Voice Mail
A message is left for the wrong number.43 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Wow! What a wonderfully intriguing story. You left the reader hanging on until the end to see what you would do. This is a well-written story, and the large font made it easier to read. The ending was cold and fit the theme of the prompt. The visual is just okay because it's a pay phone booth. Would be better if it were a cell phone. You can type in your search engine "free cell phone photos" and download the image you select to your computer and upload it here. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2022
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Wow! What a wonderfully intriguing story. You left the reader hanging on until the end to see what you would do. This is a well-written story, and the large font made it easier to read. The ending was cold and fit the theme of the prompt. The visual is just okay because it's a pay phone booth. Would be better if it were a cell phone. You can type in your search engine "free cell phone photos" and download the image you select to your computer and upload it here. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2022
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Sandra, thank you for reading and tip on the picture, I think another pic would have been better.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Spitfire
Love that the narrator is in a retirement complex and reacts accordingly-- better than anything on tv. The cheating wife carries the story with her voice messages. You add in a good motive to explain the senior's decision on what to do. A fun read.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2022
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Love that the narrator is in a retirement complex and reacts accordingly-- better than anything on tv. The cheating wife carries the story with her voice messages. You add in a good motive to explain the senior's decision on what to do. A fun read.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much for the six stars and kind review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Friend,
Nice piece of General Fiction having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and exposing the wrong doer in a very interesting way.
The last line in the end is particularly noteworthy.
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2022
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Hello Friend,
Nice piece of General Fiction having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and exposing the wrong doer in a very interesting way.
The last line in the end is particularly noteworthy.
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the six stars, and your kind review.
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Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Mary Vigasin
This is brilliant! A wrong number dialed leads to storytelling of a unfaithful wife. Her life is falling apart as she continues to leave messages to the wrong number. A text from the wrong person ends her affair.
Good luck in the contest.
Mary
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2022
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This is brilliant! A wrong number dialed leads to storytelling of a unfaithful wife. Her life is falling apart as she continues to leave messages to the wrong number. A text from the wrong person ends her affair.
Good luck in the contest.
Mary
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2022
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Mary, thank you for the six stars! I appreciate your wonderful review.
Comment from Fleedleflump
This is an interesting slant on a story, casting us and the protagonist as almost voyeurs. Then he uses his unexpected power to exorcise sine personal demons. Which is, after all, the main motivation most of us have for everything. Nicely written.
Mike
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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This is an interesting slant on a story, casting us and the protagonist as almost voyeurs. Then he uses his unexpected power to exorcise sine personal demons. Which is, after all, the main motivation most of us have for everything. Nicely written.
Mike
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Mike, thank you, Sir.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
You had a soap opera going on, lol. It sounds like she lost her husband and boyfriend. It is sad her husband overheard this, but it was best. I am sure Dudley was stringing her alone. He probably married with children. And was just using her. She was the loser in the long run. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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You had a soap opera going on, lol. It sounds like she lost her husband and boyfriend. It is sad her husband overheard this, but it was best. I am sure Dudley was stringing her alone. He probably married with children. And was just using her. She was the loser in the long run. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Carolyn, I love your analysis of the story! Thank you for reading.
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You are welcome.
Comment from evilynne
Oh my goodness, that was a great read, very funny. The ending is great. The girl was asking for it. The whole think is a great piece of imaginative writing.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Oh my goodness, that was a great read, very funny. The ending is great. The girl was asking for it. The whole think is a great piece of imaginative writing.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Great entry for the contest. You have told a great story, as you let your imagination soar. I once got a call late at night from someone telling me they were running late but would be at my place within an hour. Always wondered what happened as a result of this message going to a wrong number.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Great entry for the contest. You have told a great story, as you let your imagination soar. I once got a call late at night from someone telling me they were running late but would be at my place within an hour. Always wondered what happened as a result of this message going to a wrong number.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Anne, LOL you have a good story, thank you for reading.
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You are welcome
Comment from John Ciarmello
Ha! I wish I had a six for this! Brilliant! The read was enjoyable, and I didn't see the ending coming at all. Super clever! I wish you the best in the contest. Best, JohnC.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Ha! I wish I had a six for this! Brilliant! The read was enjoyable, and I didn't see the ending coming at all. Super clever! I wish you the best in the contest. Best, JohnC.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from GWHARGIS
That was funny. I love an unexpected twist at the end of a story. I love how the protagonist got more involved while trying not to get involved. This was fun to read.
Gretchen
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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That was funny. I love an unexpected twist at the end of a story. I love how the protagonist got more involved while trying not to get involved. This was fun to read.
Gretchen
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Thank you for reading.
