward, no big deal, but I think you could leave out the word "any" before crows and it would improve it.
"This one summer, his relaxation was often disrupted when Vivian visited.
"I'm just funning with ya."
Vivian explained as she pulled her arm off my dad's shoulder..." This is a failed transition and I think it's because this should be closer to, if not the beginning of the story, and not buried in the middle.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Your writing included excellent character-defining details about attire and physical descriptions that really gave the reader a good "picture" of the people you were writing about. I think you could have moved the paragraph about Vivian coming to visit to the beginning, since that is where this story actually begins. Keep the part about your Dad working on the farm and all lower in the story because it's good colorful background. Your writing style sets a natural, comfortable tone to the story and it flows well in most places, but I did find a couple of things I think you could improve, mentioned below:
"His look certainly would scare away any crows or any other living creature." I thought this sentence was a little awkward, no big deal, but I think you could leave out the word "any" before crows and it would improve it.
"This one summer, his relaxation was often disrupted when Vivian visited.
"I'm just funning with ya."
Vivian explained as she pulled her arm off my dad's shoulder..." This is a failed transition and I think it's because this should be closer to, if not the beginning of the story, and not buried in the middle.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your input. I did remove "any". I have to tell you, I agree with starting the story with "I'm just funning with ya."
However, I tried three times and had difficulty transitioning from Vivian to my Dad's description and story. Maybe if I gave it a few days, I would have thought it through. Your advice is sound and thank you for taking the time to critique it.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from GeraldShuler
This would have also been good in the 'Describe a Place' contest. I could see as I read the bean picking, the campfire, and the summer hue of your father's face. You did a wonderful job in this 'Share Your Story' contest. I hope you do well.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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This would have also been good in the 'Describe a Place' contest. I could see as I read the bean picking, the campfire, and the summer hue of your father's face. You did a wonderful job in this 'Share Your Story' contest. I hope you do well.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you Gerald for your kind wishes and review.
I truly appreciate it.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from John Ciarmello
You're poor dad! I can see his embarrassment with your cousin's egging on the situation. lol. Ahh, the joy of family what would we do without them? I enjoyed the read, Mary. Well done and well organized. Best, JohnC.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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You're poor dad! I can see his embarrassment with your cousin's egging on the situation. lol. Ahh, the joy of family what would we do without them? I enjoyed the read, Mary. Well done and well organized. Best, JohnC.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you John, I appreciate your review and very kind words.
Best wishes
Mary
