The Path to Freedom
Freeing one's self to express35 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
I like your style, neo-beatnik in flavor covering a wide range of emotionally charged subjects, some with a political bent to them. I like the ending the best.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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I like your style, neo-beatnik in flavor covering a wide range of emotionally charged subjects, some with a political bent to them. I like the ending the best.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Jake. I'm really glad you liked it :-).
Mike
Comment from lyenochka
But will those "unclean words" become clean after the soul is freed from the bonds of censorship? But perhaps those "bonds" could be other "thoughts" that holds the poet back? Let your verses sing!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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But will those "unclean words" become clean after the soul is freed from the bonds of censorship? But perhaps those "bonds" could be other "thoughts" that holds the poet back? Let your verses sing!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Hmm, methinks you may have thought the same as I was when I wrote this. I've had a few days of holding myself back with doubts (something Ru Paul calls 'the inner saboteur'), so (inspired by something I reviewed yesterday) I thought I'd write about that.
Thank you :-)
Mike
Comment from Janice Canerdy
My review of this DEEP philosophical poem will be--to put it kindly--lacking in depth! The idea of drawing that line in the sand can be
positive--I'm now going to stand my ground!--or positive--standing my ground has been counterproductive, and that "line" must be obliterated!
To me, the poem is about being one's worst enemy. Obscenity~~~
Potter Stewart (1915-1985), associate justice of the Supreme Court from 1958 to 1981, is frequently remembered for his famous nondefinition of obscenity: "I know it when I see it."
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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My review of this DEEP philosophical poem will be--to put it kindly--lacking in depth! The idea of drawing that line in the sand can be
positive--I'm now going to stand my ground!--or positive--standing my ground has been counterproductive, and that "line" must be obliterated!
To me, the poem is about being one's worst enemy. Obscenity~~~
Potter Stewart (1915-1985), associate justice of the Supreme Court from 1958 to 1981, is frequently remembered for his famous nondefinition of obscenity: "I know it when I see it."
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Janice - you understood me perfectly. Those lines can be a real issue, whether we're crossing them, bound by them or following them. What we have to remember is that we created them, so they're just markers, and markers can be adjusted.
Mike
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THANKS! I just realized I said "positive" twice"! You knew what I meant! :-)
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yeah, I realised :-)
Comment from Michaela Moore
Your rhymes are incredibly intelligent because they are the only words that could possibly work in your poem, and, behold, they rhyme! I tend to avoid creating rhyming works because I can't seem to weld the power of both diction and rhyme enough. And yes, many times...too many, our bonds as writers are our own blocking thoughts, whether those thoughts are imprisoned in our mind from others suffocating us with their putrid overstated opinions, or from our own insecurities. They are still what binds our most creative selves. I have read your poem 5 times now, and with each read, I see more and more meaning for me as a writer. Cheers!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Your rhymes are incredibly intelligent because they are the only words that could possibly work in your poem, and, behold, they rhyme! I tend to avoid creating rhyming works because I can't seem to weld the power of both diction and rhyme enough. And yes, many times...too many, our bonds as writers are our own blocking thoughts, whether those thoughts are imprisoned in our mind from others suffocating us with their putrid overstated opinions, or from our own insecurities. They are still what binds our most creative selves. I have read your poem 5 times now, and with each read, I see more and more meaning for me as a writer. Cheers!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Aww, you'll make me blush :-). I think rhyming can be a blessing and a curse. If I'm struggling to meet a scheme, I'll often switch and change form or just write it free verse. That said, when the right word slots into place and it rhymes and fits and feels natural... Well, we all know how good that feels! I've had a low few days, doubting everything I tried to write, so I decided to write about that instead.
Mike
Comment from nomi338
Awesome! A song of freedom that frees not only the author, but the reader is freed of his very own bonds at the same time. I know I certainly feel a lot more free after having read this wonderful verse.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Awesome! A song of freedom that frees not only the author, but the reader is freed of his very own bonds at the same time. I know I certainly feel a lot more free after having read this wonderful verse.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much - what an awesome review :-)
Mike
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks Raul :-)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Interesting and unique poem about....I have no idea. It's well rhymed, though.
I like your presentation.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Interesting and unique poem about....I have no idea. It's well rhymed, though.
I like your presentation.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Gypsy - sometimes, the flow is all we need :-)
Mike
Comment from Tina Crute
"So, by design, I'll break the phantom curse" made me cheer the most. I was like, yes! On purpose I will write what I want. What I liked most about this poem was it's fervency of purpose, to cross the line, break through to freedom of expression.
Well done:)
Tina
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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"So, by design, I'll break the phantom curse" made me cheer the most. I was like, yes! On purpose I will write what I want. What I liked most about this poem was it's fervency of purpose, to cross the line, break through to freedom of expression.
Well done:)
Tina
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much, Tina :-). Your triumphant words have cheered me up this morning!
Mike
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You are welcome! Your poems are hard to decipher for this newby, of sorts, but well worth each reading.
Have a good evening,
Tina
Comment from John Ciarmello
I've always believed if it belongs in a piece as an enhancement to character or situation, then so be it. If you shy away for fear of offending you're not being fair to yourself as a writer or your reader. Thanks for sharing this, Mike. Best, JohnC.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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I've always believed if it belongs in a piece as an enhancement to character or situation, then so be it. If you shy away for fear of offending you're not being fair to yourself as a writer or your reader. Thanks for sharing this, Mike. Best, JohnC.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thanks, John. I totally agree - as writers, we can't be afraid to write things. It's up to the reader how they respond to them.
Mike
Comment from royowen
Wow, this one is taxes my limited intellectual resources Mike. I was wondering what "peritropil mimes" I couldn't find it in google or the dictionary, and my spellchecker didn't like it, this ine threw me a bit, not going to pretend I'm clever, but everything else was great, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Wow, this one is taxes my limited intellectual resources Mike. I was wondering what "peritropil mimes" I couldn't find it in google or the dictionary, and my spellchecker didn't like it, this ine threw me a bit, not going to pretend I'm clever, but everything else was great, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Roy. Peritropy is the act of circling repeatedly/endlessly (related to entropy, word-wise), like a stock car race on a round trap with infinite laps. So I saw the peritropal mimes as my soundless saboteurs, telling ,e the same story over and over again, and me having to ignore it every time.
Mike
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Thanks Mike
