My Water Addicted Grandkids
A slight exaggeration, but he did love his water35 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The author's words were humorous, fun, made me laugh, are descriptive
and creative. I enjoyed the read of these words. I thought about the
author's description of the adventure with the grandchildren! Thank you
for the author's notes - my grandchildren keep me smiling! The artwork
is awesome! Great poem!
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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The author's words were humorous, fun, made me laugh, are descriptive
and creative. I enjoyed the read of these words. I thought about the
author's description of the adventure with the grandchildren! Thank you
for the author's notes - my grandchildren keep me smiling! The artwork
is awesome! Great poem!
Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thanks Maria, as that is so sweet of you and I so appreciate your lovely review and comments. Thanks again my friend!
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed this poem and thought he might end up a surfer or lifeguard,
but I'm glad that he has found enjoyment in fishing.
This verse is charming, humorous, light, and airy.
With all the intense news of the day, this is a perfect
way to start my evening.
The rhymes work well without force, creating a quick tempo
that flows like a children's story.
The photo adds life and dimension to the verse.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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I enjoyed this poem and thought he might end up a surfer or lifeguard,
but I'm glad that he has found enjoyment in fishing.
This verse is charming, humorous, light, and airy.
With all the intense news of the day, this is a perfect
way to start my evening.
The rhymes work well without force, creating a quick tempo
that flows like a children's story.
The photo adds life and dimension to the verse.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Kitty, you are so sweet! And I appreciate you appreciating my poem. I just added a couple pictures that go with the poem as she was supposed to be the look out for him and her expression is so guilty! Thank you so much again my friend!
Comment from RodG
You make it easy for us to visualize Connor getting into trouble with water whether inside or out. You also describe your own reactions very well. Your meter and rhythm, however, is very inconsistent and it should be in a rhyming poem.
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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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You make it easy for us to visualize Connor getting into trouble with water whether inside or out. You also describe your own reactions very well. Your meter and rhythm, however, is very inconsistent and it should be in a rhyming poem.
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Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thank you Rod, but I edited this until the rhyme was in perfect scheme. I wonder if you read this with the few commas being your guide. I'd be interested to hear if that might have been the problem. And unfortunately we sometimes have to use some exaggeration to make our writing more interesting, he really did love his water. Yet I am a very particular grandma and watched them close. I do thank you for reading my poem and for the kind comments.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is my reply, Mystery Author ~
You oughta watch those grans near any wata
cause you know they're gonna do a lot-a
crazy stuff--they just gotta
Your contest entry was fun to read. You gave
readers great detail in a fun, rhymed way. the
image is perfect, too.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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This is my reply, Mystery Author ~
You oughta watch those grans near any wata
cause you know they're gonna do a lot-a
crazy stuff--they just gotta
Your contest entry was fun to read. You gave
readers great detail in a fun, rhymed way. the
image is perfect, too.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Lol, I know, what a bad grandma! Actually I did watch them closer, and I might have added a little exaggeration, but they truly loved the water
Thanks for the great review and fun comments my friend!.
Comment from Nikki Marie
This was very well written and I really enjoyed it! There's nothing more precious than grandkids, my grandmother raised me and even though she's passed on she still remains a constant inspiration for my writing
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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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This was very well written and I really enjoyed it! There's nothing more precious than grandkids, my grandmother raised me and even though she's passed on she still remains a constant inspiration for my writing
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Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much Nikki and I had a lot of fun writing this slightly exaggerated poem of these silly kids. But they really did love their water!
I do appreciate your lovely review and kind comments my friend.
