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The Boatman

How far can one get with cheek?

35 total reviews 
Comment from sunnilicious
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Congratulations on winning the contest. Nice blue ribbon you have... The script was well thought out. Clearly written. Good mix of narration with dialogues. Excellent work. Nice :)

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
    Thanks so much - I'm really glad you liked it :-)

    Mike
Comment from jessizero
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Writers, huh? I enjoyed your story. You surprised me with the end. I am glad you won; you definitely earned it. Thanks for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
    Thanks so much :-). I had a lot of fun with this one.

    Mike
Comment from damommy
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When the Boatman comes for me, I will definitely not mention that I've tried my hand at writing. He would axe me at first sight. This cheeky man did nothing to help himself with his banter. Good story.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
    Thank you :-). This was a lot of fun to write!

    Mike
Comment from DragonSkulls
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Hahaha. This is an awesome entry, Mike. I'm glad to see how much thought was put into it...unlike my own. Lol Great creative writing and accompanying pic. I'm reviewing for the originality, description and humor, not the cash. Just wanted to be sure you knew that. I'd say best of luck but clearly it's not needed. Haha. Great piece, M.

Ron

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
    Thanks so much :-). As soon as I read Tom's fun piece and saw he'd made a contest, I knew I had to enter. I wasn't planning on promoting it so high, but it's been a while since I last posted anything, so I had a stack of pumps built up, burning a hole in my Fanstory pocket!

    Mike
Comment from lyenochka
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Well, that was an unexpected ending. What does that axe-throwing do to a person who is already dead? I did like the allusion to Charon and the crossing of the River Styx. The lack of payment would mean that he would just wander? Enjoyed the read and hope this does well in the contest!

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
    Thank you :-). Admittedly, I've taken some liberties and put my own spin on the idea, but this was more about fun than anything else/ I'm glad you liked it.

    Mike
Comment from Wendy G
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Dark humour and wit presented here - and your story is very imaginative. No, it doesn't pay to be a writer, does it? Well told, a good response to a fun prompt. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
    Thank you, Wendy. I had lots of fun with this :-)

    Mike
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Haha, so the writer met his match. I enjoyed your fun
contest entry, Mike. You did a great job with the characters
and the dialogue. Your words were descriptive--I could
see this as I read. The picture was a great choice.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes, Jan

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
    Thank you, Jan :-). I had a lot of fun writing this!

    Mike
Comment from Regina Elliott
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This write deserves 6 stars,
but ran out of them. Drats!
I love this afterlife humor,
very creatively weaved. I hope
you have success in the
contest. All the best. ~

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
    Thank you, Regina :-). This was fun to write, and lifted me from a bit of a dry spell.

    Mike
Comment from royowen
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I've just staggered from a story similar to a tale of the good Samaritan, only through the eyes of the victim, and came to this, two unfortunate protagonists. Both were great stories, and both very unfortunate heroes, great job good luck, Mike, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
    Thank you, Roy. I'm really glad you enjoyed it :-)

    Mike
reply by royowen on 17-Aug-2022
    Bless you
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
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I like "offering you a happy ending" Must be pretty tight in there.

Para 6, 1st sentence: SHOULD (span) be (spanned)?
Para 15, 1st sentence: (disembowelled) should be (disemboweled) one (l)
Para 16, 1st sentence: Add comma after (So) introductory word - comma
Para 23, 1st sentence: Add comma after (slumped) a comma between two clauses is best.

Well, this guy couldn't win. Already dead now an axe blade in his head? Oh well, so goes the life of a writer.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
    Thanks Gary - so glad you enjoyed this one :-). Appreciate the spag notes - I'll do a run through.

    Mike