A bustling environment
Calm and peaceful day6 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You noticed all the activity outside here on a summer's day Joanne and for all those who cannot go outside and enjoy nature your brought a taste of it to us here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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You noticed all the activity outside here on a summer's day Joanne and for all those who cannot go outside and enjoy nature your brought a taste of it to us here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Thank you 🙂
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
What a peaceful scene you have created.
A couple of problems:
Para 1, 7th sentence: (Honey bees) should be (Honeybees)
Para 3, 2nd sentence: (waters) should be (water's)
Para 4, 1st sentence: Add comma after (delightful)
Para 5, 2nd sentence: Remove one space between (photo) and (.)
Para 6, 1st sentence: Add comma after (in)
Para 6, 2nd sentence: (a) should be (an)
What a place to view a sunset, very nice.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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What a peaceful scene you have created.
A couple of problems:
Para 1, 7th sentence: (Honey bees) should be (Honeybees)
Para 3, 2nd sentence: (waters) should be (water's)
Para 4, 1st sentence: Add comma after (delightful)
Para 5, 2nd sentence: Remove one space between (photo) and (.)
Para 6, 1st sentence: Add comma after (in)
Para 6, 2nd sentence: (a) should be (an)
What a place to view a sunset, very nice.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Free verse/form poetry contest.
I enjoyed reading it. I also enjoyed your unique style.
I appreciate nature too.
(*<>*)
Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand.
Good luck in the contest.
Well done.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Excellent entry for the Free verse/form poetry contest.
I enjoyed reading it. I also enjoyed your unique style.
I appreciate nature too.
(*<>*)
Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand.
Good luck in the contest.
Well done.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you gypsy 🙂
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I enjoyed this. I think you did a beautiful job with the descriptions in your poem. And I liked how you shared it with a first person narrative. Excellent job and a creative take on the free verse format.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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I enjoyed this. I think you did a beautiful job with the descriptions in your poem. And I liked how you shared it with a first person narrative. Excellent job and a creative take on the free verse format.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much
Comment from Marienkiefer
This is beautiful poetic prose.
With each line you insert one of your impressions, surmising with the reader about the awe of magical moments or occurrences in nature.
-You captured the serenity and the spontaneity of nature.
-Landscape seems like a conveyor belt here with scenes filing by in succession and: dusk unfolds, creating a magnificent golden sunset, one of my favourite lines you wrote.
-Your skill as a writer puts us through a viewfinder so readers are looking around with you at everything that day, under a clear lens of heightened awareness.
Love this poem. Good luck on your entry.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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This is beautiful poetic prose.
With each line you insert one of your impressions, surmising with the reader about the awe of magical moments or occurrences in nature.
-You captured the serenity and the spontaneity of nature.
-Landscape seems like a conveyor belt here with scenes filing by in succession and: dusk unfolds, creating a magnificent golden sunset, one of my favourite lines you wrote.
-Your skill as a writer puts us through a viewfinder so readers are looking around with you at everything that day, under a clear lens of heightened awareness.
Love this poem. Good luck on your entry.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Tom Horonzy
If I could I would walk the walk you wrote about with you. Serenity abounds in every word and it can be read to a child without a pause, or uh or er. Good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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If I could I would walk the walk you wrote about with you. Serenity abounds in every word and it can be read to a child without a pause, or uh or er. Good luck.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you 🙂
