Biblical
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Comment from GARY MACLEAN
"It takes so much time and effort for us to find out just a little nugget of info." Just read the first chapter of Genesis, there are all your "beginning" answers.
Para 1, 4th sentence: (Fanstory) should be (FanStory) Brand
Para 2, 1st sentence: (havent) should be (haven't) apostrophe
Para 2, 2nd sentence: (Fanstory) should be (FanStory) Brand
Para 2, 2nd sentence: Remove one space between (knows) and (?)
Para 2, 4th sentence: Remove one space before (in)
Para 3, 2nd sentence: Remove enough spaces to bring next sentence up to this paragraph.
Para 4, 1st sentence: Remove one space between (us) and (?)
Para 5, 1st sentence: (civilisation) should be (civilization)
Para 9, 1st sentence: Change (you, God) to (you God,)
Para 9, 2nd sentence: (maybe) should be (may be) it is two separate words in this instance.
Interesting concept but not really true according to the Bible. My four-star rating is nt based on your opinion, I do not rate on opinion, you have a much right to yours as I do to mine. There were enough errors to merit a four-star.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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"It takes so much time and effort for us to find out just a little nugget of info." Just read the first chapter of Genesis, there are all your "beginning" answers.
Para 1, 4th sentence: (Fanstory) should be (FanStory) Brand
Para 2, 1st sentence: (havent) should be (haven't) apostrophe
Para 2, 2nd sentence: (Fanstory) should be (FanStory) Brand
Para 2, 2nd sentence: Remove one space between (knows) and (?)
Para 2, 4th sentence: Remove one space before (in)
Para 3, 2nd sentence: Remove enough spaces to bring next sentence up to this paragraph.
Para 4, 1st sentence: Remove one space between (us) and (?)
Para 5, 1st sentence: (civilisation) should be (civilization)
Para 9, 1st sentence: Change (you, God) to (you God,)
Para 9, 2nd sentence: (maybe) should be (may be) it is two separate words in this instance.
Interesting concept but not really true according to the Bible. My four-star rating is nt based on your opinion, I do not rate on opinion, you have a much right to yours as I do to mine. There were enough errors to merit a four-star.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Thanks for reading and commentary. Zanya
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I see this as a prayer. The only word I felt out of place was bellicose. It's not incorrect but felt like those speed bumps placed in the road. It worked as for as that concerns, I nearly stopped reading.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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I see this as a prayer. The only word I felt out of place was bellicose. It's not incorrect but felt like those speed bumps placed in the road. It worked as for as that concerns, I nearly stopped reading.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Interesting comment- thanks for taking time to share. zanya
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This letter expresses a mixture of emotions. I like that you have made it so conversational almost as if it's a familiar friend. The cursive font selected adds to the feeling. A lot of the concerns you expressed are concerns most have about our planet or should have.
As you know there are some gaps in the top portion of your letter. If you could fix those the presentation would be better. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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This letter expresses a mixture of emotions. I like that you have made it so conversational almost as if it's a familiar friend. The cursive font selected adds to the feeling. A lot of the concerns you expressed are concerns most have about our planet or should have.
As you know there are some gaps in the top portion of your letter. If you could fix those the presentation would be better. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Thanks for reviewing and useful commentary. zanya
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You are welcome.
Comment from PENofFIRE
Perfect piece for winning the contest. I just felt it was a heartfelt, one-sided conversation. I love the fact that you hand-wrote the letter. It made it more believable. Great Job.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Perfect piece for winning the contest. I just felt it was a heartfelt, one-sided conversation. I love the fact that you hand-wrote the letter. It made it more believable. Great Job.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Great review zanya
