Choices
Our free will determines the person we become.3 total reviews
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. I Agree 110%. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. I Agree 110%. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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Thanks for the read and review.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Hello, I love the idea behind this 5-7-5, and I feel you are onto something meaningful here. For me, though, the last word "become" doesn't work. It seems awkward. Perhaps a word like "future" would fit better?
Either way, good luck in the contest.
Take care,
Erika
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
Hello, I love the idea behind this 5-7-5, and I feel you are onto something meaningful here. For me, though, the last word "become" doesn't work. It seems awkward. Perhaps a word like "future" would fit better?
Either way, good luck in the contest.
Take care,
Erika
Comment Written 29-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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Become means the choices make us who we are. My interpretation, thanks for the suggestion, but I think I will stick with become as used by Gordon Allport in his book "Becoming".
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I just looked up Gordon Allport and the concept of reconciling the two modes of becoming?tribal and personal. Since that is the basis of using the word become, perhaps your readers would enjoy an author?s note regarding Allport? I found the concept to be fascinating.
Thanks for sharing.
Erika.
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Great idea, Thanks.
Comment from mermaids
I like your theme here, we do have choices to make and we can choose good or evil. You have written a poem that makes the reader think and is true to life. Excellent use of words.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
I like your theme here, we do have choices to make and we can choose good or evil. You have written a poem that makes the reader think and is true to life. Excellent use of words.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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Thanks for the read and encouraging review.