The Park Bench
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Comment from GWHARGIS
Loved the verse where hobbies and pets become background. It made me think about how life with a couple of individuals can become more solid as they share. Share their feelings, their responsibilities, their disappointments and accomplishments. The background becomes the solid foundation for them. This was beautifully written.
Gretchen
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Loved the verse where hobbies and pets become background. It made me think about how life with a couple of individuals can become more solid as they share. Share their feelings, their responsibilities, their disappointments and accomplishments. The background becomes the solid foundation for them. This was beautifully written.
Gretchen
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thanks, Gretchen, for the nice comments and all the stars.
Joan
Comment from Jennifer Keeley
Simple turned into meaningful. At first glance the reader sees the cute picture but the words of the poem, especially your last stanza, gives the reader a sense of how love develops. I enjoyed this!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Simple turned into meaningful. At first glance the reader sees the cute picture but the words of the poem, especially your last stanza, gives the reader a sense of how love develops. I enjoyed this!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you
liked it.
Joan
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your club poem, DP. I enjoyed reading
it. Your words fit the picture nicely. I liked the progression of
time from the start of a relationship throughout as loves grows.
Yes, other 'things' take a back burner like pets and hobbies. In
real life, ups and downs occur with true love, but real love can
solve those.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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You did a great job with your club poem, DP. I enjoyed reading
it. Your words fit the picture nicely. I liked the progression of
time from the start of a relationship throughout as loves grows.
Yes, other 'things' take a back burner like pets and hobbies. In
real life, ups and downs occur with true love, but real love can
solve those.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thanks, Jan. You're nice comments mean a lot to me.
Joan
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😊🐈⬛
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and good presentation, Joan.
-You do a good job with the poem and elements of love and a relationship.
-A good progression from young love to building the relationship,
and how two worlds merge into one.
-I like the inclusion of hobbies and pets, and the sharing that takes place in a relationship.
-Good concluding lines, too.
-One small thing: Hers becomes his
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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-Nice artwork and good presentation, Joan.
-You do a good job with the poem and elements of love and a relationship.
-A good progression from young love to building the relationship,
and how two worlds merge into one.
-I like the inclusion of hobbies and pets, and the sharing that takes place in a relationship.
-Good concluding lines, too.
-One small thing: Hers becomes his
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the positive review and editing help. I will make they
change
Joan
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You are very welcome, Joan.
Comment from Dawn Munro
I wish I had a way to upload a video sent to me by a friend -- it's perfect for your poem -- it is an undoctored one showing an infant -- an INFANT cuddled on his daddy's chest. Dad is stroking the baby's back and says, "I love you," and kisses the babe on the top of its head. Barely able to raise its head, the child DOES, and kisses daddy on his cheek!!!!!!!!!
That's what I think of your lovely poem.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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I wish I had a way to upload a video sent to me by a friend -- it's perfect for your poem -- it is an undoctored one showing an infant -- an INFANT cuddled on his daddy's chest. Dad is stroking the baby's back and says, "I love you," and kisses the babe on the top of its head. Barely able to raise its head, the child DOES, and kisses daddy on his cheek!!!!!!!!!
That's what I think of your lovely poem.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Dawn. Sounds like a cute video.
Joan
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You're very welcome. :)
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I do like your interpretation of this artwork Joan, as you talk of young love where two worlds become one. You're right, love can not only cure life's ups and downs but it is also our stability. Nice one,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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I do like your interpretation of this artwork Joan, as you talk of young love where two worlds become one. You're right, love can not only cure life's ups and downs but it is also our stability. Nice one,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Valda, for taking the time to read, review and rate my poem. All are greatly appreciated.
Joan
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Good use of metaphors. I like your word play. As long as each knows where the other leaves off & they begin. Some very symbolic wedding ceremonies has one candle lighting one candle, in some one candle lights two candles. It shows how the individuality will or will not be honored. A good topic.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Good use of metaphors. I like your word play. As long as each knows where the other leaves off & they begin. Some very symbolic wedding ceremonies has one candle lighting one candle, in some one candle lights two candles. It shows how the individuality will or will not be honored. A good topic.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Liz,
Thanks for your review and comments. I appreciate your gift of stars.
Joan
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***Smile***
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
This is a very cute poem and I love the Norman Rockwell illustration. I especially like the last stanza. Note that in the first lines, the singular verb doesn't match the subject which is Lights (plural), not Love which is the object of the preposition. Otherwise, a very nice poem.
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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This is a very cute poem and I love the Norman Rockwell illustration. I especially like the last stanza. Note that in the first lines, the singular verb doesn't match the subject which is Lights (plural), not Love which is the object of the preposition. Otherwise, a very nice poem.
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Thanks for the review and grammatical help. I mad the change.
Joan
Comment from Irish Rain
Aw, so sweet!
I've always loved this painting
by Norman Rockwell.
You describe well, the ways
of young love.
A joy to read!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Aw, so sweet!
I've always loved this painting
by Norman Rockwell.
You describe well, the ways
of young love.
A joy to read!
Blessings...
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem. Glad you liked it.
Joan
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Happy Weekend!!!
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Same to you.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a cute picture, and you have done a fine job of showing how young love puts everything else in the background ... at least for a while.
Excellent contribution to the Picture This Club. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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This is a cute picture, and you have done a fine job of showing how young love puts everything else in the background ... at least for a while.
Excellent contribution to the Picture This Club. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Gloria,
Thanks for your continuing support. It is much appreciated
Joan
