The Innocence of Love
Love is a miracle we are priviledge to share9 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I read this yesterday and asked who was it that wrote this mess? I was surprised when I saw it was my new Bermudian friends (I've been there, and have the scars to prove it as I spilled my motorbike on their coral roads) so I placed my pen aside pledging, "no comment." Then, this morning, I read it again, slowly. Line upon line, the pieced bloom as a morning glory to daylight. Splendidly.
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I read this yesterday and asked who was it that wrote this mess? I was surprised when I saw it was my new Bermudian friends (I've been there, and have the scars to prove it as I spilled my motorbike on their coral roads) so I placed my pen aside pledging, "no comment." Then, this morning, I read it again, slowly. Line upon line, the pieced bloom as a morning glory to daylight. Splendidly.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the "What is Love? writing prompt contest." It's about what love is. "All you need is love." - ...John Lennon and Paul McCartney.
Nice presentation. Your words flow well and are very descriptive for a clear understanding.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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Excellent entry for the "What is Love? writing prompt contest." It's about what love is. "All you need is love." - ...John Lennon and Paul McCartney.
Nice presentation. Your words flow well and are very descriptive for a clear understanding.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Love is all those things and knowing someone loves and cares for us is a warm and generous emotion, I wish you luck with the contest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Love is all those things and knowing someone loves and cares for us is a warm and generous emotion, I wish you luck with the contest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are lovely! As I read each stanza the author's words
are detailed, caring, loving and kind. I felt the author summarized this poem in the last stanza - stating all that love is! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect and compliments the theme and words of this poem.
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The author's words are lovely! As I read each stanza the author's words
are detailed, caring, loving and kind. I felt the author summarized this poem in the last stanza - stating all that love is! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect and compliments the theme and words of this poem.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
Comment from jp88
This is a really beautiful ode to love, and I agree with every single one of your observations. I love it when someone manages to capture the essence of emotion so well. What a pleasure to read.
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This is a really beautiful ode to love, and I agree with every single one of your observations. I love it when someone manages to capture the essence of emotion so well. What a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
A lovely free verse that takes us through the ages of love and what the emotion means to us as we mature.
There needs to be some editing if you plan to submit this for contest.
'Tween instead of Tween
the longing when we're apart instead of were
extinguished in place of extinguish
Those were the ones that popped out for me.
Good luck in the contest:-)
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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A lovely free verse that takes us through the ages of love and what the emotion means to us as we mature.
There needs to be some editing if you plan to submit this for contest.
'Tween instead of Tween
the longing when we're apart instead of were
extinguished in place of extinguish
Those were the ones that popped out for me.
Good luck in the contest:-)
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Pam,
Thank you for your helpful review. I appreciate and value your comments and suggestions. I noted the needed changes and revised accordingly.
Eugene
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is a wonderfully crafted poem. The repetition works so well here in sharing what love is. And I love the positivity that comes from your poem. Excellent presentation with a beautiful cursive and great use of colors.
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This is a wonderfully crafted poem. The repetition works so well here in sharing what love is. And I love the positivity that comes from your poem. Excellent presentation with a beautiful cursive and great use of colors.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
Comment from Megan Sue Bates
Beautiful expression of love evolving over time. I love all of the strong verbs, descriptions, and imagery. One thing I would change in the 3rd stanza is we're or we are instead of were. I really like how you structured the beginning of each stanza with red and used cursive writing. Both complement your style gorgeously.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Beautiful expression of love evolving over time. I love all of the strong verbs, descriptions, and imagery. One thing I would change in the 3rd stanza is we're or we are instead of were. I really like how you structured the beginning of each stanza with red and used cursive writing. Both complement your style gorgeously.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Megan,
Thank you for your helpful review. I appreciate and value your comments and noted the error you pointed out and have changed were to we're.
Eugene
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Nice response to the prompt. I like the way you follow the nature of love through the cycles of life. The description of teenage love really popped out at me. well done.
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Nice response to the prompt. I like the way you follow the nature of love through the cycles of life. The description of teenage love really popped out at me. well done.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
