Vivian on the prowl
A flirting Vivian25 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
I recall a previous Vivian story, and based on this story, feel Vivian is a real character. She sounds like a warn, fun loving person, who just wanted to see your Dad's reactions. Your author notes tell us your father led a determined life, filled with hardships that he pushed his way through. To begin a new job at age 60 is admirable. I enjoyed your story. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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I recall a previous Vivian story, and based on this story, feel Vivian is a real character. She sounds like a warn, fun loving person, who just wanted to see your Dad's reactions. Your author notes tell us your father led a determined life, filled with hardships that he pushed his way through. To begin a new job at age 60 is admirable. I enjoyed your story. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your review and very kind comments. I appreciate it very much.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This is posted under general fiction but should be a nonfiction for this contest.
There is a Vivian in every family, lol! Nice job of recounting this family story.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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This is posted under general fiction but should be a nonfiction for this contest.
There is a Vivian in every family, lol! Nice job of recounting this family story.
Good luck.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your review. I changed it to non-fiction. I was a little confused because it was a memoir.
Thank you
Mary
Comment from BethShelby
I love your Vivian stories. I think we all know a character something like Vivian, but your Vivian comes across in living cover and makes us all smile. She is a real character and I'm pretty she she doesn't really care what people think of her actions.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022
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I love your Vivian stories. I think we all know a character something like Vivian, but your Vivian comes across in living cover and makes us all smile. She is a real character and I'm pretty she she doesn't really care what people think of her actions.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Beth, for your kind words. I appreciate your review.
You are right in that Vivian was a character, and her own person.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I enjoyed this story very much. It was rich and funny. However, I have two queries about it as an entry for the Share Your Story contest. One is classifying it as fiction. You say yourself in the notes it is very true in the outline. It might be better to class it as non-fiction, and describe in what way it is actually "creative fact". More importantly, the contest is YOUR story. I saw little of you in it. Maybe you could change the POV, or if that's too difficult, at least add a paragraph describing how the Dad-Vivian interplay affected you, for example.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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I enjoyed this story very much. It was rich and funny. However, I have two queries about it as an entry for the Share Your Story contest. One is classifying it as fiction. You say yourself in the notes it is very true in the outline. It might be better to class it as non-fiction, and describe in what way it is actually "creative fact". More importantly, the contest is YOUR story. I saw little of you in it. Maybe you could change the POV, or if that's too difficult, at least add a paragraph describing how the Dad-Vivian interplay affected you, for example.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your review. I changed it to non-fiction. What confused me was that the contest rules was flexible and noted to be a memoir which allowed enhancing the truth. Did Vivian haunt dad? You betcha! However not remembering details I had to enhance the story.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from Liz O'Neill
The speculations are funny, also may hold truth: "Maybe, he was put in the field because he perspired so much; my aunt saw it as watering the plants;" Perfect timing for alliteration: "He grumbled, grabbed a beer bottle, and headed to the outhouse wearing a flowery scarf." This is a funny ending: "The old chair gave away under the weight of the two, and they landed on the ground." Well thoughtout.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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The speculations are funny, also may hold truth: "Maybe, he was put in the field because he perspired so much; my aunt saw it as watering the plants;" Perfect timing for alliteration: "He grumbled, grabbed a beer bottle, and headed to the outhouse wearing a flowery scarf." This is a funny ending: "The old chair gave away under the weight of the two, and they landed on the ground." Well thoughtout.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Thank you Liz, I truly appreciate your review. I am glad you enjoyed the story.
Best wishes
Mary
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Yes, I did enjoy it
Comment from Terry Broxson
I enjoyed your well-told tale. Even if you listed it as fiction, it certainly sounds like a whole lot of truth. I do wish you good luck in the contest. Good job. Terry.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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I enjoyed your well-told tale. Even if you listed it as fiction, it certainly sounds like a whole lot of truth. I do wish you good luck in the contest. Good job. Terry.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Thank you Terry, I truly appreciate your kind words and wishes.
Yes there is a lot of truth with the interaction between my dad and Vivian. I embellished some parts in keeping with the contest rules.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from robyn corum
Mary,
Sounds like Vivian knew who she could mess with and how far to take it without going TOO far. Your dad seems like a nice, friendly guy who doesn't like to hurt anyone's feelings. Cool.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
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Mary,
Sounds like Vivian knew who she could mess with and how far to take it without going TOO far. Your dad seems like a nice, friendly guy who doesn't like to hurt anyone's feelings. Cool.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your review and you are right about my dad.
Take care,
Mary
Comment from Susan Newell
Mary,
What a delightful story, even if you embellished it a little. Having gotten myself folded up in a webbed chair when the straps failed, I can really appreciate the ending. As young as I was when it happened, it took some effort to extricate myself from the chair.
Sue
This one summer, his relaxation was often disrupted when Vivian visited.
"I'm just funning with ya."
Vivian explained as she pulled her arm off my dad's shoulder. -- above seems like it shouldn't have a line/paragraph break
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
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Mary,
What a delightful story, even if you embellished it a little. Having gotten myself folded up in a webbed chair when the straps failed, I can really appreciate the ending. As young as I was when it happened, it took some effort to extricate myself from the chair.
Sue
This one summer, his relaxation was often disrupted when Vivian visited.
"I'm just funning with ya."
Vivian explained as she pulled her arm off my dad's shoulder. -- above seems like it shouldn't have a line/paragraph break
Comment Written 08-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Sue for your kind words and review.
I will review it again. I know when I have a speaking line, I have to let it stand by itself.
Best wishes,
Mary
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
I loved the kind of quirky, down-to-earth, humorous, and honest portrayal of the relationship between your dad and Aunt Vivian. You wrote the story in an engaging and humorous and transparent manner.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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I loved the kind of quirky, down-to-earth, humorous, and honest portrayal of the relationship between your dad and Aunt Vivian. You wrote the story in an engaging and humorous and transparent manner.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your very kind comments. I appreciate the six stars particularly coming from a writer of your calibre.
Best regards
Mary
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fun story and the world is full of characters like this who mean no harm but can sometimes be a it of a nuisance. I expect your Dad was quite flattered really, much enjoyed Mary, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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A fun story and the world is full of characters like this who mean no harm but can sometimes be a it of a nuisance. I expect your Dad was quite flattered really, much enjoyed Mary, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Thank you Dolly. I appreciate your review and kind comments.
Best wishes
