Pioneers
They worked hard.5 total reviews
Comment from samantha0930
I like how the first letter of each line is a different color to accentuate the word they spell for the acrostic poem, and I also like the rhyming. The picture goes well with the poem too. I'm a little skeptical about how much the details would have been accurate though, like I'm unsure how old hopscotch is but it could be a really old game, but mainly I feel like ice cream isn't something that a kid on a farm in the middle of nowhere with no refrigeration would have access to.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
  |
I like how the first letter of each line is a different color to accentuate the word they spell for the acrostic poem, and I also like the rhyming. The picture goes well with the poem too. I'm a little skeptical about how much the details would have been accurate though, like I'm unsure how old hopscotch is but it could be a really old game, but mainly I feel like ice cream isn't something that a kid on a farm in the middle of nowhere with no refrigeration would have access to.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
-
Did you read my other contest entries?
-
This is a blind contest; I don't know what your other poems are and can't look at them.
-
My name is pookietoo.
Comment from zanya
This poem, despite its brevity, achieves quite a lot- it's a slice of social history essentially , opening a window on the lives and mores of the Pioneers- has my vote
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
 |
This poem, despite its brevity, achieves quite a lot- it's a slice of social history essentially , opening a window on the lives and mores of the Pioneers- has my vote
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
-
Thanks for the six stars!!!
-
Have you read my 5-7-5 Look Inside Yourself and My Sister poems?
-
Did you receive my reply?
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet, you have 3 votes now.
This is an un usual topic for me not being American.
Yes pioneers had a lot of work preparing and sowing the land.
Children helped doing chores but they did go to school and had time to play ( I watched little House on the prairie, the series was dubbed in Italian)
It's a shame though that the white man was greedy and stole the land from the Native Indians. Treaties were always broken.
White man killed the Indians and did a good job in exterminating their main source of food ; the bison.
Not all were evil though.
PS: No need to review just read at leisure , it's a poem I wrote : White Man s Shame ( read also the notes below , they are very enlightening)
https://fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?hd=1&id=934858
Ciao!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
|
Ciao poet, you have 3 votes now.
This is an un usual topic for me not being American.
Yes pioneers had a lot of work preparing and sowing the land.
Children helped doing chores but they did go to school and had time to play ( I watched little House on the prairie, the series was dubbed in Italian)
It's a shame though that the white man was greedy and stole the land from the Native Indians. Treaties were always broken.
White man killed the Indians and did a good job in exterminating their main source of food ; the bison.
Not all were evil though.
PS: No need to review just read at leisure , it's a poem I wrote : White Man s Shame ( read also the notes below , they are very enlightening)
https://fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?hd=1&id=934858
Ciao!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
-
Thanks for the votes, have you read my ,5-7-5 contest entry! called
Look Inside Yourself?
Count all of your friends, have many not a few.
Our dear Savior; he fell and conquered all too.
Understand that we all have trials to face.
Nobody on earth is perfect, feel of God's grace.
Thank Heavenly Father when you pray each day.
You are special and unique in every way.
Offer to help some dear friends that went astray.
Use lots of good judgment each and every day.
Realize when it's time to read a good book.
Beautiful things are everywhere that you look.
Look at rainbows, butterflies, hear the birds sing.
Enjoy little blessings every day may bring.
Say "thank you" to your kids, your husband, and wife.
Snow gently falling down will glisten to trees.
Ice cream with toppings is a delicious treat.
Notice when a small child is crossing the .
Gratitude's important each day of your life.
Show unconditional love to your dear wife.
November 4, 2020
Did you receive my reply?
-
I checked your portfolio but it only goes back to July 9th 2021 last entry Blue.
I wanted to leave a comment and a vote.
I think the word friend is overused. True friends are hard to go by .. i think through the pandemic many so called friends have shown their true colours.
Fake Friends are everywhere when all is good but when you are in need they have no time even to lend a shoulder.
Ice-cream in my country is quite a treat because many shops owners make and sell their own homemade .
That said I don?t eat it , I find it doesn?t t help me quench my thirst in Summer.
I love yoghurt.
I?m starting to treasure books and I have always cherished Nature , my walks in our pine forests and woods.
I also love taking pics of rainbows .
And I?m trying to have a better relationship with God.
Ciao!
-
Where did my count your blessings poem come from? I revised it today, but I did not know I posted it on here
Did you get a chance to read my Look Inside Yourself contest entry?
-
I thought you posted to me .. it came without title but you left a date at the end Nov.4 2020 . I went to check it on your portfolio but like I said the last entry is Blue. 9th July 2021.
I will check your Look Inside Yourself, poem this afternoon.. chores must be done first ( wink)
-
Title is count your blessings. I changed the poem from what you saw.
Comment from Bill Schott
This acrostic poem, PIONEERS, follows the vertical first-letter theme and offers a glimpse into the lives of the people who boldly pushed out from their comfort zone to make a new life.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
|
This acrostic poem, PIONEERS, follows the vertical first-letter theme and offers a glimpse into the lives of the people who boldly pushed out from their comfort zone to make a new life.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
-
Yes, thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good acrostic poem. The font is large and easy to read. I like that you made the first letters of each line red. It makes the acrostic word more prominent. Your rhyme scheme was just okay because you used two of the end rhyme words twice~"do and too". It's not hard to write a rhyming poem if you repeat the same words.
You also repeat back-to-back two lines using the word "chores". One of the chores could have been ~job, task or another synonym.
The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
|
This is a good acrostic poem. The font is large and easy to read. I like that you made the first letters of each line red. It makes the acrostic word more prominent. Your rhyme scheme was just okay because you used two of the end rhyme words twice~"do and too". It's not hard to write a rhyming poem if you repeat the same words.
You also repeat back-to-back two lines using the word "chores". One of the chores could have been ~job, task or another synonym.
The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
-
Thanks!
-
You are welcome.
-
I changed the poem a little.
-
I wish I had read it before you entered the contest. lol It is better. Thanks for being receptive to my suggestions!
-
Thanks for your suggestions.
