Assassin Who Would Not Listen
Did she take too many chances?12 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my! I had no idea you wrote stuff like this, my sonnet-writing friend! Actually, come to think of it, I do recall that you had this lady assassin in another flash fiction. Scary, violent, but very well written. Congratulations on the win!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Oh my! I had no idea you wrote stuff like this, my sonnet-writing friend! Actually, come to think of it, I do recall that you had this lady assassin in another flash fiction. Scary, violent, but very well written. Congratulations on the win!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for the kudos and congrats, lyenochka. I am honored you recall another La Tigre story. Actually, there have been several. Rod
Comment from bob cullen
A really great write. You built you tension well. Your characters excelled and the action was believable, and action packed. Two assassins, two murders they went out for dinner. Now, that's a good nights work.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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A really great write. You built you tension well. Your characters excelled and the action was believable, and action packed. Two assassins, two murders they went out for dinner. Now, that's a good nights work.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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I am so pleased you enjoyed my assassin story, Bob. Many thanks for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from WalkerMan
Congratulations for winning the contest, which this post certainly earned.
La Tigre is an interesting character apparently still learning her craft, with her brother (Aldo) as her handler. Adding the character L'ombra as secret backup for her was wise of Aldo, as events proved. That they have unexpectedly begun a romance certainly will be appreciated as enhancement to the series. You accomplished a lot within 500 words, without making the story seem rushed. I enjoyed reading it.
Superb, and aptly illustrated. -- Mike
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Congratulations for winning the contest, which this post certainly earned.
La Tigre is an interesting character apparently still learning her craft, with her brother (Aldo) as her handler. Adding the character L'ombra as secret backup for her was wise of Aldo, as events proved. That they have unexpectedly begun a romance certainly will be appreciated as enhancement to the series. You accomplished a lot within 500 words, without making the story seem rushed. I enjoyed reading it.
Superb, and aptly illustrated. -- Mike
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Thank you very much, Mike, for all the congrats and all the kudos. I also truly appreciate the six-star bonus. Rod
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You are most welcome, Rod. Current demands on my time keep my reviewing down to just a few per week now, though I do read many more posts. All my reviews are thorough, not short just to get the payout; so I review only the few that I like best, which included yours this time. -- Mike
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Assassin Who Would Not Listen, has a light-hearted feel that finds the soul in the assassin and makes us root for the antihero. Neat tale.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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This story, Assassin Who Would Not Listen, has a light-hearted feel that finds the soul in the assassin and makes us root for the antihero. Neat tale.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Bill. I am delighted you enjoyed my tale. Rod
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Neat story. The stranger just "happened" by, or I think he was keeping an eye on the lady. Especially since, I think I gathered, the woman is the sister of the boss, (Aldo)
Great characters, good plot delivered concisely and wrapped up neatly. It was a fun, quick read.
Good job
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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Neat story. The stranger just "happened" by, or I think he was keeping an eye on the lady. Especially since, I think I gathered, the woman is the sister of the boss, (Aldo)
Great characters, good plot delivered concisely and wrapped up neatly. It was a fun, quick read.
Good job
Comment Written 10-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Gary. I am delighted you enjoyed all the elements of my story. La Tigre is a series character of several stories I have posted. The Shadow is new.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I am having a hard time wrapping concrete thoughts around an assassination plot in less than 500 words; however that said this one is better than most.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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I am having a hard time wrapping concrete thoughts around an assassination plot in less than 500 words; however that said this one is better than most.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Tom.
Comment from Wendy G
A very clever thriller story, with a great twist at the end. There was both suspense and action a-plenty and your open ending - because we do and must wonder how this will develop - was perfect. Well done. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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A very clever thriller story, with a great twist at the end. There was both suspense and action a-plenty and your open ending - because we do and must wonder how this will develop - was perfect. Well done. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Wendy, for the great review of my story. I am especially pleased you like the ending.
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You had my vote! Excellent writing. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nicely written. Good work.
Very intriguing story. Nice twist.
She has a few things to learn about her trade-craft, though - the second man, and L'ombra sneaking up behind her.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Very nicely written. Good work.
Very intriguing story. Nice twist.
She has a few things to learn about her trade-craft, though - the second man, and L'ombra sneaking up behind her.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Wayne, for your marvelous praise of my story and those six bright stars.
Comment from kahpot
"Leave no witnesses!" (were Aldo's last words of instruction." ) after reading this opening I was a bit apprehensive, (were Aldo's last instructions) though as the story continued I was intrigued and then engrossed, the storyline is excellent and the intrigue wonderful, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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"Leave no witnesses!" (were Aldo's last words of instruction." ) after reading this opening I was a bit apprehensive, (were Aldo's last instructions) though as the story continued I was intrigued and then engrossed, the storyline is excellent and the intrigue wonderful, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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It excites me to know my story intrigued and then engrossed you, kahpot. Many thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Bridge
A very interesting story. I was with you from start to finish. It completely drew me in. Very well done and in so few words. All the best to you in the contest
With regards
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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A very interesting story. I was with you from start to finish. It completely drew me in. Very well done and in so few words. All the best to you in the contest
With regards
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I am so pleased to know you were with me from start to finish, Bridge. Many thanks for reviewing.