Cinderella, I Never Knew You
Moral of the story is don't say no to a prince.4 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Harry, you did really well, and made it difficult where to place my vote. This was cute. Feedlefump's (sic) fantastic. And then there is mine, which until yesterday had only one other to consider. Now I have three. Guess we'll have to wait and see. Thanks for entering.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Harry, you did really well, and made it difficult where to place my vote. This was cute. Feedlefump's (sic) fantastic. And then there is mine, which until yesterday had only one other to consider. Now I have three. Guess we'll have to wait and see. Thanks for entering.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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My pleasure, Tom. An interesting challenge. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good story you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest! Teri
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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This is a very good story you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest! Teri
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. Appreciated.
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you are so welcome!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This had some excellent parallels to current social commentary, notably that our rulers are exempt from the rules they themselves make. But happily, in some countries we then silence the ruler rather than the normal man. Much enjoyed. Kate xx
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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This had some excellent parallels to current social commentary, notably that our rulers are exempt from the rules they themselves make. But happily, in some countries we then silence the ruler rather than the normal man. Much enjoyed. Kate xx
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your read and thoughtful review. Appreciated.
Comment from Fleedleflump
This was a good bit of fun - perhaps a misadventure, or a story about how one's desires can lead to foolish behaviour. This reminded me a little of a Terry Pratchett anecdote about adventurers committing 'suicide' by bursting into a rough tavern and declaring themselves the strongest fighter in the world.
I also enjoyed the alternative perspective on a well known scene, and what could have happened without us ever knowing.
Spag notes:
'decked out in a lovely blue gown, a nice low neckline' - should be 'with' instead of the comma.
'I wanted to dance with this lovely girl in the worse way' - I think this should be 'worst way'
'The prince's face flush red and his nostrils flare.' - as we're in past tense, this should be 'flushed' and 'flared'
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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This was a good bit of fun - perhaps a misadventure, or a story about how one's desires can lead to foolish behaviour. This reminded me a little of a Terry Pratchett anecdote about adventurers committing 'suicide' by bursting into a rough tavern and declaring themselves the strongest fighter in the world.
I also enjoyed the alternative perspective on a well known scene, and what could have happened without us ever knowing.
Spag notes:
'decked out in a lovely blue gown, a nice low neckline' - should be 'with' instead of the comma.
'I wanted to dance with this lovely girl in the worse way' - I think this should be 'worst way'
'The prince's face flush red and his nostrils flare.' - as we're in past tense, this should be 'flushed' and 'flared'
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thanks for the careful read and the spag suggestions. I will edit. Don't know Terry Pratchett will have to look him up.
