The Path to Freedom
Freeing one's self to express35 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I would like very much to see your poems collected in a book like the Cambridge School edition of Shakespeare's plays, where you (rather than the alternative expert) gave us a page of explanations for each page of poetry. It's not through laziness, just I would love to know how different your interpretation is from mine.
I see this poem as winning the fight to find the time and space to write. The route to your true destiny. Kate xx
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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I would like very much to see your poems collected in a book like the Cambridge School edition of Shakespeare's plays, where you (rather than the alternative expert) gave us a page of explanations for each page of poetry. It's not through laziness, just I would love to know how different your interpretation is from mine.
I see this poem as winning the fight to find the time and space to write. The route to your true destiny. Kate xx
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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I knew you'd get it, Kate - the constant battle with myself to get on with things, to believe I can write something worthwhile. The egocentric part of me loves the idea of pairing poems with explanations, although I'd also want to include my favourite interpretations from those who've read them!
Mike
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You could do this. It would be a great project for the winter evenings, no? K
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting cacophony of sounds. The images surreal and loosely defined. The poem stays on point. The form is mostly a refusal of form with enough rhyme to be disconcerting. It certainly speaks of freedom in poetry.
Thanks for a piece to ponder.
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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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An interesting cacophony of sounds. The images surreal and loosely defined. The poem stays on point. The form is mostly a refusal of form with enough rhyme to be disconcerting. It certainly speaks of freedom in poetry.
Thanks for a piece to ponder.
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Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you - I'm really glad you liked it :-)
Mike
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You are welcome. I push these past the rules also. I don't use meter I find it makes my poems too forced.
Comment from jessizero
I really admire that tricky rhyme scheme! This was a great poem on many levels. Thank you so much for sharing this poem here, and best wishes to you.
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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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I really admire that tricky rhyme scheme! This was a great poem on many levels. Thank you so much for sharing this poem here, and best wishes to you.
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Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you :-). I did it by accident in the first pair of lines, then tried it for the next two. Suddenly, I'd boxed myself in, but it turned out that was perfect for a poem about getting in one's own way and finding routes to escape from that.
Mike
Comment from Laurie Holding
I love your writing; knew it was someone I'd read before, your style such a standout in this crowd. You've handled the sonnet form professionally, and I wonder if you're like me, waggling your fingers up to all ten while you read your final copy aloud, listening for the iambs. Beautifully done, and worthy of my six stars.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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I love your writing; knew it was someone I'd read before, your style such a standout in this crowd. You've handled the sonnet form professionally, and I wonder if you're like me, waggling your fingers up to all ten while you read your final copy aloud, listening for the iambs. Beautifully done, and worthy of my six stars.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much :-). I always do a quick check of syllables and feet once I've finished, but I find the meter more a case of instinct than structure. Of course, I can't rely on that because sometimes my instinct is to rebel, lol. I'm thrilled you liked this one!
Mike
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Mike,
This is truly awesome work. I really enjoyed all of your poems I've read so far.
This one is dark and foreboding at first; you really expressed being enslaved very eloquently.
The last stanza is a powerful conclusion.
Good luck with this one, Mike,
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Mike,
This is truly awesome work. I really enjoyed all of your poems I've read so far.
This one is dark and foreboding at first; you really expressed being enslaved very eloquently.
The last stanza is a powerful conclusion.
Good luck with this one, Mike,
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much, Cindy :-). I've been feeling trapped for a few days, unable to get the pen inspired, so I decided to write about that sensation to see whether I could exorcise the demons!
Mike
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You?re welcome, Mike. Sometimes I too feel confined (without physical bars or chains.
Have a nice day. I hope everyone around you is safe from the heat and the fires.
Blessings,
Cindy
