Glass of Milk
Serving a father milk9 total reviews
Comment from Michaela Moore
What a ride this poem was to read! Sandra, you peeled this onion perfectly one precious layer at a time. Peeling and peeling toward a rotting core. So simple, but yet, so ingenious. And the imagery and range of emotions...I felt I was this girl. This (and this was such a surprise as well) 10 year old girl. Brilliant! Bravo! Magnificant!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2022
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What a ride this poem was to read! Sandra, you peeled this onion perfectly one precious layer at a time. Peeling and peeling toward a rotting core. So simple, but yet, so ingenious. And the imagery and range of emotions...I felt I was this girl. This (and this was such a surprise as well) 10 year old girl. Brilliant! Bravo! Magnificant!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2022
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Thank you for always expressing such wonderful support and for rating me so well.
Comment from Annmuma
As always, your poem, your subject and the ultimate ending is thought-provoking and lingers long after I've read the words. Indeed, I can see and feel the despair, the helplessness and the fear of a ten year old with no way out. Great job. ann
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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As always, your poem, your subject and the ultimate ending is thought-provoking and lingers long after I've read the words. Indeed, I can see and feel the despair, the helplessness and the fear of a ten year old with no way out. Great job. ann
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Ann, for your comments and support.
Comment from judiverse
What's with this drinking milk at bedtime, anyway? Anyone who's read Agatha Christie novels knows they're just begging to be poisoned. The father was so terrible to the girl in your poem, I almost wished her scheme had succeeded. Her father is a tyrant. Excellent job of telling your story in this free verse. The events are well described, and it flows smoothly. judi
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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What's with this drinking milk at bedtime, anyway? Anyone who's read Agatha Christie novels knows they're just begging to be poisoned. The father was so terrible to the girl in your poem, I almost wished her scheme had succeeded. Her father is a tyrant. Excellent job of telling your story in this free verse. The events are well described, and it flows smoothly. judi
Comment Written 12-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your comments and rating .
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You're very welcome. I advise all elderly people to forgo that evening drink of milk, unless they live alone. judi
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
"whupped," now there's a word you don't see much. But those of us who recognize it know all too well what it means.
Para 3, 7th sentence: PERHAPS add (would) between (Mama) and (be)
This started out as a sweet caregiving story and ended up in what it really is. She needs to mix another glass of milk for Mr. "Whup" ass.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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"whupped," now there's a word you don't see much. But those of us who recognize it know all too well what it means.
Para 3, 7th sentence: PERHAPS add (would) between (Mama) and (be)
This started out as a sweet caregiving story and ended up in what it really is. She needs to mix another glass of milk for Mr. "Whup" ass.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thank you for reading and rating my poem. Thanks for the suggestion.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You have managed to write a fear-filled horrific poem here. It is powerful, and paints a very clear picture. No six stars left here on a Friday, unfortunately, but I enjoyed this very much. Kate xx
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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You have managed to write a fear-filled horrific poem here. It is powerful, and paints a very clear picture. No six stars left here on a Friday, unfortunately, but I enjoyed this very much. Kate xx
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Fear-filled horrific poems are what I do best. Thanks for reading and rating my poem.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I was so hoping she wouldn't spill one went teeny drop. Instead, I'm hoping she got another opportunity to do the job properly. People who hurt children deserve no mercy. Xo
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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I was so hoping she wouldn't spill one went teeny drop. Instead, I'm hoping she got another opportunity to do the job properly. People who hurt children deserve no mercy. Xo
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your exceptional rating. It's based on a true incident.
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Xo
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I match your XO
Comment from dellsworthpoet
Sad commentary on how life sometimes is.
The poem flows well. The words are brash and hard to fit the situation. The image fits the story and the presentation is appropriately somber.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Sad commentary on how life sometimes is.
The poem flows well. The words are brash and hard to fit the situation. The image fits the story and the presentation is appropriately somber.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thank you for reading and rating my poem. Indeed, it is sad.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
A poem about a young girl's desperation and desire to kill her abusive father. In the end, her fear gets the better of her, she spills the milk, and is beaten. A sad and poignant piece that reveals the core of abusive--fear, hatred, desire to escape at any cost, and feeling trapped.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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A poem about a young girl's desperation and desire to kill her abusive father. In the end, her fear gets the better of her, she spills the milk, and is beaten. A sad and poignant piece that reveals the core of abusive--fear, hatred, desire to escape at any cost, and feeling trapped.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your review. It's based on a true incident. I trust you got my message. Your books are mindboggling good! Read "Wishful Thinking" in my portfolio.
Comment from LovnPeace
God Bless her heart, He saved her. I don't fault her desire. Love the pictyre. Makes me want a glass. I didn't miss your use of capitals to make emphasis. Well done. Blessings. xo. B
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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God Bless her heart, He saved her. I don't fault her desire. Love the pictyre. Makes me want a glass. I didn't miss your use of capitals to make emphasis. Well done. Blessings. xo. B
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Thanks for reading and rating my poem.
