Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another excellent chapter, Barbara. I'm happy the mothers convinced Cord to go to New York. It seems Alexandra's ex-fiancée just can't take a hint!
One little thing: Cordero slipped (arm) his around Alexandra's waist.
FYI I was having trouble with the advanced editor too. I don't know why the boxes are now unlabeled. But now I just copy my text into the regular box, save the document and then go back in, select advanced editor and I can change the font without a problem.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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This is another excellent chapter, Barbara. I'm happy the mothers convinced Cord to go to New York. It seems Alexandra's ex-fiancée just can't take a hint!
One little thing: Cordero slipped (arm) his around Alexandra's waist.
FYI I was having trouble with the advanced editor too. I don't know why the boxes are now unlabeled. But now I just copy my text into the regular box, save the document and then go back in, select advanced editor and I can change the font without a problem.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and I have made the correction. I've just given up on advanced editor.
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You are most welcome, Barbara. I can understand your frustrations with advance editor for sure. Hugs
Comment from lancellot
Don't worry about the Advanced Editor, I and many others are having the same issues with it, since FanStory updated it.
You story is progressing nicely and the scene in New York is in keeping with the tone and direction of the story.
Good work.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Don't worry about the Advanced Editor, I and many others are having the same issues with it, since FanStory updated it.
You story is progressing nicely and the scene in New York is in keeping with the tone and direction of the story.
Good work.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I struggle with computers, so I am happy to hear it's just not me.
Comment from Jay Squires
Another fine chapter, Barbara. I like the quiet strength Cordero has and how his and Ana's strengths blend together. Here are a few things, but I'm sure you've corrected them already:
"I'm not surprise me." [I'll include this, but I know someone's already mentioned it.]
Cordero slipped his around Alexandra's waist. [I think you need "arm" here.]
Great work, as usual!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Another fine chapter, Barbara. I like the quiet strength Cordero has and how his and Ana's strengths blend together. Here are a few things, but I'm sure you've corrected them already:
"I'm not surprise me." [I'll include this, but I know someone's already mentioned it.]
Cordero slipped his around Alexandra's waist. [I think you need "arm" here.]
Great work, as usual!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Don't worry, every time I read my writing, I'm not happy with it, and have to change what I've written. Poor Cord he seems to be confronted by stroppy males, all vying for Ali's attention, some men are so arrogant, they can't no for an answer. NY can be quite different from the west, so beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Don't worry, every time I read my writing, I'm not happy with it, and have to change what I've written. Poor Cord he seems to be confronted by stroppy males, all vying for Ali's attention, some men are so arrogant, they can't no for an answer. NY can be quite different from the west, so beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Well done
Comment from Sankey
This was a great chapter. I know we have all been waiting to see how things would go with Ali's ex and we were not disappointed. Well done and good seeing Ulla back on track, too. Just one tiny spag in the Author notes. I agree about evil eddy as well. I intentionally left of(f) the accents
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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This was a great chapter. I know we have all been waiting to see how things would go with Ali's ex and we were not disappointed. Well done and good seeing Ulla back on track, too. Just one tiny spag in the Author notes. I agree about evil eddy as well. I intentionally left of(f) the accents
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. We will see Alan again.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Another great chapter, and as usual I can't wait for the next one to see what happens. Is Alan going to cause problems before Ali can get out of New York. Great job, my friend, and have a great Sunday afternoon. Shirley
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Another great chapter, and as usual I can't wait for the next one to see what happens. Is Alan going to cause problems before Ali can get out of New York. Great job, my friend, and have a great Sunday afternoon. Shirley
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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I can promise we will see Alan again, if my memory serves me correctly at least four more times. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
I don't seen any errors in this story and I really enjoyed it. Allen is a terrible person. I'm glad Ali is really to be through with him. I know Cord hates the city and I'm wondering if he and Ali can work things out. I think she like the countryside, and she'll likely be the one to compromise.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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I don't seen any errors in this story and I really enjoyed it. Allen is a terrible person. I'm glad Ali is really to be through with him. I know Cord hates the city and I'm wondering if he and Ali can work things out. I think she like the countryside, and she'll likely be the one to compromise.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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We'll have to wait and see. We are not finished with Alan, yet. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely written. Good work.
New York's noted as "The City that Never Sleeps', and I believe it's true." - maybe a semicolon instead of a comma?
Ms. Black up. - Just prior she was Mrs. Black.
After a few dances, - a 'few' dances. I figured it would be just one.
I was anticipating a good fight scene. (smiley face here)
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Nicely written. Good work.
New York's noted as "The City that Never Sleeps', and I believe it's true." - maybe a semicolon instead of a comma?
Ms. Black up. - Just prior she was Mrs. Black.
After a few dances, - a 'few' dances. I figured it would be just one.
I was anticipating a good fight scene. (smiley face here)
Best wishes.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Nope, the first one was Mrs. Black, Ali's mom, and the second one is Ms. Black, Ali. I promise more interaction with Alan. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Well, it's great that Cordero went and he most certainly sorted out Alan. It was another great chapter. If I may suggest, I do miss a bit of description among all the dialogue. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Well, it's great that Cordero went and he most certainly sorted out Alan. It was another great chapter. If I may suggest, I do miss a bit of description among all the dialogue. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Okay, I'll look into it. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The ex-fieancee sounds like bad news. I hope he gets a true come-uppance at some point, but it sounds as though it could be difficult to make it sink in through his thick skin. Otherwise I'm pleased Ali so obviously wanted Cord there, but still a little disappointed not to have it cleared up why she didn't invite him in the first place. Well done otherwise. Kate xx
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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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The ex-fieancee sounds like bad news. I hope he gets a true come-uppance at some point, but it sounds as though it could be difficult to make it sink in through his thick skin. Otherwise I'm pleased Ali so obviously wanted Cord there, but still a little disappointed not to have it cleared up why she didn't invite him in the first place. Well done otherwise. Kate xx
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Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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She didn't invite him because he hates cities. It's that simple. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
