The Boatman
How far can one get with cheek?35 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Oh, Mike, I truly hope you do well in the contest. This was creative and so descriptive and I love the dark humor. You keep your reader so engaged from beginning to end.
Thank you for the read.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Oh, Mike, I truly hope you do well in the contest. This was creative and so descriptive and I love the dark humor. You keep your reader so engaged from beginning to end.
Thank you for the read.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Mary :-). I had a lot of fun writing this so I'm glad that came across!
Mike
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is fantastically imaginative, with wildly descriptive characters, even though no names were given. The dead man, a writer, tells stories and offers to write poetry, even after death. It seems that writing no longer has the same value after death. Great story.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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This is fantastically imaginative, with wildly descriptive characters, even though no names were given. The dead man, a writer, tells stories and offers to write poetry, even after death. It seems that writing no longer has the same value after death. Great story.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thank you :-). I had great fun writing this one.
Mike
Comment from karenina
It's cheeky indeed! I have just the sort of warped style of humor that gravitates towards the comical and irreverent when it comes to death and the "reaper" and such.
And the moral of the story?
"Turns out, writer's block isn't a good enough excuse to have a mistress."
I just about spit out my sweet tea!
Yup.
I checked my spousal list of approved excuses to cheat ~~ imagine! It was BLANK!
(Another whole kind of writer's block I think...)
You're too funny!
Karenina
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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It's cheeky indeed! I have just the sort of warped style of humor that gravitates towards the comical and irreverent when it comes to death and the "reaper" and such.
And the moral of the story?
"Turns out, writer's block isn't a good enough excuse to have a mistress."
I just about spit out my sweet tea!
Yup.
I checked my spousal list of approved excuses to cheat ~~ imagine! It was BLANK!
(Another whole kind of writer's block I think...)
You're too funny!
Karenina
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Lol, thank you. Indeed, in real life the knife would be headed somewhere more painful, and I would deserve it :-)
Mike
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Does the name Lorena Bobbit ring a bell?? (Ouch!)
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a funny scenario for when you have to go to hell, but there may still be an out if the Boatman digs your bit. Of course, this offering denotes failure. Wife with a knife takes your life. Tale as old as time.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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This is a funny scenario for when you have to go to hell, but there may still be an out if the Boatman digs your bit. Of course, this offering denotes failure. Wife with a knife takes your life. Tale as old as time.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thanks Bill :-). I think 'Wife with a knife takes your life' could be an entry for one of those story in 8 words prompts! Glad you enjoyed.
Mike
Comment from Tom Horonzy
"I was just glad he wore trousers." Funny line, and I would have been glad too. As was "So, "what got you - depression, Covid, a broken heart?" as well as "tutted" You can be a funny man. You are, correct?
And now, as for your entry, how am I to vote for myself? This is indeed very good.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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"I was just glad he wore trousers." Funny line, and I would have been glad too. As was "So, "what got you - depression, Covid, a broken heart?" as well as "tutted" You can be a funny man. You are, correct?
And now, as for your entry, how am I to vote for myself? This is indeed very good.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much, Tom - I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I don't understand voting sometimes - I thought yours and mine were the best two here, closely followed by HarryT's and yet mine is the only vote for yours - it's just weird.
Mike
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IDK. I feel many ancients who have been writing of FS have a following base that grants an advantage but you are a favorite and I can understand your frustration. I feel that way but reflect that it is I who I write for and a few friends. The naysayers be danged.
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That's definitely the best approach to take.
Mike
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hahaha... I love the dark humor. Having a conversation with the grim reaper sounds like fun and terrifying at the same time.. you got my vote.
Great story entry for the What Would You Say If Dead writing prompt contest. It moved along nicely and the plot was easy to understand and follow. Good character development.
Well done, my friend.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Hahaha... I love the dark humor. Having a conversation with the grim reaper sounds like fun and terrifying at the same time.. you got my vote.
Great story entry for the What Would You Say If Dead writing prompt contest. It moved along nicely and the plot was easy to understand and follow. Good character development.
Well done, my friend.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Gypsy - so glad you enjoyed this. I had lots of fun writing it :-)
Mike
Comment from Terry Broxson
A very creative story written for this contest, good luck. I did like the way you led us up to find out he was married. He has done her wrong. So, she did him in. And then tries not to pay the boatman. Good work. Terryl.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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A very creative story written for this contest, good luck. I did like the way you led us up to find out he was married. He has done her wrong. So, she did him in. And then tries not to pay the boatman. Good work. Terryl.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thanks Terry :-). This was great fun to write!
Mike
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Ouch! So, we can die again after we've died?! That doesn't seem right.
I'm expecting lots of reflective and spiritual pieces in answer to this prompt - yours was unexpected and fun. Best thing I've read today:-)
Good luck with this contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Ouch! So, we can die again after we've died?! That doesn't seem right.
I'm expecting lots of reflective and spiritual pieces in answer to this prompt - yours was unexpected and fun. Best thing I've read today:-)
Good luck with this contest.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thanks Pam :-). Prompts like this are like a red flag for me - I can't resist doing something irreverent!
Mike
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You can get a long way with cheek, especially if you have your tongue-in-it. Speaking of tongues, I particularly liked the description of the boatman's tongue. It made me think of home. I was brought up in Yorkshire, where we used to lick 't road fur breakfast. Good luck in't contest. Kate xx
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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You can get a long way with cheek, especially if you have your tongue-in-it. Speaking of tongues, I particularly liked the description of the boatman's tongue. It made me think of home. I was brought up in Yorkshire, where we used to lick 't road fur breakfast. Good luck in't contest. Kate xx
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Ah, I love a Yorkshire accent! My Mum returned to her native Derbyshire a few years ago and she's already started to re-acquire the accent :-). I'm glad you enjoyed this. It was lots of fun to write.
Mike
Comment from Thomas Blanks
"Did the boom club woman leave you?" ...typo that spellcheck can't see "boom" instead of "book." I hate those! I take the reference to the wife who stabbed him in the eye to be a person other than the book club woman. So, in a manner of speaking, he left her by dying, which is why he is heartbroken. I also hate it when my wife finds out about my girlfriend! I liked the part about being in the wrong line... classic. Can't get away from red tape even after you're dead!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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"Did the boom club woman leave you?" ...typo that spellcheck can't see "boom" instead of "book." I hate those! I take the reference to the wife who stabbed him in the eye to be a person other than the book club woman. So, in a manner of speaking, he left her by dying, which is why he is heartbroken. I also hate it when my wife finds out about my girlfriend! I liked the part about being in the wrong line... classic. Can't get away from red tape even after you're dead!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Thomas - appreciate the catch and I'm really glad you enjoyed it :-).
Mike
