Roommates Forever
Door Slammed3 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
your first sentence needs edited. you can't change it. Hall is not hallway.
I liked this one. It's one of the best ones I've read. the voice in the piece is good and strong and the turnaround at the end is welcome and satisfying rather than feeling tacked on.
Good job
GMG
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Hi there,
your first sentence needs edited. you can't change it. Hall is not hallway.
I liked this one. It's one of the best ones I've read. the voice in the piece is good and strong and the turnaround at the end is welcome and satisfying rather than feeling tacked on.
Good job
GMG
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow, the ghosts that stalk the prison walls and the hopelessness of the inmates who feel life is not worth living, this is a powerful and poignant write for the contest, a winner for sure, love Dolly x
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Wow, the ghosts that stalk the prison walls and the hopelessness of the inmates who feel life is not worth living, this is a powerful and poignant write for the contest, a winner for sure, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
Comment from kahpot
One lonely spirit waiting for company, an excellent read and story, the build up for the ending is wonderful, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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One lonely spirit waiting for company, an excellent read and story, the build up for the ending is wonderful, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
