Daydreams from the Ashes
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "A Loving Lens"Poems and meditations
16 total reviews
Comment from BermyBye50
This is a exceptional entry in the If You Were An Artist... contest worthy of 10 stars. It is a mastery of free verse and visual art combined.
A few suggestions. Remove the word with in the line below
(with) capturing the essence of people
as silhouette or portrait detail:
replace followed by with 'rediscovered in'
their weathering doubts and hopeful dreams
as brilliant light followed by (rediscovered in) a dark room,
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022
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This is a exceptional entry in the If You Were An Artist... contest worthy of 10 stars. It is a mastery of free verse and visual art combined.
A few suggestions. Remove the word with in the line below
(with) capturing the essence of people
as silhouette or portrait detail:
replace followed by with 'rediscovered in'
their weathering doubts and hopeful dreams
as brilliant light followed by (rediscovered in) a dark room,
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
Comment Written 10-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review! I?ll have to take a look over it again and see if I can improve based on your suggestions. I really appreciate your time and I hope you have a wonderful day.
Comment from Sally Law
This is fabulous, mystery poet. A wonderful piece of art in itself that has captured my vote. The abstract art compliments the lovely presentation. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming vote,
Sally Law
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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This is fabulous, mystery poet. A wonderful piece of art in itself that has captured my vote. The abstract art compliments the lovely presentation. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming vote,
Sally Law
Comment Written 05-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate your time and the best wishes. I hope you have a wonderful day and I?m happy to send best wishes back at you.
Comment from lancellot
Yes, taking a picture or painting a portrait could and has been seen as the artist taking a snap shot or a moment in time, and then freezing it forever.
This a well written free verse. It has good detail usage of descriptive words.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Yes, taking a picture or painting a portrait could and has been seen as the artist taking a snap shot or a moment in time, and then freezing it forever.
This a well written free verse. It has good detail usage of descriptive words.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad the poem came across as well as it did. I appreciate your time and I hope you have a wonderful day.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, if only to see through an artist's eyes or be able to put my thoughts on paper with such vivid brilliance that goosebumps raise in a tingling sensation. A talented writer of poetry and prose praised your work and gave me your name as someone to read. Then, after seeing your profile picture, I remembered reading and enjoying a post or two in the last couple weeks. Thanks for sharing. I wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Wow, if only to see through an artist's eyes or be able to put my thoughts on paper with such vivid brilliance that goosebumps raise in a tingling sensation. A talented writer of poetry and prose praised your work and gave me your name as someone to read. Then, after seeing your profile picture, I remembered reading and enjoying a post or two in the last couple weeks. Thanks for sharing. I wish I had a six.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate your time. I'm not sure exactly who's recommending me, but please thank them for me. I hope you have a wonderful day.
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An excellent writer who I read regularly, Erika Seshadri, is a big fan of your writing. I normally don't share names for any reason, but I'm sure she won't care. Have a great week!
Comment from Regina Elliott
So very beauteous with such
artistic expression and
creativity. My very best
wishes for the contest and
any other publication you
may put it in. Many blessings
to you. ~
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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So very beauteous with such
artistic expression and
creativity. My very best
wishes for the contest and
any other publication you
may put it in. Many blessings
to you. ~
Comment Written 05-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much for all the good wishes, as well as your time and attention. I'm glad the poem came across as well as it did. I hope you have a wonderful day.
Comment from Susan Newell
This is a spectacular write about what can be done with a camera and how a photo can be more than a two-dimensional image, that can capture the photographed, the photographer and the viewer. This has the feel of a winner.
Sue
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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This is a spectacular write about what can be done with a camera and how a photo can be more than a two-dimensional image, that can capture the photographed, the photographer and the viewer. This has the feel of a winner.
Sue
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I'm glad the impression came through as clearly as I'd hoped. I appreciate your time and I hope you have a wonderful day.
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You are very welcome.
