Nine Years Old And Counting
Me, Myself, and I...15 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
I like this one. The chosen form is written perfectly, the pacing is easy to follow. And, it is upbeat, light, and goes through the joys of childhood. It feels like you are speaking to your younger self, and a trip down memory lane. No trauma, thankfully. You get my vote
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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I like this one. The chosen form is written perfectly, the pacing is easy to follow. And, it is upbeat, light, and goes through the joys of childhood. It feels like you are speaking to your younger self, and a trip down memory lane. No trauma, thankfully. You get my vote
Comment Written 13-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Thank you, I appreciate both this nice review and your vote. :)
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces the importance of being earnest in spite of the oddities that daily confront us.
The work highlights an extraordinarily boisterous nine year old girl encouraging her peers to remain undaunted in the face of towering oddities.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of rhymes, alliterations and imagery.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces the importance of being earnest in spite of the oddities that daily confront us.
The work highlights an extraordinarily boisterous nine year old girl encouraging her peers to remain undaunted in the face of towering oddities.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of rhymes, alliterations and imagery.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thank you, this is a very nice review. I appreciate it. :)
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Author?
Yeah, I grew up watching the Monkees on TV of an afternoon after school,. Guess we are around the same age?
I'm glad your mum made you special treats for your birthday even though she had commitments. Angel food cake sounds good.
It's great you can now talk to your young impressionable self and reassure her... things will be better.
I'm wondering do you still have a Monkees tee-shirt and do you still wear it?
Be proud of where you came from, it shaped you into the poet you are now.
All the best in this contest.
With our thoughts we create...
our identity.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Hi Author?
Yeah, I grew up watching the Monkees on TV of an afternoon after school,. Guess we are around the same age?
I'm glad your mum made you special treats for your birthday even though she had commitments. Angel food cake sounds good.
It's great you can now talk to your young impressionable self and reassure her... things will be better.
I'm wondering do you still have a Monkees tee-shirt and do you still wear it?
Be proud of where you came from, it shaped you into the poet you are now.
All the best in this contest.
With our thoughts we create...
our identity.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Hahaha....I wore out that a long time ago! Yes we're probably around the same age, from a time that wasn't without conflict, and yet seemed like a simpler, happier time nonetheless. Thanks for reading my poem and for this nice review. :)
Comment from Sally Law
I see you are from the same time as I am. A golden time if ever there was. Loved The Monkees and getting new shoes. Just the best time to grow up!
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I see you are from the same time as I am. A golden time if ever there was. Loved The Monkees and getting new shoes. Just the best time to grow up!
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you for this great review. Always nice to hear from a fellow Monkees fan. :)
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Big time!
Comment from TDLRasmar
I thought that was a nice contest entry. I know I had a nice walk down memory lane. My gosh, the Monkies? I seems like very nice memories and you painted them well. Good luck on your entry.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I thought that was a nice contest entry. I know I had a nice walk down memory lane. My gosh, the Monkies? I seems like very nice memories and you painted them well. Good luck on your entry.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much, I appreciate this nice review. :)
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
I lived on the South West side 26th and Spaulding in 1959. I went to the first grade at Corkery on Kildaire. I enjoyed reading your story. It felt like my own. We did not have much money. But my family was dysfunctional. Alcohol fueled fights. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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I lived on the South West side 26th and Spaulding in 1959. I went to the first grade at Corkery on Kildaire. I enjoyed reading your story. It felt like my own. We did not have much money. But my family was dysfunctional. Alcohol fueled fights. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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We lived many places, but the last one was on Archer Ave. I'm sorry about what happened in your family. My mom became an alcoholic later on in life...so I understand. Thanks for reading my poem and for this thoughtful review.
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Thank you for sharing.
Comment from WriterHeather
This is a really lovely note to your nine year old self. It sounds like you had a wonderful and loving childhood despite worries about money. I think this will do well in the Contest!
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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This is a really lovely note to your nine year old self. It sounds like you had a wonderful and loving childhood despite worries about money. I think this will do well in the Contest!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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Thank you, I'm so glad you liked my poem and I appreciate this fantastic review. :)
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, I don't know if this is a photo of you, but it looks like one of those photo-booth pictures that you took by putting a quarter into the money slot. Your poem reads and flows well, and coming from NYC's Hell's Kitchen, I can relate to everything that you wrote. To this day, living in an apartment building has many fond memories. Most of your neighbors were an extension of your family, but that was a time when neighbor cared about neighbor.
Your poem reads and flows well and I can feel the happiness of a child on their birthday. Of special note:
The neighbors who live in our building,
have an old bike they fixed up for us.
We share it with our brother Robbie,
We ride on handlebars, with no fuss.
(Good descriptive writing. Learning (and wanting) to share is probably one of life's best lessons.)
Poet, living on the southside of Chicago taught you many things. There are things that you knew by 10 years old that some adults will never know or understand. Heartfelt memories from a time when less was more. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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Hello author, I don't know if this is a photo of you, but it looks like one of those photo-booth pictures that you took by putting a quarter into the money slot. Your poem reads and flows well, and coming from NYC's Hell's Kitchen, I can relate to everything that you wrote. To this day, living in an apartment building has many fond memories. Most of your neighbors were an extension of your family, but that was a time when neighbor cared about neighbor.
Your poem reads and flows well and I can feel the happiness of a child on their birthday. Of special note:
The neighbors who live in our building,
have an old bike they fixed up for us.
We share it with our brother Robbie,
We ride on handlebars, with no fuss.
(Good descriptive writing. Learning (and wanting) to share is probably one of life's best lessons.)
Poet, living on the southside of Chicago taught you many things. There are things that you knew by 10 years old that some adults will never know or understand. Heartfelt memories from a time when less was more. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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Thank you for this thoughtful and insightful review. It means a lot to me. :)
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This is a positive and wonderfully affirmative letter to yourself. If only we really could speak to those poor, unsure, misguided, lonely kids we were! ha!
A couple of notes, if I may:
1.) now mom will make ang(el) food cake.
2.) though (there)'ll be some hard times to get through.
Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This is a positive and wonderfully affirmative letter to yourself. If only we really could speak to those poor, unsure, misguided, lonely kids we were! ha!
A couple of notes, if I may:
1.) now mom will make ang(el) food cake.
2.) though (there)'ll be some hard times to get through.
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Thank you for this great review and the corrections. It's most appreciated. :)
Comment from Raul1
I love the picture you have displayed of yourself. It is a great poem. I have enjoyed reading your life as a little girl. I give this poem a five because of its innocence of your past self. Entertaining poetry. Excellent work! Good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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I love the picture you have displayed of yourself. It is a great poem. I have enjoyed reading your life as a little girl. I give this poem a five because of its innocence of your past self. Entertaining poetry. Excellent work! Good luck!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Thanks Raul. I'm always so pleased to hear from you. :)
