The Path to Freedom
Freeing one's self to express35 total reviews
Comment from estory
This is an interesting take on the sonnet form, very different in theme and mood, but still definitely in this classic rhymed form. It seems to celebrate the determination to persevere in the face of adversity, the moment of breaking the chains even if it is a symbolic break. I liked the last couplet. Very musical. estory
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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This is an interesting take on the sonnet form, very different in theme and mood, but still definitely in this classic rhymed form. It seems to celebrate the determination to persevere in the face of adversity, the moment of breaking the chains even if it is a symbolic break. I liked the last couplet. Very musical. estory
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you - I'm thrilled you liked it :-)
Mike
Comment from Bill Schott
This sonnet, The Path to Freedom, has the proper formatting and seems to be celebrating the end of a bad case of writer's block.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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This sonnet, The Path to Freedom, has the proper formatting and seems to be celebrating the end of a bad case of writer's block.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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lol, thanks Bill - you certainly saw through the the basis of it there :-)
Mike
Comment from Sally Law
I'm not sure what the message is here, and hopefully it's open to interruption. The flow and subject work nicely together, Mike. Beautifully penned Sonnet from your talented hand.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for your writing endeavors,
Sal :))
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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I'm not sure what the message is here, and hopefully it's open to interruption. The flow and subject work nicely together, Mike. Beautifully penned Sonnet from your talented hand.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for your writing endeavors,
Sal :))
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Tha ks so much, Sally :-). I consider all my poetry open to interpretation, so no worries there!
Mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I know you enjoy writing poetry that causes your reader to ponder. Here in the US, there is a lot of talk about our freedoms. Americans don't like their freedoms being infringed upon. There's been a lot of discussion of a Civil War. This talk is becoming more and more common. I have a feeling it will get very interesting after the November election. This really does have something to do with your poem. I enjoyed reading. It's a great poem.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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I know you enjoy writing poetry that causes your reader to ponder. Here in the US, there is a lot of talk about our freedoms. Americans don't like their freedoms being infringed upon. There's been a lot of discussion of a Civil War. This talk is becoming more and more common. I have a feeling it will get very interesting after the November election. This really does have something to do with your poem. I enjoyed reading. It's a great poem.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Whatever thought journeys my poem triggered are legitimate as far as I'm concerned. It's very much about how we interpret freedom and whether we can allow ourselves to enjoy it. Thank you for sharing your response :-).
Mike
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Confusing for more novice readers. The path to freedom is at hand and yet the line in the sand is unbreakable?? And peritropal?? what is that? I find no definition. Something muted and silent I guess, for a mime? Lastly, I thought line three paragraph three was clever: "with unclean words - the terrorists of terse - and then end with "that writhe and burst to redefine 'obscene" when I keep hearing obscenity. idk Poetic license being what it is, anything is acceptable.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Confusing for more novice readers. The path to freedom is at hand and yet the line in the sand is unbreakable?? And peritropal?? what is that? I find no definition. Something muted and silent I guess, for a mime? Lastly, I thought line three paragraph three was clever: "with unclean words - the terrorists of terse - and then end with "that writhe and burst to redefine 'obscene" when I keep hearing obscenity. idk Poetic license being what it is, anything is acceptable.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Tom. I appreciate the feedback. :-)
Mike
Comment from AbbyeK7
Interesting. What do you want to be freed from? I like the image. Your word pictures are great. So it seems like you are a writer struggling to write what you want without others' expectations. Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Interesting. What do you want to be freed from? I like the image. Your word pictures are great. So it seems like you are a writer struggling to write what you want without others' expectations. Good job.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you :-). I'd say you've picked up my feelings just about right.
Mike
Comment from Dawn Munro
I enjoyed the read very much, thank you -- it positively 'sings', and I've added to my knowledge and vocabulary too. Poetry doesn't get any better than this, IMHO - wonderfully thought-provoking, uncommon end rhyme, perfect meter -- what's not to enjoy? The presentation, too, is stunning!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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I enjoyed the read very much, thank you -- it positively 'sings', and I've added to my knowledge and vocabulary too. Poetry doesn't get any better than this, IMHO - wonderfully thought-provoking, uncommon end rhyme, perfect meter -- what's not to enjoy? The presentation, too, is stunning!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much, Dawn. Your lovely response has given me a lift this afternoon. I'll spend the rest of the day with a smile :-)
Mike
Comment from jp88
Beautiful! Really enjoyable, the flow is perfect, and the images this awakes are quite something. My favourite line would be "My bonds, they take the form of blocking thoughts" and I think it would resonate incredibly well with pretty much anyone who reads this. Lovely job.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Beautiful! Really enjoyable, the flow is perfect, and the images this awakes are quite something. My favourite line would be "My bonds, they take the form of blocking thoughts" and I think it would resonate incredibly well with pretty much anyone who reads this. Lovely job.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much! I was unsure about this one, but people seem to be vibing with it :-)
Mike
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow, you really put the reader to the test!
Trying to understand and make sense of this quizzical verse. I like the interesting rhymes you chose and the rhythm is such that this dances along. I love phrases such as terrorists of terse! The alliteration has a wonderful taste.
My favorite verse is the final one where you sing the praises for being unclothed with passion on the wing emancipating dreams of which I sing.
Thanks for sharing this liberating poem!
I go away feeling alive with passion!
Jesse
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Wow, you really put the reader to the test!
Trying to understand and make sense of this quizzical verse. I like the interesting rhymes you chose and the rhythm is such that this dances along. I love phrases such as terrorists of terse! The alliteration has a wonderful taste.
My favorite verse is the final one where you sing the praises for being unclothed with passion on the wing emancipating dreams of which I sing.
Thanks for sharing this liberating poem!
I go away feeling alive with passion!
Jesse
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Jesse :-). I like to write stuff that the reader is free to interpret, and yes - the theme of this was very much freeing ourselves from our own paths.
Mike
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Freedom to interpret is always a good thing in writing poetry.
Thanks, Mike, for allowing the freedom!
Jesse
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine sonnet freeing us from our chains and emancipating our dreams. To feel such liberty we must first conform and work hard in life and have some integrity, we can then relax and bathe in our efforts. Well chosen word and fine metre in this skilfully written sonnet, much enjoyed Mike, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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A fine sonnet freeing us from our chains and emancipating our dreams. To feel such liberty we must first conform and work hard in life and have some integrity, we can then relax and bathe in our efforts. Well chosen word and fine metre in this skilfully written sonnet, much enjoyed Mike, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much, Dolly :-). A sonnet sixer from you means a lot. More to the point, I'm really happy you liked it!
Mike
